I cant keep a secret (swaron os) *replies*

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Posted: 12 years ago
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I cant keep a secret (swaron os)

sharon : enough is enough. what the hell does he thinks of himself. subh se das bar call try chuki hun but sir ke pass mere liye tym hi nahi hai...i am fed up of all dis this now...woh kuch dino se mujhe ignore karne laga hai...

poor sharon who had been calling swayam since the morning but his husband was way too busy in managing his company...so she tries to take out her anger by talking to herself...

sharon : am i thinking more than necessary...i mean maybe he is busy in his work...but inta bhi busy ki mujhe bhul jaaye...i remember the days of college where he used to do certain thing only to see a smile on my face...The Majnu!!!

she chuckels for a sec but then a layer of sadness formed on her face...and she said in a cute childish tone in a tit bit of hurt reflecting...

I m missing my majnu!!!

your majnu is always at your service...said a moist eyed swayam...yes he listened to each and every word sharon spoke...he returned from the company and was hell lot of frustrated on an employee...he was about to enter the room in anger when he saw sharon sitting there with their marriage album...he waited there patiently to know what actually she was thinking...when he heard her say that he actually realized he is not spending even a minute of peace and love with her...he is keeping busy but she is his wife and more than dat his lady love...how could he forget her...he felt very sad...he went there and without uttering a word hugged her like someone is taking her away from him...she hugged him back too...obviously after spending so much of time together sharon ne bhi swaym par Phd kar li thi...toh she cud sense wat he felt...

i am sorry shona...mujhe samjha hi nahi ki kab main itna busy ho gaya ki tumhe tym hi nahi de paya... i hurt u...i m sorry...said swayam still hugging her...

sharon (breaking the hug) : i understand ki tum busy the...but

swayam ( little worried) : but...??

sharon ( evident naughtiness in her eyes) ( raising on het toes a bit...circling her hands around his neck whispers in his ears..) : u will hav to pay back mister...

swayam (tilting a bit to reach her ear and whispers in the same way ) :wait and watch how i pay back shona...
and with dat he carries her in his arms her hands in the same position...but now playing with his hairs sweetly...lays her down on the bed..places a peck on her forehead and says..

swayam : i will come in two minutes...love u

he went out...and came back after a few minutes...lays besides her holding her hand...

sharon : i missed you...

swaym(giggles) : shona main do minute ke liye bahar gaya tha...u r so cute...
caressing her face...

sharon (slapping her head): God is great!! (looking up)...dumbo i meant i missed The majnu side of urs...haww..

swayam..(bit his tongue for a millisecond) : ohh like dat...chalo lets sleep now...fir kaljaldi bhi toh uthna hai...

sharon (confused) : why?? something special..??

Swayam (to himself) : damn i cant keep a secret !!!!!
(to sharon): woh...actually...kal subh meri imp meeting hai so...
(to himself): thank God !!!

sharon : ohh...i thought...forget it..(disheartened) lets go to sleep then...saying this she places her head on his shoulder and tightens her grip around his arm...

Swayam (again to himself) : (thinking about that look) i am sorry par...i know u like surprises so ...i will make sure that you have your best time tomorrow...correction :WE ...OUR
and sleeps too holding his shona...





P.S : I know its not nice at all...but my first one so try too understand...:P...well tell me how it was...criticize most welcome...!!

P.P.S: it does has a second part...in case u liked this one like deja-vu or coincidence...i wud post it...

Rohan :(




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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hy rohan
Congrts for the first OS glad its about swaron
Love the title very attracting
I can understand ur feeling coz it wznt long ago wen i wrote ma first os and was very scared of ppl reaction but i guess swaron fans r very kind here.
And ur OS is much much much better thn.ma first one dude so dnt worry
Am gna wait for the update plz do pm 👍🏼
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey Rohan,
Kya baat hai itni jaldi humari baat maan li...
Very good very good!
Coming to the OS it was really good... I'm impressed
Loved the cute moments of Swaron 😳
Aur yeh kya pehle hi attempt main cliff-hanger?! 😆
Well eagerly waiting to read the next part..
Please update soon 😃

P.S Thanks for the PM 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey rohan...nice Starr...,I love the Sharon self talk and how swayam forgets all his anger listening to sharon...hope the surprise surprise us too




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Posted: 12 years ago
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Nice work do continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
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supa cute , first try then gr8 job buddy , i noe how it feels for first tym , i m relly waiting for next part do update soon n thanks for the pm .😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey 1st congratulation rohan on becomeing writer.
Btw os is amaging.
Whole os was written beautyfully.
I loved it.
Plz plz plz write 2nd part of ths os too.

Nd yeah do write more nd more u hv brillian abailty of writing.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey rohan
as you said, it is your first OS , this is also my first swaron story i am reading and the way described sharon's feelings , is awesome!
So there is a surprise he is planning for her! Lets see for how long he can keep the surprise a secret😉
Do continue soon ! And don't forget to PM the next part as well😃
thanks for the PM!
Nice it is😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
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unres😊

so glad to see u writing

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Hey Rohan..

Its really great to see u writing...writing is is not just meant for entertaining others...its a medium to express those hidden emotions ...when u feel very happy...emotional...or sad...try to write...u will feel much better ...its just like sharing ur feelings wid a frnd 😊

Enough of my lecture...a big congratulation on ur 1st Oneshot on SwaRon..lovely start...

They are cute...romantic...madly in love...Sharon missing Swayam 's majnu side..Swayam listening to her amd trying to mend his mistake...its beautifully written...

Cant wait to see Swayam's surprise 😊...it will be amazing 😊

Continue soon ...

--
Deepika



Edited by deep_Tanha - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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very very cute!
loved it!
cant wait for his surprise!
update soon!

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