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_disha_

@_disha_

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#11

DDD !

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Finally the newest writer in IF land makes her debut !

And I would say new only technically based on the fact that this is your first story on IF but definitely not literally cause your writing reflects precision and detailing which imitates those of a seasoned writer.

What shall i say that others have not mentioned or for that matter even i have not expressed earlier to you ... the Prologue is fascinating and gripping ..there could be so many possibilities like who the woman in question is and whose baby it is !

The comparison of the weather outside and the storm brewing in side the heart and mind of this woman was beautifully depicted !

The feeling a mother gets when she sees her child snuggled into her chest is actually so difficult to describe its almost an out-worldly experience but you have managed to do that also so endearingly.

Needless to say you have in me an ardent follower now keep churning out the updates !

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kondhili

@kondhili

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#12

Your Liz Mol here sandy baby 🤗

Congratulations sweetheart...This was one dhamakedar debut.

I always knew that you would make one amazing writer and did you deliver to your promise. 👍🏼⭐️

Loved the prologue i was gripped right from the word go. As much as i would want to make a few wild guesses on who this sad, heartbroken mother is or who the child is for that matter i think i am going to refrain myself. 🤓

The whole thing might just blow up on my face 😆

Intrigued by the prologue, the writing was effortless and oh so vivid, sandy i am hooked and can't wait to read the rest.

P.S: So another thread where a bunch of us can play the amazing Res Game 😆

And i am glad that you decided to use this banner.

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aashi12

@aashi12

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#13

r!

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if i hadn't read the comments above mine , i swear i would have doubted that its your first ever Ff!

This prologue from the beggining gave me goosebumps!
From the scene to the set! Evrything was alive, your words and your story telling technique, had me completely knotted in this prologue..

I'm not guessing who that girl can be, but surely that elderly women is here to take that child away from his mother.. She doesn't want it but her hands are tied!

The eyes colour says, that the child is either Arnav or his son!.

You showed the plight of mother well in contrast with the weather outside.. Her sufferings echoed in the strom outside!

Just bring up the 1st chp ASAP!

All the best!

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gmsk

@gmsk

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#14

Finally u updated d prologue..i had book markd it already, :P

And u r dam good man..

Where were u hidding all this time 😆

Pless pless continue this sooon..

And pless do PM me whn eva u update next.. ill b sendng a buddy req too :D

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rulama

@rulama

Sparkler

+ 8

Posted: 12 years ago

#15

Loved it dear!

Waiting to read the next update.

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tanu3579

@tanu3579

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#16

wow.. tht was amazing :)...

i think the baby is arnav.. is it?? i m sure we wud get more hints if nt the confirmation in the next one.. so .. waiting fr next :)

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Iqra

@Iqraimran

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#17

that's unbelievable, u write first time.

but that's really interesting, I don't get whether that girl arnav mother or some one else.

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anumadduri

@anumadduri

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#18

Oh wow that was such a great start !!!! The element of mystery that carried though the entire prologue was stunning . You could feel the pain she felt at the thought of giving up the baby !!!

I for one cannot believe this is your first time writing . But to be frank am not surprised as your comments on the stories which we read in common are fabulous . They are so in depth and full of life. Seriously the finesse in the writing is astounding . Have to say a tremendous start .

Pls do continue . Looking forward for more . And I will do the stalking from my end ;)

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-Chudel-

@-Chudel-

Inactive

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#19

I have refrained from commenting on any of the stories here but for you I gladly make an exception. :-)

"She wished she were stronger. She wished she were independent. She wished she didn't care for the opinion of the mudslinging world."

I think this is one wish we all have made at some point of our lives. This woman though, can never be forgiven. I abhor weaknesses and cowards and she appears to be both and I have nothing but pity for her.

I think, the baby could be either Arnav or Khushi. Life is a humorous and terrible thing, depending upon how we look at it. Let's see how the characters take it.

I'll come along for the ride either way. All the best for this story!