SwaRon SS :10 days Without You ❤️..Ch- 1..Pg-1

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@Death_Memories

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#91

Commenting in pinky pink since you are a sizzler now...
anyways sorry for the late comment(mentally slapping myself)
Coming to the update
Loved the introductory scene with papa swayam convo.
swayam was about to kiss rishi dreaming about Sharon.Majnu ka kabhi kuch nhi ho sakta.
Loved papa's teasing.Really wanted to see this kind of bonding between father and Son.Swayam's expressions were awesomely penned down...
Pehla Nasha ringtone haayee...
Loved the caring and panicked majnu part.He was about to shift to her house awww always the majnu swayam.Sharon's concern for his health was written beautiful even though she needed someone she did not want him to catch the disease Majnu swayam ki Diva cum laila sharon.
I could see him pouting when sharon told him that they cannot meet for ten days...
the last line of his stole my heart and i know it stole Sharon's too..
Loved how you kept the characters just as they were yet it was so different and beautiful.You have a certain way with words which make the readers fall in love with story.Update soon Can't wait for the next part
Love you Dii

Edited by cenation123 - 12 years ago

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kriti094

@kriti094

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#92

I m really late in reading this updt

but seriopusly d first chapter is really amazing

I just luv ur style of writing

plz continue soon

n ya don't forget to pm me

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Lubna

@8JSmileyFace8J

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#93

Sorry for the late reply!!!

i can't believe your finally back to writing!!

and i didn't even know!!!

it was a great start!!

the dream was soo...dreamy!!!

and i loved the whole chapter!!!

ggreat job!!

im so glad your writing again!!

I can't wait to read more!!!

CONTINUE SOON!!!!!

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Vaibhavi

@SilverStar01

Beginner

Posted: 12 years ago

#94

Back with a bang!!

Awesome update...

our lover boy dreaming about his siren 😳

Love swayam and swayam's dad conv

update soon

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Nikita

@--coco--

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#95

Interesting story, would love to see it unfold.

ps: The link to chapter 2 is not working.

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Roger

@HPHolic-3

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#96

Yo Dii back with a bang. 😎
Loved first chapter
Mr shekhawat n swayam part was amusing 😆
Update next part soon.:)

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sneha singh

@swaron9113

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#97

Okay 1stly sowii for ths late cment.

Wow superv concep amagingly written.

P.s.-pta h di i was thnkg jb ap sare upd8 kr dange.
Mai tb pdhunge. 🤣
bt maine pdh lia ab nxt chappy ka wait kaise kru?
*pout*

plz upd8 naaa...

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prateek

@prateek.007

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#98

Finally u are back with an awesome concept..The whole OS was amazingly written..I like it..
U know u'r written work is always amazing..No fact.. its a great work..Keep writing..
Thanx for the PM
And sorry for being late and chota comment..

Prateek

Edited by prateekdave7 - 12 years ago

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934800

Hibernated

Posted: 12 years ago

#99

Just strted reading it...but then i realised i have read it before...i was just 4 days old in IF...i dnt think i commented though...well beautiful as always...swayam and his dad bonding was just really really nyc...read quite a few on chicken pox but this is different really very nyc..

P.S. patiantly waiting for update coz i know i m not getting one any soon.