Through The Looking Glass| ArHi | Ch11Pg1 (14/08) - Page 22

Originally posted by: -doe-eyes-

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That was one heck of a roller-coaster ride of emotions. I actually have the story open on another tab so I can quote and make sure I don't miss anything...and if I do, you'll just be hearing from me again, so deal with it :P

Haha! I wouldnt mind hearing from you cos of the way you analyze the story! :)

Right. I love your characterisation. Arnav, Khushi, Shyam...these people we know and have met in the show and in so many stories across this forum. But this man, Maamu-jaan...I read about him, and even now I can't shake off the feeling that he's bad news. There's something just beneath his heartiness, in the way he makes what is compulsory sound like an offer, in the way he makes his subordinates, who are supposed to fear him, forge an outwardly relation with him...it makes me afraid. He makes me afraid. There's this dread in me that he's going to make trouble for Khushi...and Arnav, which I just knew was it was after I read that description and you made me crush on a gangster. Seriously, that's not done. And now I'm digressing again too. Gah.

About your views on Maamu-jaan...you are one person who has gotten what I wanted to portray about him in this chapter.

And about you falling in love with Gangster Arnav...eh what can I say? Arnav hai hi kuch aisa! But abhi story bachi hai, Boss! ;) :D

And you know...I love how I can't predict anything at all in this story. Even with the identities of Khushi and Arnav, I wasn't certain to commit before you wrote something that blew my mind away. And despite that, you still blew my mind away. I don't know if I was expecting bloodshed or treachery from the cliffhanger in chapter 2, but this, this I most certainly did not expect. And it lives true to the theme of the dark genre...it proves that this 'story of Arnav and Khushi' isn't going to be a bed of roses, but will have all the greys in-between our ideals of black and white. That single sentence, 'And the girls were brought in'...it was like a blow, because I didn't expect it and when I thought about what must follow, I didn't want it either. But reality doesn't change coz you don't want something, and it's brought out through and through here.

And my respect for Arnav doubles. His dropping eye-contact, not prolonging her moment of shame, and yet watching her and protecting her throughout. His whisking her away before anyone else could harm her.

'Respecting him for making her feel clothed when everyone one else undressed her with her eyes.'

'For respecting her when everyone else degraded her.'

'For protecting her when everyone else wanted to devour her.'

'For being with her when everyone else wanted to be in her'

I am so glad you liked this part. This was one of the most or is supposed to be anyway forceful parts of the story and in a way establishes few of the key characters of this story and of course the relationship between Arnav and Khushi - this is the very start of what is to come. Glad that you found it to be impactful as it was meant to be.

Those were simple, yet so powerful lines. Everything you wrote about Khushi, about how she had resigned to her fate...it just broke my heart and I confess, I cried for her. We are so quick to label things good and bad, and yet here are two 'unsavoury' characters who are the victims of their circumstances with feelings as human as ours, and you brought that out so beautifully that I can't help but pray that they find some happiness in each other in this world of 'lives lost and fates broken'. I absolutely loved this description - 'a shady dingy room which smelt of lives lost and fates broken' - like a metaphor for their world. It's so bleak...it makes me afraid and wary and still hope

@Bold Italics - That was the idea. Glad it got translated.

The last line...I don't know. I got tingles. Both from anticipation, and from dread. It's not going to be easy, is it? I just hope they both get out unscathed.

By far my favourite chapter, this one

Phew! This is one of my favourite chapters too!

Originally posted by: ..SankiMedhz..

I imagined a million scenarios in which Arnav met Khushi again...but I never thought she would come to him. That was definitely unexpected!! :P

Awww...he protected her!!! The rest of the update was well... lovely.

Sigh.

Absolutely lovely.

They are such beautiful dialogues...where the entire world regards her in a different way...this one man regards her so differently.

So Arnav and Khushi have finally met. Lets see how this goes ahead now Rae. :)

Lovely chapter!! ❤️

P.S : Just having a smug look on my face reading the end note...I guessed right! (no points for that though)🤣

Originally posted by: Raila1014

So she is part of his shady world unfortunately. Sad the feeling of helplessness that they both felt when they realized the other was there. But there is always hope is any situation an I feel he is taking this chance by watching over her from a distance and waiting for when the night will be over so he can take her away from there at least for the night. I love the way you defined the difference between his feelings / way he was looking at her vs the others. So will these 2 souls be allowed to explore where their feelings lead them to in this very dangerous world they live in? Can't wait to read more.