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-Raichu-

@-Raichu-

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#61

I haven't read the teaser and chap 17 yet

because I want to give my comment on previous chapters first.

I have edited all the RES 😉😉

(Sorry it took me more than one hour, I hope I'm excused 😆😆)

Chapter 16

Maa, Maami, Nani ...

Charlie's angels 🤣🤣

Well Maami is just the way she is !!! She never liked Khushi, and I didn't expect her to be different here 😉😉

And after all she's speaking the truth, and in her point of view she's right. (I think I'm the only one who support Mami 😆)

But Kuch kuch hota hai Maamiji aap nahi samjhegai 😆😆

I loved the way Naine stood for Arnav and Khushi ! She's not blind and I'm proud to see that Naina like a good mother only cares about his son's happiness !

Seriously I'm enjoying Arnav and Khushi scenes now !!

I noticed that Khushi looks always unconfortable with Arnav but after a few minutes she forgets everything and behaves normally !! 😃😃

ANd I just love the way Arnav called her Kuku 😆😆

When you introduced Arnav and Annyav I was hard to see that it was actually the same person, but you just took your time to show us wonderfully well that it's indeed the same person !! 👏👏

She looked the perfect picture of disaster right now to any person.

But to him, she looked perfect. She looked beautiful.

Yeah Love is blind 😆😆

🤣🤣

Arnav is so stupid !! Gosh he's near 30 and he doesn't know doing laundry 🤣 >>> mmmh ... But who am I to critisize him ?? Even I don't know it 🤣🤣

You've potrayed Arnav as a common man, who lives with others help !!

He may have his own business but he's unable to do daily chores ! 👍🏼👍🏼

What? Where had this conversation ended up at? Smarter wife? Hell, wife?

What do you do when someone splashes a bucket of freezing cold water on you?

🤣🤣🤣 🤣🤣🤣 🤣🤣🤣

🤣🤣🤣

Iss confusion ko kya naam doon ?? Have they realized or no ??

Sometimes we feel like the answer is Yes they did, Sometimes No they didn't !!

Unconsciously they always want to be together, they're best friends, but their relationship has changed, they have realized it, but they can't give a give a name to this new relationship !!

I knew it !!! I knew it that it was a marriage proposal 😆😆

Because I know a bit, and a job offer won't be enough interesting for a love story 😉😉

The last part ...

Well written !!

But I'm a bit sad for Lavanya !! It's not love, but still Lavanya has feelings, and if Arnav wants to end their relationship he should be honest and tell her directly instead of avoiding her !

Khushi has caught Arnav's attention, so he has lost all his interest for Lavanya ! As a girl I feel like throwing chappals at him 😡😡

Then I know if they don't break up, now this is going to lead to a lot of trouble just like in Mirage !!

I still can't digest that because of Arnav, Khushi has lost her only friend 😭😭

But I know trouble means intensity 😉😉

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-Raichu-

@-Raichu-

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#62

Originally posted by: rima
A salute to your powerful writing
It always makes my heart dance with joy when I see good writing
as I am from that industry (not story writing though) and every time I see someone write so beautifully I feel so full of admiration

I am so happy to be reading your work
I have heard about your Mirage but since a gangster story never held much interest for me to try it
this one comes as a welcome opportunity to taste your awesome writing

Sadly many didn't read Mirage because it's a gangster story, but after reading the first 10 chapters, we all fall in love with that story 😉😉

Believe my words 😉😉

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Nutcase

@dreamymaya

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#63

somewhere while reading, I was finding it difficult to read since my breath was getting hitched...truly wonderful write up dear..the person reading can feel the emotion and they unknownly transform into a butterfly like Khushi! Beautiful!

Happy Holidays..Have a peaceful and relaxing holidays..come back rested!

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Barun_Addict

@Barun_Addict

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#64

such a nice update...!!!

i had tears in my eyes when i read about how khushi used to celebrate her b'day in those 15 years...😭

"And then, she would go to the backyard of her cottage, in search of a half melted soot covered candle and lighting it up, she would imagine the trees and the birds singing 'Happy Birthday' to her while she would blow off that same candle, all alone with no one around her to join her celebration" 😭

she is just sooo nice 🤗

always praying for others

satisfied with what she has in life...😃

i want to become exactly like her...!!!! 😆

plus i love dadi's lines

"Whatever you are upto." 😆 😉

as for arnav i find him a bit selfish though...!!!

but still would love to see how he gifts her those earrings...!!! 😳

plus i love the way you described their status in society while he was inside the luxurious car and she was outside in the mud , vulnerable to all the storms in life...

but still because of her nature she is enjoying her life much more than him who was unhappy inspite of having all riches...!!! 👍🏼

congrats for the new thread...👏

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nhrb

@nhrb

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#65

wow.. what an update..
i love the way u write blending past & present.
so u r going for a vacation leaving us in the midway..ok koi bat nahi hum intezar karenge. enjoy ur vacation.

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samirao

@samirao

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#66

Ok , I don't have any other choice , I have to except it , and i am doing that , go ahead , enjoy ur break , I think u deserve it , but plz come back on time , ur a very nice person , and a genius , brilliant writer , and Iam addicted to ur ff
Now coming back to the update , it was magical , I don't know how to explain it , in fancy words , it's just simply magical , some time I wounder , how can u write so flwlessley , beautifully , and the power of ur writing is , u never use , guttery things , sexy description , dirty language
For example there was no 'extra explanation ' of there kisses , only pure and innocent explanation , but v can still feel that tingling sensation , simply superb
So finally Arnav express his love , in a very cairing way , and he was trying his best to woo her , through out the day , he was making her comfortable , showing her his concerns and effection , spc during lunch , secrectly buying earrings for her , another good effort , and finally the kiss
It was epic , so pure , truely magical , she k iss him back , it's mean she have feelings for him , and she was expressing those feelings , but why she move back , why she except his challenge , why she give him a goodbye kiss , why , I know she is scared , I know that she is very well aware of the DAMM class difference , but she have to trust him , if she love him , she have to trust him

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Archna

@archnahardik123

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#67

Wow that was so beautiful.
I am still living that beautiful moment between them.
The walking of arnav towards Khushi in rain mesmerise by her beauty, her freely dancing in the rain forgetting her surroundings, both of them kiss for the first time in between those beautiful mountains,trees and that fresh air.

The way you describe that moment was just out of this world, just fantastic.
He said happy birthday to her with a kiss making really memorable day of her life. She spent time on her birthday after 15 years. She was just living those moments keeping safe in her heart without any words.

I liked arnav's confidence by saying that you belongs to me and nowhere else.
But Khushi is right that he didn't understand the seriousness of he matter. She know what will be the result of their relationship.
But arnav being in a stronger position didn't care of the result. He knows what he is doing and what he wants.
But Khushi can't even think of arnav in her dream being in her position.

In the last I am scared what is going to happen? Will she kiss him goodby? Will he let that happen and let her go just like he said that he will never bring back this matter again in between them?

You finish this chapter in that point that I will be restless till the next update. God I don't know how I am going to survive till then.

Good luck for your holidays. Enjoy.

Thanks for this outstanding update.

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mssj

@mssj

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#68

Loved the teaser and the actual chapter itself.

But worried about the next chapter. Is khushi really ready to say goodbye to him? I hope not!

And it feels like he is finally acknowledging his feelings for her.
I loved the restaurant scene. It was simply amazing.

Great job and I can't wait to read more )