Arshi: Making Khushi Mine II ~THREAD 5

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addictedx53

@addictedx53

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Posted: 12 years ago

#271

Its such a feel good update. Arnav opening up to the sunshine of Khushi, inexorably. Khushi herself being the centre of everybody's life seems naturally so deserving of that importance. Am hooked!

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Simran

@dmg123

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Posted: 12 years ago

#272

All caught up!!!

All the updates were BRILLIANT!! I was smiling through all of the updates. What a great story you have developed! The pace of the story is going very nicely and the friendship between Arnav and Khushi is very nicely written.

Khushi is a very well developed character and it is so nice to see her attributes from Arnav's point of view.

I especially liked Karan as well, and the birthday surprise that Khushi planned for Arnav.

Another scene I enjoyed was when buaji left and Khushi was alone with Arnav. I liked how both of them were taking care of each other.

In this chapter, the mela was really nice. You have a way with words which makes the readers create a very clear picture of what you see!

I hope one day Arnav realizes why he might have taken so much pictures of Khushi, and I wonder if Khushi might see those!

The pictures you posted were also very good!!

Awesome, awesome, awesome job!!

I am so excited to see how the story will progress from now.

All the best with your sabbatical!

Thank you very much for the PM's! I really appreciate it!

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neevankrish

@neevankrish

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Posted: 12 years ago

#273

lovely update i just read it twice 😃

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kondhili

@kondhili

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Posted: 12 years ago

#274

Lovely picture you painted with the fair and all that...I felt i was also in some fair in delhi.

Your description where really brilliant.

So arnav is slowly getting bewitched by khushi and doesn't want her to know about it and the clueless khushi is getting more and more comfortable with khushi and loves smothering arnav with her care and well soon enough maybe even love.

The best thing about your stories is the way you portray khushi not as a perfect little housewife who can whip up a 7 course meal in a jiffy, not a physically perfect person but just a normal girl who has her shortcomings and her physical inabilities.

But really had a good laugh at the whole arnav and khushi cooking episode.

Thanks for the PM and waiting for the next update.

Liza

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rana5

@rana5

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Posted: 12 years ago

#275

Great update, I am so glad they are spending more time together! I loved how you described the fair, that was well written!!!

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Iridescent

@Iridescent

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Posted: 12 years ago

#276

Awesome update... the way you're depicting the changing emotions of Arnav towards Khushi and Khushi's keen observation of Arnav's nature, it's amazing 😊👏

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@SuperstarSanaya

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+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#277

A very well written update.. and little progressive at that too. 😃

aaahh Loved the description of Fair you wrote in start.. I felt like I am there envisioning it with my eyes.

Khushi is photogenic.. 😉 We know and now ASR knows too. 😳

'Potato chips. Packaged and sealed by a huge multinational company which guarantees that it is safe to eat it. And if something STILL happens to you, I'll make sure that bade papa sues them and gets you an apology and adequate compensation'

Only Khushi can come up with answer filled with Sarcasm and taunts for Mr. hygiene Raizada. 😆😆😆 That totally cracked me..

and then she forgot to tell him about Dinner.. expecting it will be there coz Generally it is. 😆

I love the litle progress they both make about their View of each other by being with each other everyday. Khushi liked how Arnav didn't feel ashamed of walking with her..

and Arnav felt her caring.. and emotionally assuring to people around her.

"Much to his discomfort these days he found the door of his heart where he kept vulnerability locked away, ajar often." 👏

Bread and Maggi dinner option was icing on cake.. 🤣🤣 ohh Good lord, Arnav knows cooking. Loved entire kitchen banter.. 😃

and end line just had me grinning. he had an uneasy feeling that it would be his undoing some day! 👏

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Mariam Khan

@Mxk3444

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#278

I keep rereading chapter 11 over and over again I love it they are moving so fast in their friendship it really is adorable when Khushi takes care of him.

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Harshitha Shankar

@-_-harsh42

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+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#279

Sorry, Nony... I took so long to comment... My house has guests and it has turned into an absolute mad house! And I've to write amidst that.. Don't you think that my over-imaginative mind is sparing me even with so much on it... 🤔

First point I liked is that Arnav is getting more and more attached to Khushi. Like he realized later, Khushi was the sun of the house. A constant. And his sub-conscious accepts it and even is making him get entangled in his own thoughts of her...

Secondly, Khushi's appraisal of Arnav. Oh, he's as mysterious as possible, alright? But then, our Khushi is not Laddoo just for the heck of it.. She'll peel all those layers and find the real Arnav one day, you just see!! 😛

Thirdly, Shyam used to make Khushi walk away from him because of her limp?! That's... inhuman!!

I wonder what Arnav'll do if he ever comes to know of this... 😳

Thanks for the PM, Nony bach.. 🤗

PS : Ain't it a time for another update?! 😉 😃

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Aisha8888

@Aisha8888

Beginner

Posted: 12 years ago

#280

Have i told you how much of a good writer you are? That i read all chapters ln one day? Thats how hooked i was!! Honest to god i love your story hope you update soon :)
Also just wanted to say you write very clearly and your descriptions of each event play out like a movie in my mind and i think thats what i like best! Its a real story not jist about lust and love dont get me wrong i love those aspects as well in a story but when there is a justified background and honest story behind the mutual attraction
it makes it all the more enjoyable to read

but most importantly i never want this story to end :)
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