Arhi TwoShot : On Resisting Temptation *complete* - Page 8

Originally posted by: bablubli

Yaaay..I am the first to comment! Beautiful writing...quintessential Arnav & Khushi! I have just discovered your writing over the last three days & I am loving it. Will comment on them when I finish reading each one of them! Thank you and keep writing!!

Originally posted by: avantika_2012

Had to be here!!!!!

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Oh Lord!!!! NAFIII!!!! WHAT DID YOU DO??

I'm dead.

I definitely am.

And then I was sent to heaven! 😉

Maar daala. Maar he daala, Nafi!

Hayyye!!! This was so damn good. And very honestly, keeping your standards in mind, this is one of the best pieces you have written. Not only in terms of the scene and content but the words and expressions; the way it was written, it was exquisite! I mean, look at the first sentence itself. How many writers can give opening sentences like that one? It made me grin so hard! 😃

You know I became so worked up reading this I actually stood up? Stood up, then walked around to work off some the restless energy, sat down, stood up again. Not to mention the whole time my face was turning all different shades of red and my face was hurting from the smiling and I literally wanted to hug the stuffing out of you! Thank you!! I mean, those are some the sweetest things I've ever had said to me, and it means so much, and it's all the more special because YOU said them!!

His half-mast, intent stare did not waver for even a second, soaking her in, absorbing her into himself with his gaze, as though he half-expected to be asked to sculpt her from memory later. It was a compulsion that he was not altogether conscious of ' not something born out of voluntary thought, but then again not something he was oblivious to either.

He just didn't care enough to snap out of it.

That was WOW! I can't even think of words that would be apt enough to describe the sheer beauty and uniqueness of those lines.

Right now I can't think of words which are apt enough to convey how MUCH that means to me!!

It swept over him like the shimmery caress of rain, washing off the grit and grime gathering on leaves and trees, rinsing them.

Rejuvenating them.

Your writing rejuvenates me. That is my free, honest and uninhibited opinion! 😉

Lol, you know how much I like the rain 😉

And eeps, I'm getting quoted!! Yaaay!!! Happy day!! *does funny little dance; convinces parents she's finally lost it*

Everything else seemed to dim and dull next to her brilliance, to that wide, warm smile like a crescent moon adorning her features, the berry-blush pooling into her cheeks as she laughed and teased her sister, evidently ribbing her about the honeymoon Payal and Akash had just returned from yesterday, her eyes alive and dancing with glee, her skin glowing, exuding moonlight.

She was so beautiful it hurt.

A lot of people make their readers swoon and drool over Arnav but only you can make me swoon so bad over Khushi. And you know what, I love that bit coz I think people often don't do justice to how beautiful Khushi (Sanaya) is! :D

I am SO GLAD you think so!! Khushi is to me one of the most beautiful characters I've ever seen inside and out, and while I did come across people commenting on how sweet she looked, I guess Arnav got the bulk of the appreciation coz the viewership was largely female

Once again his irritation and impatience hissed to life within him, with the sharp sizzle of spices being tossed into hot oil. It was vehement enough to drown out, for the time being, that peculiar hollow twinge in his chest, some emotion he could neither place nor recognise.

Yes! Yes! YES! That's exactly how exquisitely wonderful your writing is! 👏

*blush+smile* Thank you!!

Okay! I loved every single moment you described. You started with a bang of course about how their eyes clash for a second before Khushi averted her gaze. A scene of the living room which is in the background coz one can't help but focus his attention to the fact that Arnav has eyes only for her and she is looking breath-taking. And then she laughs and he can hear that sound from far away showing how much he is attuned to her. It was all so beautifully and immaculately penned down that I could picture each detail in front of me...as good as if I were a part of it.


AND then came the kitchen scene!!!

*drumroll*

If I were blown away by your writing up until now, I was sucked into a whirlpool that you created with your words. I was transported elsewhere!

It. Was. Bliss.

I don't know what to say - I mean I'm literally choked up. You spoil me terribly you know...I'm not sure reading such comments are good for my ego :P But that doesn't mean I don't like them!! :P 😆 In fact I adore them and I'm so glad you feel this way about this piece :)

I will not quote anything from the remaining half of the chapter coz I was just in awe of how perfect every word, every phrase, every sentence was.

I particularly loved the mention of the smaller nuisances. The tinkling of her payals; how she stopped adjusting her sari pleats when the sweet boxes caught her attention; her slapping her forehead in admonishment, I loved it all. Just a few words but they add so much to the whole scene.

Thank you!!! IPKKND was always hatke in that way - there were little, little things, signs, nuances, symbols, in the scenes, the story, or the acting, which made the magic more real. I'm always trying to recreate or imitate that charm when I write so I'm happy you like the detailing :)

Bizarrely enough, in some subliminal corner of her mind, she could sense him approaching long before his leisurely footfalls invaded into her haze of preoccupation ' could sense the air thickening with a volatile expectancy.

Okay, I couldn't stop myself from quoting again! 😆 Not only are those lines wonderfully written but they also show so clearly that it's not just Arnav who is attuned to Khushi. Aag dono tafar barabar lagi hai! *wink*

Uh huh *nodnod* Now it's only a matter of acknowledging it before they get burnt ;)

OMG! Did he actually give her a compliment? Even I couldn't believe it at first. Hahaha! He does know how to hit the right buttons and rattle her up! After all, what else did he pick up the laddoo for? He knew it! He knew that she wouldn't be able to avoid him if he did something like that. Very smart move, Arnav...I must say!

Weeell...he had to get her to react to him - and how else to do that except by throwing her off completely? *wink* Glad you liked!

When she said 'chodiye' and his answer was so simple, straightforward and honest - can't. It took my breath away!

I also noticed that how he doesn't but later does accept his love for her. That was adorable.
And all his dialogues to Khushi...they were like mini bombs on the readers. I absolutely love it when he flirts with her. God dammit! That last scene, with the dialogues and every little detail was soo perfect!

Eee!!!! I can't tell you how much I'm grinning right now. In fact, I've never grinned so much while reading something. I was grinning so hard, yesterday and today, both while reading and re-reading this right from the word go that my jaw hurts! It hurt yesterday and it hurts right now but I still can't stop grinning!

You know sometimes when you do something positively wicked, and you know you're being wicked but you get a thrill out of it anyway? That's exactly the feeling I was getting when I wrote those parts - though Khushi had to bear the brunt of my amusement :P I don't think she'll mind too much though ;) I'm super excited that you enjoyed this!! And honestly, I don't think I've ever grinned so hard when reading or replying to a comment either, so we're even! Thaaank you!!!

'Delicious.'

And then, with a wicked grin and heart-stopping wink-

'And so was the laddoo.'

My eyes popped out of their socket. Lol! But the next moment I laughed out loud. That was actually wicked. Poor Khushi! Right now, she is in a daze. What will her state be, when the meaning of his words will dawn upon her with all it's intensity and glory!

Lol, yup. Maybe I'm sadistic for wishing this on the poor unassuming thing, but what to do? It's for her own good in the end :P

I. Can't. Wait. For. The. Next. Part.



PS - I. LOVE. YOU.

I love you MORE.

(I'm serious)

You spoil me rotten with such updates. My expectations are beyond sky high. But, I still love you!

*Nervous* Now I'm going to have to start imploring with the heavens to make the next part live up to these expectations!

PPS - Shyam on a pineapple farm? Very tempting! Let's keep him there! 😉

Hehehe - lets. It's the cruelest thing I could do to him without killing him off :P

PPPS - What's longer? Your update or my comment? 😆

:P Honestly, I don't know, but like I've said, I'm tempted to print this and frame it :D Thaaank you!!!

Author's friend's note (I took the liberty to write it that way 😛) - No res? Are you kidding me? 😲 I saw a vacant spot on YOUR thread. I had to res. No way in hell am I going to leave that opportunity! And I'm NOT sorry about it!

When you put it like that, how can I grudge you?

Originally posted by: Kishmish

That was cute and so typically Arnav and Khushi ...

brought back lovely memories of the serial ...

Thanks ... waiting for part 2 ...

Originally posted by: serendipitylove

Shyaam in a pineapple farm...ROFL!!

Trust me, he belongs there 😆

Khushi intently avoiding arnav but he has eyes only for her

But even within the whirlwind of activity unfurling before him, Arnav had eyes for only one person. Only for her.

I sooo loved that line!! Khushi just doesn't get it does she...He comes to the kitchen for her and she finds a hundred million other reasons for his arrival...! Crazy girl...No he isn't looking for anyone...nor is he in the kitchen for any work...!

Smart move by arnav to get her to react...And how naughty! Delicious...the taste of her fingers and the taste of the laddoo...hehehe...And how smartly he guesses that the sugar free sweets are just for him..."I don't like sharing" LOL!

But why is she avoiding him? She doesn't trust him or is it that she doesn't trust her heart when wiith him😉

So glad that you liked the whole encounter between them! Arnav had to do something to corner her and he used what means he had available - and I'm pleased you enjoyed the results :P And as to why Khushi is avoiding him...lets just say she's not being so much clueless as cautious...her reasons will hopefully be clearer in the next part :) Thank you for reading and commenting!

Originally posted by: smileyhug7679

Wow very nice...

I like it

Originally posted by: devishree

hey dear ofcourse u should cont soon

is that a question??

do the update tomorrow plzz😉

it was awesome and exciting

i loved it

i love this Arnav who is been enthralled by his temptress khushi 😃

i am anticipating for an fitting acknowledgement from khushi 😆

the title is too tempting to read and comment😊

Originally posted by: __blossom__

I loved it!!!!
Specially the last line omg!!!! How the hell is she resisting!!!!
Great os cant wait for the next part...
Is she avoiding him cuz of the diwali incident...
Continue soon! :)

Originally posted by: sonia_92

anything but temptation? that was hot.

Originally posted by: Nooro

Res res
----------Unres
Beautiful...
Bringing all those memories back of Akash n Payal's wedding...
How he ate laddo from her hand n Last two lines were just aaawww...Pleeejjj Do continue it...
Why khushi is avoiding him? Next update will tell...What will b khushi's next reaction to his mischievous actions...?Next update will tell...so My dear writer pllzz continue it...
Yess i definitly want to read MDJND first...
Thannnxxx alloot for pm dear...