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@pepples_joy

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#171

U knw wats the most awkard thing in d world?? Repeating thing again.. I m typng the same comment for 2nd time in a row... Ok.. End of story.. I zip it here..
Back to the update...
This is just THE CLASSIC... The way you express the love btw the leads with irony is just awesome.. All i can cme up wit is O.M.G...!!!!#widen eyes
You're sooo much god-damn-gifted writer... #claps
And wont forget to mention abt After all these times...
Alwayss.. :D :D AWWW...
#fangurling
Loved it loved it loved it...!!! I jus randomly read it TS... I m soo much glad i did it... :D I would b the meanest reader in all of IF history if i dint comment in such a lovly loveable work.. So I hurridly did.. #Beware of History
Love yaaa.. Cheers..

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nilanjana

@Nilanjana_20

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#172

WOOOW JUST LOVED IT

THE WAY U HAVE WRITTEN IT WAS AMAZING WELL DONE 👏

and thanks for pm

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dramebaaz.af

@dramebaaz.af

Sparkler

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#173

First and foremost, 'always' just have too much of a special place to be forgotten. The highlight spoke for itself!

secondly, what a tale! I loved the woven complexity! thanks for the PM!

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ASRphanki

@ASRphanki

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#174

Thnk u for dis beautiful story...
Loved it..

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vandana.sagar

@vandana.sagar

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#175

Just beautiful...their love and understanding in and with each other portrayed so beautifully!

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Krani

@Krani

Dazzler

+ 9

Posted: 12 years ago

#176

Very nicely written three-shot! Loved the emotional ride - from impatience, to fear, to sadness, to being strong, to happiness.

Loved it!

Although I am confused about how the Harry Potter lines fit into the story. Those lines were used by Dumbledore to Snape, and showed how he had loved Lily despite everything, and had continued to love her and done everything out of love.

However with Arnav and Khushi the meaning of those words is lost on me.

Sorry if I didn't get the message you were trying to convey, but overall that was a great three-shot!

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Vee

@reflorated

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#177

Originally posted by: Krani
Very nicely written three-shot! Loved the emotional ride - from impatience, to fear, to sadness, to being strong, to happiness.

Loved it!

Although I am confused about how the Harry Potter lines fit into the story. Those lines were used by Dumbledore to Snape, and showed how he had loved Lily despite everything, and had continued to love her and done everything out of love.

However with Arnav and Khushi the meaning of those words is lost on me.

Sorry if I didn't get the message you were trying to convey, but overall that was a great three-shot!

~K

Okay so this is more of a personal belief than anything, but when Arnav met Khushi for the first time, I always liked to believe that it was her eyes that drew him to her.

In my head, after all this Sheetal, Shyam, Dadi, Anjali blah blah nonsense is over, Arnav and Khushi must obviously sit down and had a talk about life and love and whatever else that goes into the line. (Had the show been on track and all, I'm there would have been a maha episode where A and K just sit and talk) Only I didn't choose to dwell on it. If you notice, the style of writing in this TS has been strictly in present tense, and really impassionate. I chose to showcase their emotions through their actions, rather then showcasing their actions through their emotions. Had I included a flashback into the story, then it would have been a contradiction to the whole point of writing this story in a particular way.

So when Khushi asks him "why?" and he says "He has hazel eyes, just like yours" the readers come to know in the end it wasn't completely about the child - Khush. It was partly for Khushi. So when Khushi says "After all this time?" she refers to how all these years later, he still falls for her eyes. And then when Arnav says "Always" he means that he meant that despite the hatred he tried to show towards her, it was always her eyes that melted him.

I do hope this makes sense?

Thanks for your comment. I'm glad you liked the story =)

-Vee

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..SankiMedhz..

@..SankiMedhz..

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#178

Brilliant way to end this TS Vee.

I loved it totally!

Ahhh...I loved the Harry Potter touch you added to the last lines. They seemed perfect there! Minimal interaction between Arnav and Khushi...and yet you can see the love they share. Awww. :D

And they knew what the other wanted SO WELL. ❤️

Thank you for the happy ending as promised! Love you. :D

Edited by ..SankiMedhz.. - 12 years ago

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haminasto

@haminasto

Alumni

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#179

okay so starting was like ...i thought you are gonna kill both Arnav/Khushi n they'll meet upar n have a "Jannata Ve" types happy ending n then i could have done a "Daiyya ho" on you...
but yay!!! happiiizzz endingzzz

but eyes..? i thought it were always the lips for Arnav...but hhmm it was the eye clash that happened first and Arnav rose up from his chair n Khushi went from distress to deer caught in headlights at the fashion show...
so i loved the Albus Snape "ki choti si narrative prem kahani" ka input here(though Lily had green eyes n Harry hazel)...
n the good people that they are always carrying their baggage and being happy about it.
lovely ending!!!

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Kamala

@Kamala05

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#180

Thanks for the PM.

Glad that u ended it in an happy note.. I was scared when the truck headed to their car. I thought that u will kill Kushi and Arnav will survive along with Khush.

Interesting Three shot , hope u will soon surprise us with another work .

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