An ArHi SS: Scandalous *Thread Two*

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LooneyLuna

@LooneyLuna

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#971

And so it continues..the final blow by arnav is what makes khushi question it all! The lines you chose were perfect.

So shyamji has "I've missed you, Khushiji"

And whats more he has brought her "a thin gold chain" - so blaah. Dont you know star pendent are the new diamonds!

Whats even awesomer is his touch brings: "In that instant, she had a blinding moment of clarity." for khushi.

And follows after is what I have wanted for khushi from the beginning:

"she did what she wanted to do"

After all feelings aren't just transient..and she may not be able to create them with time with this person. And I dont know if this is because arnav is in the picture, I mean definitely that makes her realise what kind of feelings she can feel.

"I couldn't imagine myself as his wife, but that doesn't mean that I have accepted you in my life instead!"

wow i do take my analysis way too seriously. Need to chillout so..

You go girl!! Break that engagement! Runaway Bride!

And then dhak dhak "Tum theek ho?" trust you (the devi maiyya in disguise) to bring her right to "caramel eyes".

In this story he really does this a lot "leaning against the trunk of a tree" doesnt he. I guess he does look quite hot while doing that..just like he does when he swims in the pool or drives the car?

The joy that arnav feels, is exactly how I was meant to feel above! For unselfish reasons though, unlike him.

The kiss. You have good timing juhi, is all I am going to say.

"None of this is a lie." - Arnav's logic is just struck on that one line of thought, isnt it? I wonder when he will realise this cant be the only thing..but that would mean the story would end. soo

Time and again you remind us what this story is about, like in the last chapter it was "This man who was her dream, her fantasy...and her nightmare, all at once."

And here it is "Was this what it felt like, when one fell off the cliff?" I love it.

"She had no regrets on that score." - That whole scene was a moment of clarity for me too..about khushi's character. Really liked that. Also this particular line reminds me of Arnav when he thinks about how he threw away the ring.

Ok payal stop freaking us out!! Khushi has had quite a night already..

So shyamji is after all not that sweet..and I was correct in taking a piss at him. Jumping to conclusion like ASR but what else can I do when you leave us at a cliffhangerr?!

Hitashi

ps. This chapter was amazing. I am glad you posted it in 2 parts. So much to take in.

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LooneyLuna

@LooneyLuna

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#972

HAHAH I love Shyamji and his ways..I have no doubt he is a genuine person, he is not a conceiting psychopath. And thats why everything makes me laugh even more..He kind of reminds me of SRK from rab ne bana di jodi. And so I laugh and I can't hate him anymore..

"because you seemed to be suffering from pre-wedding nerves..."

That would be the convenient conclusion for his ego, wouldn't it?

And khushi never seizes to surprise me...

"Amma, I won't marry him."

Then the mother's standard argument..

"When you are married, you will begin to see him in a different light."

And the defeat because really how could she say this:

"she wanted to refuse Shyamji for another man who made her feel everything she should, while promising her nothing in return?"

And then garima surprises me...

"blood is thicker than water" - that buaji is clearly not a good influence on her!!!

Its funny how whatever garima is saying works both ways..if he really thought khushi as her daughter she would have never forced her like this, and wouldn't have let buaji make all decisions with regards to her.

Just wait till arnav gets a whiff of this!! He already hates the family wala word.. and this will just further prove it to him..

Ah payal to the rescue...but what do you know "caramel eyes" is too busy wallowing in his misery or

"And now, he sought the calming influence of the water again, his agitation lessening as he approached the poolside."

I like that he decided to give her some space. He is thoughtful. I knew it..he is perceptive enough to realise that the family thing does matter a lot to her..I like that he knows he cant do much, but be there for her. Juhi the whole part with asr is really well written his thoughts and conclusions..

"There was an obstacle between him and her."

"Khushi Kumari Gupta herself."

I like where you are taking this story. Even if it feels like its on a cliched place girl-boy-want-each-other-but-girl-marries-other boy-as-her-responsibility-to-parents..I know you have some big bomb planned..because this is simply not your style!!

"And so did the plea for help."

and as they say in all Soapy hindi movies..bhagwan ke ghar der hai andher nahi..or something?

"Arnavji? I'm Payal, Khushi's sister..."

"The jaguar roared down the road at a reckless speed"

I again find myself on the edge of the seat..cheering on the hero like I did when Simran is running towards Raj on that train (oh wait thats the opposite!) ok more like when Arnav finally spotted khushi lying next to a random tree in the junge, instead of falling down a cliff. Anywho you get my point? I loved that scene. It amazes me how many different things I feel when I am reading this story..you are a brilliant writer just for the millionth time.

OK everythingthatisholy--"You just saw what?" - Another SCANDAL *jumps up on the chair*

Ah and the next moment I fall because "Sheetal applies the mehendi!"

Oh Buaji the combination of all the vampy, annoying rishetadar mixed in one...I like that for every Buaji type character you give us a Payal.."anyone who took a closer look would never believe that lie." But you did proper justice to both characters..thoroughly enjoyed buaji's outburst.

THE SCANDAL. ok so this is the scandal in scandalous! Because the last one was bleh as compared to this. You are such a good suspense-keeper...I have to be careful, and yet like buaji I am left thinking time and again.."How much more scandalous can this get?"

So all that khushi feared about associating with arnav is finally come out in the open.

And so the feelings are emerging..other than that stupid word "want" other words are entering his dictionary.."desperation born of the need to protect her from all harm."

Then the standard Arnav procedure comes into play: "Enough!!" "Tum theek ho?" "picked her up in his arms"

Nicely played juhiji. I cannot believe he is taking her to his apartment and yet at the same time that is such an arnav thing to do..And same for everything that follows. Because times might be changing after all "Why did this embrace feel more intimate than their kiss last night?" Them together was heartwrenchingly beautiful (in cliched words).

I love that soon after you describe just what I mention above..

"But he still didn't know why he had done it."..through arnav

"If she is important to you, then she is important to me, as well." and through anjali.

I love that this story explores the sibling bonds..and on a much nicer level, justified, perceived, emotional and practical words.

So Shyamji mystery is finally being solved...cant wait.

Hitashi

ps. Even roller coasters aren't this fun. i faraq this story dammit.

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heavenspirit

@heavenspirit

Voyager

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#973

OMG!!!

I loved all the parts here...
how Arnav tried to make Khushi aware of her own feelings...
how Khushi canceled the wedding...
their kiss...
Arnav's all attempt to protect her from her family's wrath...
their hug...I loved that...you know every person in this world want this kind of warmth from their loved ones...

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@aapkibandhu_Vas

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#974

Hmm omg this is gng full of suspense

i'm eagerly w8ting for them to come together

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Viji

@vijiasr08

Stunner

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#975

excellent story enjoyed very much

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Khuarv

@Khuarv

Navigator

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#976

Scandalous is one intense story. Loving the intensity and the passion between Arnav and khushi. Love the sibling bond between khushi and payal. As usual hate shyaam Manohar jha 😡 . Arnav and khushi are so attracted toward's each other yet can't give in due to contrary beliefs toward's the institution called marriage. Let's see how Shyam will slither thru this awkward situation 😉 . I enjoyed reading all the chapters till thread two.