ArHi FF! Lonely under the sheets [Completed]

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aquagal

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Posted: 12 years ago

#141

I have started reading it few days back and have completed till Chapter-10.
I am loving every bit of it.
Sheetal doesn't come across as a manipulative, scheming or interfering person here, at least not yet.
Loved the moments they spent in kitchen, then him going to mandir followed by how he saved her from Anjali's & payal's questions about their dinner.

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aquagal

@aquagal

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Posted: 12 years ago

#142

Completed reading it.
Loved the play and portrayal of emotions.
I wish the story would have been like this.
Thanks Rasgulla_sp & Zehra for recommending this amazing story.

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priluvsmonaya

@priluvsmonaya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#143

Loved it.😊Read it in one go.

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Chaitalee Ghosalkar

@Eccentrica

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Posted: 12 years ago

#144

Simplistic, realistic...there's so much that can be said about this one.

I liked the fact that you set the story in teh post remarriage time wherein CVs had completely butchered the story. The best part of it was that you retained the elements and wove a story around them; it only made me want to see you as the CV of the show which we adored.

You used Sheetal in a very effective manner yet she wasn't overbearing; her presence had just the required effect; kind of like the right amount of salt to a dish.

Even the aspect of Anjali missing Shyam was perfectly put...it would have not her any justice to just ignore the fact that her husband of many years had not left a void in her life with his transgressions but what stole the show was her parting statement on the same.

I love your style of writing basically owing to the mllifluous way in which you let your thoughts flow. There were many instances which left a smile on my face but my favorite was the definition of a happily ever after. True the whole concept is abstract but to consider and club all the smaller happy moments interspersed with moments of sadness and remorse is what is life.

Beautiful story.

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cocoamob

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Posted: 12 years ago

#145

I just read all the chapters of this story so far - Khushi and Arnav not only face the usual clashes that a newly wed couple face but their relationship has always been unique - a roller coaster of highs and lows (mostly lows for Khushi). But what I really liked about this story is the way you have described their day to day life in such an intuitive manner

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vittoriA Giardano

@kbtr

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Posted: 12 years ago

#146

I'm reading this again, so I'm making a comment again.

This was such a beautiful FF.

The Sheetal track completely destroyed the character of ASR as the previous ones had destroyed the character of Kushi. The CVs were really out to lunch on this one.

It was so refreshing to see how very neatly you handled the insecurities that a newly wed couple has adjusting to each other. Although it seemed that Kushi had more adjusting to do, more giving to do, more bending to do. At one point, I really thought Arnav had more priorities for his company than Kushi. And then when Payal explained, well, although, it was logical, I was thinking, why would it always have to be Kushi who has to bow down. But then I guess, that was her fate. And especially, because of their circumstances - your FF described it so beautifully. Thank you so much for such a great FF.

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Vrinda

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Posted: 12 years ago

#147

this was awesome jus t loved it

wonder why did IPKKND

didn't had scene's like this

it would have definately lasted longer

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vaish912

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Posted: 12 years ago

#148

The complexity of the relation ..u have pulled that brilliantly ..loved this .. I can't believe this mrs talking ur stories now .. Back to back ..I finished gravity yesterday in a day n today this one .. U r one of the few I loved to read ..