Manveer OS:Break Of The Dawn - Page 18

part 3

part 4

Originally posted by: Netz

awesum and beautiful start.. historic setting is great and d plot just got me glued to the seat or should i say to the screen displaying this amorous heart capturing tale..

good job

Originally posted by: Netz

part 2

the past of manyata s soo touching, bt i could get d reason why she ws kinda "asuryampasya"? u knw wht i mean, that none had ever seen her..

but fab plooting dear..

Originally posted by: Netz

part 3

long update.. aryan s really a son of a bitch.. a true bas***d... why dont these scums just rot into hell... should fry them in hell's fire and make tandoors with dem.. men who f**king think that women are just toys...

oh nd nice part of dadi ji..

Originally posted by: Netz

part 4

happy nd well ending as always...

devgarh's king was served right..

dis is truly a fairy tale kinda story.. nd u knw i luvd dat..

juse great job payel.. continue with more os n ss n ff..n everythng u wanna write..

way 2 go buddy...

you have become an awesome matured writer😲...I am really not able to believe that you wrote this story😲...the style of your writing and in detail description is simply amazing👍🏼...I was able to visualize the whole story in front of my eyes😎...you really have a god gifted talent of such good writing...do not waste😒 it and keep going🤗...I feel really proud to have such a talented writer sister...👏👍🏼

Originally posted by: debaleenasaha

you have become an awesome matured writer😲...I am really not able to believe that you wrote this story😲...the style of your writing and in detail description is simply amazing👍🏼...I was able to visualize the whole story in front of my eyes😎...you really have a god gifted talent of such good writing...do not waste😒 it and keep going🤗...I feel really proud to have such a talented writer sister...👏👍🏼

wowww- a very beautiful 4 part os.👏

Originally posted by: ashpat

wowww- a very beautiful 4 part os.👏