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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: iluvmanveer


hi jiji. how are u!! plz ghussa thunk do na!! jitni baar bolenge, utni baar maafi mangungi sach.

sorry jiji sorry jiji!!!!

is gunah ka pryashchit karne, main chardham yatra chali jaati hu

main officially last part ki first reader hu, pr ab last commenter bhi.


Its okay meri behen ne mujhe finally yaad ki isse zada khusi ki baat aur kya ho sakti!!! 🤗

The general inquired her humbly about the Lady's absence; in answer she cried even more. Finally she managed to say, "I don't know if I can ever see her face again!" The general looked at her in utter shock, "What are you saying Mrinalini Ji?"

me vi rone lag gayee thi...


Haila Sacchi!!! 😆

"Don't you remember her fourth and final condition General?"

He frowned in fear as he remembered those words of her, "Dear King and citizen of Devgarh, remember it very carefully, as an Apsara of heaven I am a swayamvu (self born) in this mortal world and so possess the right of causing Swechamrityu (self death). If any of my conditions are disregarded by any man of authority I can do whatever I want."

oh yeah!! so intelligent

She is a superstar Daadi!! 😉

And breaking her palace without her permission his Senapati had already disregarded her.

"No this cannot happen! All of my men will apologize to her again! The general cried in utter shock.

He stopped for some moment as he could not bear the thought of crying in front of a lady, then continued, "I will tell my men to pray to her; in front of that very Lotus lake, from where the Apsara appeared first".

Mrinalini Ji burst into more tears.

haha talav pe jaake kya karenge hopeless people... cry you general. humari pyaari manyata se na jaane kya kya karwaya


"Hold yourself dear Madam; we cannot afford to lose that precious gem. It will be high shame for Devgarh! As a General I cannot bear the pain."

"But she is gone forever!" Mrinalini ji cried even louder, "My pretty little Apsara cannot bear the view of mortal sins!"

Just at that moment one soldier appeared in front of General. Bowing he presented him a letter. The general opened it and got a double shock.

"From where did you get that letter?"

The soldier said, "It was under a pillow in Lady Manyata's bed room."

He looked at Mrinalini ji and the letter and immediately ordered his men, "Soldiers vacate this place soon!"

Mrinalini gave a winning smile, all of her false tears vanished within a moment.

i loved this part


Thankzzz 😊

''''..

Dear King of Devgarh,

As the King of Jaigarh I am well aware of the hostility between our kingdoms which our ancestors started; and I thought it's for no specific reason. But, as my ancestor's heir I just followed the tradition with your perfect enemy like contribution.

Then last week one of my very closest tradesmen enlightened me that it is because of beauty. I heard your small mountain kingdom abounds with natural beauty; specially centre of the city. It will be a pity if I had to acquire it by force. Therefore as the king of Jaigarh I just decided to give you back every acquired land from you by Jaigarh. You are a free king now, no need to pay any tax. But a king has a huge duty i.e shist ka palan (enriching the good) and dust ka daman (slaying the evil). Therefore I will expect that you do it with due effort. And for that very reason my men will go for a personal enquiry every week ( i.e. my only requirement in exchange of returning of your land; unharmed). I presume you will obviously treat my men as your royal guest.

And suppose that you will nourish the centre of your city with same effort and respect which you did till now. I will send a very effective force to enquire that special place.

With hope I presume you will like my offer; I am kind of tired of killing Devgarh's soldiers. Its peace time now, wish you good luck.

Yours truly,

Udayveer Singh

King of Jaigarh.

wat an offer yaar, really trapping. how can uv be so intelligent!! love him like hell


Hez a king, a great king is no less than an intelligent CEO; he was one of the most powerful king!!! Got gto run a large kingdom yaar!!! 😊

The king of Devgarh let out a huge yell after reading the letter.

"Where were you when he wrote that letter while sleeping beside that B***h!"

HOW CUD THE KING SAY LIKE THAT!!!! f**k THAT bas***d!!!!


Yaap truly!!!😡

General Rajendra Seth's head bowed.

"Sire we trapped her palace from every side, not even a fly could escape that. I just don't get how it happened!"

"I do not need any information about any flies, how did that invader filth escaped?"

General bowed his head lower.

"I think it is all for that Manyata B****'s drama!"

stop calling her bitch u s**t

Yeh last wali kya mere liye sanju!!!! 😲

"No sire! Our Apsara went back to the lake , she went for a Swechamrityu." The General tried to burst into tears but it will be highly inappropriate, "Because some of my men invaded her house, broken her rules. She cannot bear our sin sire."

shut up!! she is a mortal being man!!!

"Oh shut up! You should have ordered your men to break that b***h's palace before! We could have caught that invader read handed! Right now I should be enjoying his death!

slap that king. he doesnt deserve to be the king.

Sure

"No offense sire, but you must not use that specific language to address our lost Apsara. After all she was a celestial."

"SHUUUT UUUP" the king yelled again.

u shut up!!


Well said 👍🏼

And the king's frustration went on. But he had take King Udayveer's offer. There were no other options.

''''

A week ago (Before Dawn)

"Listen Manyata you will own nothing by shedding your precious tears!" Mrinalini ji held her as Manyata started crying more.

"I cannot lose you! No dadi!"

Mrinalini Ji hugged her, caressed her head, "Manyata you are not the first Kalyani Janapad who is proposed by a King of an enemy kingdom."

Manyata broke that hug and looked carefully at her dadi.

There were tears in Mrinalini ji's eyes too, "I don't want you to commit the same mistake I have made! Nobody actually cares about you here. They only adore you body!"

"But you do dadi, you do care about me-More than anyone in this world!"

"But like a dadi, I want my granddaughter to get married to the person she loves, have a family of her own. Then only my soul will rest in peace."

Manyata hugged her while crying and Mrinalini Ji said with a force, "If you really care for me, don't want to lose me, then do as I say!"

"What?"

"I am your Dadi lady, I ought to be smarter than you. I know how to save myself from those evil eyes."

"Now change this tattered cloth! (She smiled at her and Manyata blushed) I meant put something nice, be quick. We don't have much time!"

wooowww such a perfect daadi!!! manyata is the luckiest to get her as her daadi!! salute n bow for the great mrinalini ji


Just like cinderella's fairy Godmother hai na!!! 😊

King Udayveer drank her beauty again with his glances, when she came back in a white ghagra and red choli with a white dupatta on her forehead. No he don't want to die, he actually want to live a long and happy life with her.

aaawww...


Mrinalini ji took both of them to a deserted corridor. King Udayveer found his horse Abhay there. He immediately recognized what mistake he had done!

"Don't worry your highness, as you can see I have already masked your horse. Now none can recognize Abhay." Mrinalini ji smiled. King Udayveer returned a warm glance towards this old lady.

"From here goes a route throughout the jungle if you follow that path you will cross the border of Devgarh before break of dawn. Once you cross the border of Devgarh, there is none who can track you."

Manyata hugged her, "How could you be so awesome Dadi?"

"Because I am your Dadi, I ought to be awesome! Plus My stomach is full with secrets." Mrinalini ji let out a proud smile.

lol... that was so cute

Yaap She is quite cute too 😊

'''''.

As the dawn broke the rising sun on her parted hair looked like a sindoor. Manyata dazed as she could not understand it is reality or a dream. She clutched her king tighter on his horse.

wooowww!!! u described it so beautifully jiji

Thankz 😊

"My dear lady, if you keep on dragging me like this, then I have to stop every five minutes to kiss you." A playful grin crossed king Udayveer's face. She blushed instantly but not ready to give up yet, "Oh God what a love stricken king I have got!"

hahahhaaa... kiss her every five minutes... i want such a husband!!!

Chup be besharam ladki kahiki!!! 😳

He smiled, "I know you are thanking your God in your fashion."

"Could you be bit faster your Highness, I don't think that we are out of danger yet!" Her voice sounded bit tensed.

"Believe me my lady we are completely out of danger but I can understand your urge!" King Udayveer chuckled and pulled the rein his horse, "Abhay run faster! Someone is dying to become my queen!"

"Ha ha I am always the queen!" Smiling Manyata said.

yup i am dying i am dying!!! make me your queen. see, she says she is already a queen!!!


Actually she meant that her place was no less than a queen before (keeping apart those humiliation parts)

"I want to tell you everything about myself." She sobbed.

"I am here just by your side!" The king smiled.

Then he sat on the soft grass holding her on his lap. There keeping her head on his chest she told him everything about her.

He was hearing all of it; sometimes sending few words of consolation, sometimes just a caress of comfort, or may be a gentle kiss. But the Apsara of human dream when unveiling all of her goddess pride just to be a normal woman in front of the man she loves, his eyes spoke only, "You will always be my Goddess, I will worship you showering all of my love."

wooowww... blisss... so pure love...

That look on his face made her cry again. But this time her tears made her feel that all of her miseries are going to end soon.

"I think we must continue our Journey Maharaj."

King Udayveer nodded in agreement.

'''''..

Then queen of hearts became the queen of Jaigarh. No man dared to stare at beyond her feet-except her real king!

The End

Note: I have fulfilled your wishes;now don't forget to hit the like button and comment 😃 otherwise this will be my last happy ending Manveer story ever 😉

aaawww... so sad that u r ending. i wanna noe, wat happens wen everybody gets to noe that she has married uday. plz continue na jiji

see now i commented also, now plz dont be angry on me. i will not be able to bear that. plz plz plz. gustakhi maaf

your innocent, sweet, and very sorry sis

Pranks aka Sanju



Awwwn meri behena main tujhe kab ke maafi de chuki hu...par yeh story yehi khatam honi hai...

I'll come back with another manveer lovestory 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: panchaali



Awwwn meri behena main tujhe kab ke maafi de chuki hu...par yeh story yehi khatam honi hai...

I'll come back with another manveer lovestory 😊

yippeee!!!!!! jiji's giving one more story!! yayee yayee wat is the story?? how is it?? on what it will be?? wat its name?? fast fast fast give it jiji
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: iluvmanveer

yippeee!!!!!! jiji's giving one more story!! yayee yayee wat is the story?? how is it?? on what it will be?? wat its name?? fast fast fast give it jiji


Thoda time lage ga...i have an exam...plus my lapy is not in a good condition

I have some historical os on my mind...as soon as all problem gets over I'll write again 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: panchaali


Thoda time lage ga...i have an exam...plus my lapy is not in a good condition

I have some historical os on my mind...as soon as all problem gets over I'll write again 😊

aapka fav subject history hain kya??
aapke saare stories, i mean abinashwara, library princess, n this, are all historic.
n which exam jiji??
best of luck for it
hope ur lappy gets fine soon
n u too take care, wat happened about ur eyes??
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: iluvmanveer

aapka fav subject history hain kya??
aapke saare stories, i mean abinashwara, library princess, n this, are all historic.
n which exam jiji??
best of luck for it
hope ur lappy gets fine soon
n u too take care, wat happened about ur eyes??


Yaa p history and Mythology is always my favorite 😊

Historical love stories are alwayz deep 😊

I don't know why manveer gives me a feeling of previous centuries...Their love looked sooo pure...it can't be from this century

Yeh Prince Udayveer ka face dekho...yeh toh sapno ka Rajkumar lagta hain 😉😳

Uske dekh ke main to iss duniya se dur chali jati hu 😉

I feel Uday looks most handsome in ethnic wear... 😃

Uska jalwa, gussa and power of words toh uss zamane mein hi suit karta hain!!! 😃

But if you don't like histotry so much...i have written four One shots which are all urban romances

But love stories in historical ages were quite
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: panchaali


Yaa p history and Mythology is always my favorite 😊

Historical love stories are alwayz deep 😊

I don't know why manveer gives me a feeling of previous centuries...Their love looked sooo pure...it can't be from this century

Yeh Prince Udayveer ka face dekho...yeh toh sapno ka Rajkumar lagta hain 😉😳

Uske dekh ke main to iss duniya se dur chali jati hu 😉

I feel Uday looks most handsome in ethnic wear... 😃

Uska jalwa, gussa and power of words toh uss zamane mein hi suit karta hain!!! 😃

But if you don't like histotry so much...i have written four One shots which are all urban romances

But love stories in historical ages were quite

mujhe history bahot pasand hain. i wanna becom a royal. 😆😆 bs mujhe history main q n a nai pasand. n uday looks cool in every wear. usne kuch nai pehna na, fir toh wo aur bhi accha dikhta hain,😛😛
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: iluvmanveer

mujhe history bahot pasand hain. i wanna becom a royal. 😆😆 bs mujhe history main q n a nai pasand. n uday looks cool in every wear. usne kuch nai pehna na, fir toh wo aur bhi accha dikhta hain,😛😛


Thats right...but in ethnic wear...he looks like a prince from my fairy tale...

Itne achi Indian prince main ne kahin na dekhi...isiliye sari historical stories us ke upar try marti hu

Tujhe agar history pasand hain to tu vhi kuch history wali lovestory try mar...

isme parai vhi yaad rahegi...aur manveer romance vhi miljayegi 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: panchaali


Thats right...but in ethnic wear...he looks like a prince from my fairy tale...

Itne achi Indian prince main ne kahin na dekhi...isiliye sari historical stories us ke upar try marti hu

Tujhe agar history pasand hain to tu vhi kuch history wali lovestory try mar...

isme parai vhi yaad rahegi...aur manveer romance vhi miljayegi 😊

awesome idea jiji. maine ek socha hain rajneeti involving, pata nai how it will unfold. bahot soche hain actually, pr i cn do nothing till exams .
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Posted: 12 years ago
Exam ke baad hi karna...

mujhe bahut khusi hogi agar mere ilawa aur writers vhi manveer historical lovestory likhe toh!!!

Are you story based on British era? (you said its about politics)

I'll say then try it girl!!!

Thoda internet search maro...thoda parai karo...ho jayegi sanju!!! 😊

Edited by panchaali - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: panchaali

Exam ke baad hi karna...


mujhe bahut khusi hogi agar mere ilawa aur writers vhi manveer historical lovestory likhe toh!!!

Are you story based on British era? (you said its about politics)

I'll say then try it girl!!!

Thoda internet search maro...thoda parai karo...ho jayegi sanju!!! 😊

no no, recent years. inspired frm the film "rajneeti" thanx jiji

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