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Posted: 12 years ago
Great update. A spectacular end to a wonderful OS😳. Thanks for the HAPPY ENDING😃.
Very well-written👏.
I was so happy that Uday & Manyata had already left a week before,
so , when the General & his men stormed the place ... they got a big fat BOO😆.
Thanx 4 this beautiful OS😃,
do write more (health permitting , of-course)
Thanks 4 the pm😊.
Sorry about the late comment,
my net is refusing to co-operate with me😡!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
awsomeee...
lovely happly ever after
thanx for PM.
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: ...navina...

Great update. A spectacular end to a wonderful OS😳. Thanks for the HAPPY ENDING😃.


Welcome dear 😊
Very well-written👏.

Thankz😊
I was so happy that Uday & Manyata had already left a week before,
so , when the General & his men stormed the place ... they got a big fat BOO😆.
Yaap 😆

Thanx 4 this beautiful OS😃,
do write more (health permitting , of-course)
Thanks 4 the pm😊.

Its a pleasure 😊 and I'll love to write more on manveer they became my passion...but right now i'll take some rest for few days; got to concentrate on my other works 😊
Sorry about the late comment,
my net is refusing to co-operate with me😡!!!

It happens; Zalim internet time pe bigar jati hain!!😡


And thankz again Navina 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
awesome...want a new ff asap...do pm me
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: allseasonrain

awesome...want a new ff asap...do pm me


If I write a new FF I'll pm you for sure 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

Good tha finally Manyata went with uday.They shared sweet moments.loved that scene.Finally she became his Queen & she got respect,no one looked at her body with lust.nice ending

Edited by jasminerahul - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: jasminerahul

Good tha finally Manyata went with uday.They shared sweet moments.loved that scene.Finally she became his Queen & she got respect,no one looked at her body with lust.nice ending


Thankz 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

I loved d last part most

beginning was bang on .. loved d acting by dadi

lol how she cried n how he acted over general's superstitious mind

he said he will pray in front of d lake lol lol

n then d king .. he is really a cowered .. a letter n advice of wise men made his accept d dis honoring conditions .. huh

any way I am happy that they got their happy ending

unlike d real story u choose to give a happy ending

ending was really awsm ..

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: sayaneegupta

I loved d last part most

beginning was bang on .. loved d acting by dadi

lol how she cried n how he acted over general's superstitious mind

he said he will pray in front of d lake lol lol

n then d king .. he is really a cowered .. a letter n advice of wise men made his accept d dis honoring conditions .. huh

any way I am happy that they got their happy ending

unlike d real story u choose to give a happy ending

ending was really awsm ..


Thankz Sayanee Madam 😊

Your acceptance matters the most 😃😉

Now none can stop me from beind a writer 😊😉
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Posted: 12 years ago

hi jiji. how are u!! plz ghussa thunk do na!! jitni baar bolenge, utni baar maafi mangungi sach.

sorry jiji sorry jiji!!!!

is gunah ka pryashchit karne, main chardham yatra chali jaati hu

main officially last part ki first reader hu, pr ab last commenter bhi.

The general inquired her humbly about the Lady's absence; in answer she cried even more. Finally she managed to say, "I don't know if I can ever see her face again!" The general looked at her in utter shock, "What are you saying Mrinalini Ji?"

me vi rone lag gayee thi...

"Don't you remember her fourth and final condition General?"

He frowned in fear as he remembered those words of her, "Dear King and citizen of Devgarh, remember it very carefully, as an Apsara of heaven I am a swayamvu (self born) in this mortal world and so possess the right of causing Swechamrityu (self death). If any of my conditions are disregarded by any man of authority I can do whatever I want."

oh yeah!! so intelligent

And breaking her palace without her permission his Senapati had already disregarded her.

"No this cannot happen! All of my men will apologize to her again! The general cried in utter shock.

He stopped for some moment as he could not bear the thought of crying in front of a lady, then continued, "I will tell my men to pray to her; in front of that very Lotus lake, from where the Apsara appeared first".

Mrinalini Ji burst into more tears.

haha talav pe jaake kya karenge hopeless people... cry you general. humari pyaari manyata se na jaane kya kya karwaya

"Hold yourself dear Madam; we cannot afford to lose that precious gem. It will be high shame for Devgarh! As a General I cannot bear the pain."

"But she is gone forever!" Mrinalini ji cried even louder, "My pretty little Apsara cannot bear the view of mortal sins!"

Just at that moment one soldier appeared in front of General. Bowing he presented him a letter. The general opened it and got a double shock.

"From where did you get that letter?"

The soldier said, "It was under a pillow in Lady Manyata's bed room."

He looked at Mrinalini ji and the letter and immediately ordered his men, "Soldiers vacate this place soon!"

Mrinalini gave a winning smile, all of her false tears vanished within a moment.

i loved this part

''''..

Dear King of Devgarh,

As the King of Jaigarh I am well aware of the hostility between our kingdoms which our ancestors started; and I thought it's for no specific reason. But, as my ancestor's heir I just followed the tradition with your perfect enemy like contribution.

Then last week one of my very closest tradesmen enlightened me that it is because of beauty. I heard your small mountain kingdom abounds with natural beauty; specially centre of the city. It will be a pity if I had to acquire it by force. Therefore as the king of Jaigarh I just decided to give you back every acquired land from you by Jaigarh. You are a free king now, no need to pay any tax. But a king has a huge duty i.e shist ka palan (enriching the good) and dust ka daman (slaying the evil). Therefore I will expect that you do it with due effort. And for that very reason my men will go for a personal enquiry every week ( i.e. my only requirement in exchange of returning of your land; unharmed). I presume you will obviously treat my men as your royal guest.

And suppose that you will nourish the centre of your city with same effort and respect which you did till now. I will send a very effective force to enquire that special place.

With hope I presume you will like my offer; I am kind of tired of killing Devgarh's soldiers. Its peace time now, wish you good luck.

Yours truly,

Udayveer Singh

King of Jaigarh.

wat an offer yaar, really trapping. how can uv be so intelligent!! love him like hell

The king of Devgarh let out a huge yell after reading the letter.

"Where were you when he wrote that letter while sleeping beside that B***h!"

HOW CUD THE KING SAY LIKE THAT!!!! f**k THAT bas***d!!!!

General Rajendra Seth's head bowed.

"Sire we trapped her palace from every side, not even a fly could escape that. I just don't get how it happened!"

"I do not need any information about any flies, how did that invader filth escaped?"

General bowed his head lower.

"I think it is all for that Manyata B****'s drama!"

stop calling her bitch u s**t


"No sire! Our Apsara went back to the lake , she went for a Swechamrityu." The General tried to burst into tears but it will be highly inappropriate, "Because some of my men invaded her house, broken her rules. She cannot bear our sin sire."

shut up!! she is a mortal being man!!!

"Oh shut up! You should have ordered your men to break that b***h's palace before! We could have caught that invader read handed! Right now I should be enjoying his death!

slap that king. he doesnt deserve to be the king.

"No offense sire, but you must not use that specific language to address our lost Apsara. After all she was a celestial."

"SHUUUT UUUP" the king yelled again.

u shut up!!

And the king's frustration went on. But he had take King Udayveer's offer. There were no other options.

''''

A week ago (Before Dawn)

"Listen Manyata you will own nothing by shedding your precious tears!" Mrinalini ji held her as Manyata started crying more.

"I cannot lose you! No dadi!"

Mrinalini Ji hugged her, caressed her head, "Manyata you are not the first Kalyani Janapad who is proposed by a King of an enemy kingdom."

Manyata broke that hug and looked carefully at her dadi.

There were tears in Mrinalini ji's eyes too, "I don't want you to commit the same mistake I have made! Nobody actually cares about you here. They only adore you body!"

"But you do dadi, you do care about me-More than anyone in this world!"

"But like a dadi, I want my granddaughter to get married to the person she loves, have a family of her own. Then only my soul will rest in peace."

Manyata hugged her while crying and Mrinalini Ji said with a force, "If you really care for me, don't want to lose me, then do as I say!"

"What?"

"I am your Dadi lady, I ought to be smarter than you. I know how to save myself from those evil eyes."

"Now change this tattered cloth! (She smiled at her and Manyata blushed) I meant put something nice, be quick. We don't have much time!"

wooowww such a perfect daadi!!! manyata is the luckiest to get her as her daadi!! salute n bow for the great mrinalini ji

King Udayveer drank her beauty again with his glances, when she came back in a white ghagra and red choli with a white dupatta on her forehead. No he don't want to die, he actually want to live a long and happy life with her.

aaawww...

Mrinalini ji took both of them to a deserted corridor. King Udayveer found his horse Abhay there. He immediately recognized what mistake he had done!

"Don't worry your highness, as you can see I have already masked your horse. Now none can recognize Abhay." Mrinalini ji smiled. King Udayveer returned a warm glance towards this old lady.

"From here goes a route throughout the jungle if you follow that path you will cross the border of Devgarh before break of dawn. Once you cross the border of Devgarh, there is none who can track you."

Manyata hugged her, "How could you be so awesome Dadi?"

"Because I am your Dadi, I ought to be awesome! Plus My stomach is full with secrets." Mrinalini ji let out a proud smile.

lol... that was so cute

'''''.

As the dawn broke the rising sun on her parted hair looked like a sindoor. Manyata dazed as she could not understand it is reality or a dream. She clutched her king tighter on his horse.

wooowww!!! u described it so beautifully jiji

"My dear lady, if you keep on dragging me like this, then I have to stop every five minutes to kiss you." A playful grin crossed king Udayveer's face. She blushed instantly but not ready to give up yet, "Oh God what a love stricken king I have got!"

hahahhaaa... kiss her every five minutes... i want such a husband!!!

He smiled, "I know you are thanking your God in your fashion."

"Could you be bit faster your Highness, I don't think that we are out of danger yet!" Her voice sounded bit tensed.

"Believe me my lady we are completely out of danger but I can understand your urge!" King Udayveer chuckled and pulled the rein his horse, "Abhay run faster! Someone is dying to become my queen!"

"Ha ha I am always the queen!" Smiling Manyata said.

yup i am dying i am dying!!! make me your queen. see, she says she is already a queen!!!

"I want to tell you everything about myself." She sobbed.

"I am here just by your side!" The king smiled.

Then he sat on the soft grass holding her on his lap. There keeping her head on his chest she told him everything about her.

He was hearing all of it; sometimes sending few words of consolation, sometimes just a caress of comfort, or may be a gentle kiss. But the Apsara of human dream when unveiling all of her goddess pride just to be a normal woman in front of the man she loves, his eyes spoke only, "You will always be my Goddess, I will worship you showering all of my love."

wooowww... blisss... so pure love...

That look on his face made her cry again. But this time her tears made her feel that all of her miseries are going to end soon.

"I think we must continue our Journey Maharaj."

King Udayveer nodded in agreement.

'''''..

Then queen of hearts became the queen of Jaigarh. No man dared to stare at beyond her feet-except her real king!

The End

Note: I have fulfilled your wishes;now don't forget to hit the like button and comment 😃 otherwise this will be my last happy ending Manveer story ever 😉

aaawww... so sad that u r ending. i wanna noe, wat happens wen everybody gets to noe that she has married uday. plz continue na jiji

see now i commented also, now plz dont be angry on me. i will not be able to bear that. plz plz plz. gustakhi maaf

your innocent, sweet, and very sorry sis

Pranks aka Sanju

Edited by iluvmanveer - 12 years ago

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