Swaron FF:U & Me..Back to Us.#3...Note -pg 47

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BilluKiBilli

@BilluKiBilli

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Posted: 12 years ago

#201

YAYAYYAYAY.:D

you FINALLY updateddd. thanksss sooo muchhh for the pm!

awesome updates, like really! sharon is getting her memory back and her relationship with swayam and tanya both is SO pure!

awww. the way swayam's mother was looking at the small cute family!

seriously, amazing updates!

anddd. once again thanks for the pm!

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veronica

@SwaRon_rocks

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Posted: 12 years ago

#202

Res

Unres

sry for d late comment but i was hell busy..

🥳Yippee i got 3 chapters together...(though i think the length of each chapter was vryy small😈)

cming bck to d update..do i need to repeat hw much i luv ur style of writing di😳

Ur wrks just trasform me to d swaronland..

The scene in balcony was nicely penned..loved the flashback..

Tanya is soo cute and adorable(must say just like her daddy)..i luv each and every scene in which she is present..

liked d scene with swayam's mom..

A heart was getting back its lost rhythm ….a heart was trying to ingest the ocean of happiness...contentedness...hope...and LOVE...the string attaching their hearts was at peace in the safe embrace of its nurturers ..the melodious symphony of their heart beats were filling the arena...the sweet symphony of their LOVE...

loved these lines..

And I disagree with u..The updates were not boring but xactly opposite to that and ur qualiity of writing just gets better with each update..

Dont make us wait for 3 months for the next update.. plzzz update soon and pm me..

Edited by veronica7 - 12 years ago

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Ajit sahu

@sw1234

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Posted: 12 years ago

#203

its been so long u update.i love your writting how beautifully u describe the situation .loved how u describe the hug of the little family of swayam.sharon is getting her memory back .hope to see them close together update soon.

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Sowmya

@Joshua_TANHA

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Posted: 12 years ago

#204

Finally you updated..that too 3 chapters...lovely..

As usual awesome update... Loved the flow of emotion... Loved how you are making Sharon remember her past slowly..the last part where Tanya was was amazing ...

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VAISHNAVI MURALI

@-vaishnavimural

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Posted: 12 years ago

#205

CHAP 18
awesome part.. dark past of sharon d words by d people n way they remarked her n her pain wen she dreamt of it was beautifully portrayed ... swayam's concern n sharon's support from swayam was shown brilliantly.. d ques which stopped swayam's world n he assurance that he cant live witout her n her stopping him from saying d word death was beautiful.. d way sharon felt solace in swayam's arms was nice.. d way both compared d other to moon n d way swayam said those words were beautifully brilliant... awesome part..

CHAP 19
sharon feeling d dream of their past n d flashes were good.. swayam's eyes ful of hope n love tears wen sharon asked abt her dream bringing a new hope n trust in their life was brilliant.. d assurance sharon got wen swayam said he as already said that line to her she felt hope in getting her past back n her hope for reliving her past n swayam's words that she ll get back her memory giving hope n promise to each other was nice..

CHAP 20
tanya-sharon scene was cute.. sharon made tanya drink milk n swayam seeing them wit ful of love was beautifully penned.. wen sharon got few more flashes it made her to b sure that she ll get back her lost life of 3yrs n swayam happy n having a lots of hope that sharon ll get her memory back.. then tanya part were she spoke cutely telling even she missed her n wen she momma d word sharon was waiting to hear from tanya n d way both swayam n sharon were shocked was nice... sharon asking tanya to repeat her words n tanya innocently telling she missed her momma n d happy tears n d way swayam n tanya said v love u momma was beautiful.. swayam's mom seeing this wit teary eyes found swayam getting his life back which he lost wen sharon went missing for 3yrs n d happiness she had to c them together happy was brilliantly penned...
d last para was mindblowing.. A heart was getting back its lost rhythm ….a heart was trying to ingest the ocean ofhappiness...contentedness...hope...and LOVE...the string attaching their hearts was at peace in the safe embrace of its nurturers ..the melodious symphony of their heart beats were filling the arena...the sweet symphony of their LOVE...
waiting for next part.. awesome chapters deeps.. in love wit this ff a lot n these 3 updates made me to fal al over again for ur brilliant n beautiful writing skills that too wen portraying emotions.. hats of u to dear...👏👏👏👏👏👏

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Priyambada Subudhi

@pri_tanvi

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Posted: 12 years ago

#206

An update after ages!! but totaly worth it! 3 chps together! an awesome surprise!! i love ur writing style, a literary marvel!! and of course i loved the 3 updates!! it touched my heart!! :') :)

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medha

@ToujoursPur

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Posted: 12 years ago

#207

deep...

love love love it

the rhythm in your work man...

its liquid...it dances and flows.

you're awesome.

love--medha

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704537

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Posted: 12 years ago

#208

OMG all at one shot...awesome Deep...thnx for d Pm

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pratik vyas

@pratik54000

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Posted: 12 years ago

#209

Hey Deeps finally got much waited updates on this work of yours which is famous so much that it doesn't need any explanations to describe it. As I had promised I am reading some SwaRon or D3 works of friends so that I keep in touch with them and they feel that there is someone reading their efforts...well this is one is one of my most favorite works from the time it has started i have always tried follow this one with every update. You are an amazing writer there is no second thought about that, the ease with which you explain story is just marvelous. And you did good thing by providing three back to back updates as it surely justified your three months delay.

Now what do I say about updates they were fantastic as ever or should say marvelous as ever or tremendous as ever, People who have commented before me have said everything about updates and they know it better then me. But I want to say if writer's block can bring out amazing updates like these ones then I wish you should have writer's block every weekend.

I am not going comment part wise because i feel it was the constant one flow story going on so I am seeing three parts as one part. I am not a person to comment on language you used or what kind of writing marvel this one is, all this is left to some esteem persons that we have on forum to look to so I would not limit there opinion by giving mine.

You have really woven a simple yet very adorable scenario here in these updates. The way Sharon is shown is really beautiful and totally worth relating also. You have very nicely shown the very confused sight of Sharon who is trying to remember her past life and sudden turn of events bring out some images or memories of past event in her sub-conscious mind. I guess it's the first step towards coming back of her memory which excites me the most because I badly want to see Sharon retain her memory.

Swayam on the other hand is shown more pleasant personality this time because Sharon is back in his life and is starting to remember past events by stroke of events that happen in present. A inbuilt excitement in Swayam for Sharon getting back her memory is shown very nicely I loved all his reactions when Sharon asked him about past events.

And then pretty little Tanya was also adorable as ever in these updates also. She made some cute antiques and gestures which gave us some really light and heart touching moments between SwaRon and Tanya with SwaRon. I don't why but mere name of Tanya brings smile to my face, you can imagine the impact the character of Tanya on me by this statement.

Now going back to turn of events I really enjoyed the balcony romance and reminiscence of SwaRon and the way you used moon light as an added advantage to describe SwaRon. Again those romantic lines of Swayam like "My moon has no defects" and all made me smile as much as it left impact on Sharon. The sleep of SwaRon was also adorable I was really viewing imaginative scenes reading the part.

Then came the milk portion of Tanya and how it related to SwaRon and Sharon confessing the father and daughter duo are irresistible and cute. And then roothna and manana and sharing warmth part was super awesome it made me feel as if i was living that moment myself.

Then finally Swayam's mom's POV came and it was share delight to read feeling of two mothers at the same time because at that very time when Swayam's mother was happy seeing her son happy with his little family, Tanya for the first time called Sharon mommy instead of angel which was a huge moment in Sharon's life because being a mother for the first time she felt complete when Tanya called her mom. Feelings of two mothers with totally different angles was too good to read.

And then Swayam, Sharon and Tanya having some heart warming time together was the cherry on the cake. I enjoyed reading that the most in the three updates of yours. On the whole it was beautiful very very much. I can just go on and on and on praising your skills for bringing out such beautiful updates.

Thank so much for providing such nice updates. Your updates made me realize why i never had readers because i can never have the writing brilliance that you posses. You are a writing marvel. Carry on delivering such nice works though i have quit D3 but i will be following your works always.

Thanks for PM and I had lovely time reading the updates... waiting for more parts...

Pratik

Edited by pratik54000 - 12 years ago

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Mihika

@Legilimens.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#210

Hey di.. Finally I am here to give you a bada comment. :D

Anyways, coming to the update, fab update(s) as always... I hate the person who called Sharon jinxed. :/ Even though it was in her dream..Or maybe I should say nightmare. Who the hell is that person to call her jinxed mahn? She isn't jinxed, after all, she has Swayam with her. 😉

His touch soothed her pain..her fears...she hid her teary face in his chest...the most secure place on earth for her...he pulled her into his embrace...and stroked her back to mellow down her pain...

I love their love.. It's so pure without any constraints and inhibitions..

Bolo Swayam..tum mujhe kabhi chod ke toh nehi jaoge na...I won't be able to survive again...without YOU..

Shhh...Rote nehi...I won't leave you alone...Never again jaan...trust me.

The way he loves her, no one else does. Physically they are two separate individuals, but emotionally, they are one... One soul which inhibits two bodies.. and a promise of staying together forever.. when they mean it.. is what makes SwaRon so unique.

The full moon was shining in the star studded sky...the beautiful moon caught her attention...she looked at him '.the silver melting light on him...made his skin shine like silver...his heavenly cheek bones..the perfectly shaped nose...the beautifully carved lips...and the best feature of his face...his personality...his soul piercing dark chocolate brown eyes...her solace in those years of pain...years of separation...HIS EYES...they always reminded her of deep oceans...as if they had thousands of emotions hidden in them..they held his endless unconditional love for her...

I loveee the way you describe all their features.. So perfect. 😳

Tumhara chand...??

Look into my eyes...you will see the reflection of my moon...way more beautiful than the one shining in the sky....

This somehow reminds me of that watsup?Stars scene! The only difference is that this is wayyy more beautiful than that scene. I seriously adore them. They are so cute..

And then, there was a slight trace of reminiscence in her mind. This part was fab. Loved the way you wrote it.. It was depicted beautifully...

The cutest part was definitely the family gathering. Again Tanya was so adorable in this update...

We love you MOMMA... And both placed a kiss on her cheeks...

And Tanya finally called her momma.. Swayam was so sweet here..Swayam's mom admiring the trio.. Aww..

Waise toh, each and every line in this update was adorable.. But personally I super liked the way where you culminated your updates.. Beautifully done..

Splendid job as always..

Update soon..

Mihika..😳

Edited by tanha29 - 12 years ago