SwaRon OS: Love doesnt have any counts (note-PG14)

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pratik vyas

@pratik54000

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Posted: 12 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: sajan_swaron

hey thank you soo much for understanding
i promise the first thing ill do after my exams r done is to comment on ur os
that would be after nov 9
n same to you
study well n all the best to you too😊

Hey its ok i too have exams so understand karna to banta hi hai boss...and its ok jab free ho jao tab comment unres kar dena...thanx for wishing me luck for exams of mine...

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muskan

@LoveShantannu

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#32

It was a nyc thought and amazingly plotted it could be continued further and become an amazing ss bt I won't want you to do dat coz as per you title d ending was beautifully written. One think dat I wanted to see was Rey and kriya's reaction dry would have a million dollar reaction for sure. The os was quite pleasant wid a lite start and had grt moments which made it more amazing. As always I loved ur writing style coz I think it carries a different touch in it unlike typical love stories.

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pratik vyas

@pratik54000

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Posted: 12 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: LoveShantannu
It was a nyc thought and amazingly plotted it could be continued further and become an amazing ss bt I won't want you to do dat coz as per you title d ending was beautifully written. One think dat I wanted to see was Rey and kriya's reaction dry would have a million dollar reaction for sure. The os was quite pleasant wid a lite start and had grt moments which made it more amazing. As always I loved ur writing style coz I think it carries a different touch in it unlike typical love stories.

Muskan thanks for liking it...ya you got it right there it could be a ss but i wanted to go in one shot...and yes rey kriya reaction was there when i wrote it in first but it was getting too long so i removed that stopped at the confession...thanks you liked my way of writting...actually i cannot emote love that well as some others do here while writing...but i am glad you liked it...

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Karen Johnson "Maria"

@Karen_sharon

Voyager

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Posted: 12 years ago

#34

Heya Sweet Pratik...

How r u??? Talking about d os i think it was really fantastic..luv d way u write ur works...plz update ur Swaron FF soon i am waiting eagerly for d nxt part!

Thanks for such a beautiful OS on SwaRon!:-)

Karen

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Nivriti

@agreatperhaps

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#35

Pratik! 🤗

I must say, you are a marvel yourself. 😎

While reading this OS, I just got glued to my laptop screen 🤓 and irritated when somebody disturbed me. 😡

This is amazing!

I really liked the way you started out with explaining all the minute details in Swayam's room and the way he slept. 😆

And the names Rey addressed Swayam with were simply hilarious! 🤣

A very light-headed yet powerful conversation they shared! 😳

The way you conveyed their love lives and especially the "Munjarilal Babu" was amazing and highly commendable. 👏

I was literally laughing out hard when Swayam got to know that making Sharon and Swayam practice / rehearse together was Kria and Rey's joint plan. 😆😆

Then comes the Dance Rehersal..

Well, I must say, you portrayed Sharon's feelings and emotions flawlessly when she went back to her old days remembering her old self and compared Swayam's touch with that of Arav.

Obviously Arav and Sharon shared true love, otherwise who will change herself?

And, when the intense eye-lock came, I fell in the Swayam-Sharon dreamland!

But that slimy Raj came in between, I felt like slapping him million times for ruining with romantic moment and make his face go blue-black! 😡 -

But then I guess it was needed, thankfully some sense knocked into Sharon's head and she broke-off with that loon.

Then came the heart-to-heart conversation between Swayam and Sharon, though mostly Swayam spoke and Sharon pondered! 😳

The moment Swayam had said I had loved you from the day I saw you and collected all the pictures of yours which came in magazines , firstly I was expecting a blow from Sharon. 🤔

Thankfully that did not happen!

And when Sharon went back home and ruminated, self-talked, I was simply mesmerized. 😲

I loved the way you penned down all the emotions she faced and especially when she self-confessed that she loved Swayam deeply!

And the way she got restless and decided to call Swayam was so Sharon-like.! 😆

The confession was the cutest part of the ONE Shot! 😳

And the way Sharon interrupted Swayam mid way his sentence of death and said We will die together !

Aw. Is all I could think! 😳

So, at the end of the bible, I would say Pratik, you are an awesome writer which I did not know about and have beautiful writing skills. 👏

Keep writing whenever you find time, because you are a Gem!!

And one thing that hurt me the most was, why did you not PM me about this wonderful creation of yours? 🥺

Anyhow! Amazing Work Dear!

Keep it Up!

I must say, a very beautiful Thank You cum Good Bye One Shot for Shantanu and Sneha! 😉

Keep Writing and Do PM me the next time! :D

-Nivriti

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Satnam

@Satluvsd3

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#36

res...
the satu comment will pakka come by tonight so sry for the delay bhaiya... 😔
unres
i know i've commented ahead..
but here i would just say that..
i love SwaRon n TanHa from the bottom of my heart
reading this side of SwaRon a whole new... story makes me love them more
i wish i could seen this seen being done by Tannu n sneha!! 😳
they really mean a lot to me...
reading this shade of SwaRon makes me feel SwaRon-ish!! 😳

Edited by Satluvsd3 - 12 years ago

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tanuka

@Tanuka_TanHa

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#37

EDITED 😎

http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3238425&PID=67139780&#67139780

- big monster

Edited by tanukaswaron - 12 years ago

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@shivi_reylover

Voyager

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Posted: 12 years ago

#38

bhai , y always swaron?????????????? 👎🏼😒

a kr update too...plzz 😊

nywayz update👏👏

ty for d pm...

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Phantasm

@Phantasm

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#39

Firstly loved the Reyam bond, partners in crime Aha!! Loved the start, Swayam dreaming about Sharon, well not surprising and did Rey call Sharon volcano😆 and Swayam calling Sharon's BF gonchu🤣 I liked it when Rey was giving gaali to Swayam every now and then! And aww Sharon got impressed with Swayam in their first interaction session only now thats the charm of our Majnu bwoy😳 and how empty she felt when she had to leave Swayam while dancing because of that 🤬 Raj!!

Swayam loved her long back,but never confessed.Sharon's pain was beautifully described and how well could Swayam decode Sharon! And the title goes well with the story. So to put up it was just awesome👍🏼

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Roger

@HPHolic-3

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#40

Awesome os
The storyline of this os is very beautifull n it touched my heart
Love is the feeling which have no bounds it happen suddenly n change our lives.It can destory a person n make someone lives their life happily
U show both sides of love
After aarav's death sharon made a shell around her n on other side swayam loved her from 6yrs without meeting her...
Both their feelings were described amazingly...:)
loved it

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