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kriti_atharv

@kriti_atharv

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Posted: 12 years ago

#61

wow beauitful dear...very nice n thnx 4da pm...

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prerna salian

@prerna31s

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#62

Wow amazing !!! I loved how u portrayed payal in dis FF...I loved dat she suppported her sis !! Bt whr is she planning to go ? To arnav I guess !!
Waiting to read the next part :)

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angeldream14

@angeldream14

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+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#63

loved it

awesome

aft all payal is doing something 4 her sister

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Sarina2012

@Sarina2012

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Posted: 12 years ago

#64

Haii... This is heartwrentching. It pains for khushi to constantly go thru this and your story puts the emotions down so beautifully.

Payal finally gets it. Aakash pisses me off. Even on the show. The only time he grows a spine is when it's against his wife. Ugh!

You know u could make it many parts and none of us will complain

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SaJanLuv14

@SaJanLuv14

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#65

Love this so far and miss reading your writing!!! Feeling terrible for Khushi again and I hope things turn out for the better, and I'm glad Payal finally opened her eyes to what she should have seen a while back
Love shouldn't be like this, they should stand up for one another
I can't wait to read the next part!! :D

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Uthra

@Viji79

Inactive

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#66

I seriously want Payal to look into Mami's face and say "The Raizada brothers have ruined our lives" and walk away not even looking in Akash's way just like ou have described.

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Devilways

@Devilways

Navigator

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#67

I wish to kill Dadi i wish such a character were real!

Nice really put up Dadi's thoughts in the open! Finally a strong Payal on the show and this story. I want to see if she can set everything right.

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RasgullaSP

@Rasgulla_sp

Trailblazer

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#68

Both Dadi's and Payal's thoughts were fantastically portrayed. One high on her victory. The other low on marital defeat. Beautiful. 👏

Do PM me the next part too.

Thanks for the PM.

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@debby_11

Inactive

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#69

fantastic lady...so well written :)

Just loved it...each and every emotion were so well expressed...Awesome :)

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mentalist

@mentalist

Beginner

Posted: 12 years ago

#70

Dadi is so, umm anti-feminist. Ironic, considering that she's a women herself.
So self-righteous and pious.

Payal with spunk? :D
This is exactly how it should be.
Loved the last paragraph. It was so true.

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