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ShiningStar18

@ShiningStar18

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Posted: 12 years ago

#331

Beautiful!

Really saddening. :(

And the case report just creeped me out

Amazing update!

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inspiringstars

@inspiringstars

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#332

Part 6 -

Yes, an elder sister, a person wiser and stronger than the younger sibling, thats what she is, supporting and comforting, knowing and saying, thats what Anjali is here, and I am so glad you made her like this.

I am really proud of Anjali here, that she did not just tell the truth to her brother, but also let him know a big weakness, her own fault, and that can only be done if she is courageous enough. And she is.

The best part about the part was when they embrace, he realized how she is not weak and frail like always, and it is not the dampness from her that was weakening him, and his own, his teardrops had him suprised, but today Arnav was the one who was broken, shattered, needed the comforting embrace and the soothing whispers. I am glad you were able to show the breaking down of a man like that. I think its difficult to break down a character, that was an epitome of ego, masks, rage, anger, etc. I applaud your efforts in that.

I love the pictures at the start of the updates.

Thanks for the PM

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inspiringstars

@inspiringstars

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#333

Damn Rae, this made me so sad, and helpless, and just sad!

The way you have written the part where he realizes its his anger that has people no trusting him, its his anger that makes me people hide things from him, and the last part where he says, his mother had complete faith that her son would never change, it was all so heartbreaking, it portrayed his turmoil very well.

And somewhere it was because his mother had faith that her son wouldn't change that he had been kept in the dark.

And then his frantic search at Buaji's place, his and Buaji's conversation, the broken shattered man, clashed with a helpless aunt who is ready to defend her neice but is helpless because she cannot do anything to bring them back together, the slap was so so emtional, i mean yes it was needed, but it shook him, shook herself, and then the tears in his eyes, as if he is letting go of all the pain of not seeing Khushi.

Then Shashi's words with finality, wow, that was just brilliance! A father, not said much for an year, but when somebody who betrays his daughter comes at his doorstep, he doesnt fail to show the father in him, loud and clear, final!

Finally, the missing report, Gosh, I was so sad, she is still missing. Its heartbreaking Rae.

Your authors note was awesome too, because it showed the amount of effort you put into the SS. The pictures, changing with every update, was so beautiful. The reasons behind them all the more beautiful.

I am glad I read this SS, even though it was sad, it was beautifully written. There is a definite beauty in portraying PAIN that is like no other. And you did that just PERFECTLY.

Thanks :)

Pankti

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Priya

@ArhiDeewani

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#334

OMG!!! The end was totaly unexpected to me!!

Well maybe I should have guessed from the name, but it really shocked me!!!

An extremely emotional update!

Waah, my heart cries for them!!

Loved the SS on the whole, amazing work! 👏

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flutterby

@flutterby

Sparkler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#335

five... i ABSOLUTELY loved how u described arnav's conflicting emotions here... he so wanted to share his pain with someone.. unleash his burden.. yet didnt say a word to his sis.. 👏
Arnav felt like a little boy, afraid, almost, of how disapproving his elder sister looked and what would be the repercussions of his errant behavior...in less grave situations, it might have made him smile and pull Di's lef the way he did but today his lips refused to lift and his wit refused to cooperate because today in his sister's eyes, he saw the broken dreams of a woman understood by another.
epic para.. the above... wonderfully capturing arnav's dilemma.. 👏 ⭐️
there was no anger in it, there was just deep sadness, a deep pain, a deep shame, a deep disappointment
the above lines reminded me of harry potter.. harry goes through the same emotions when he fails to get the memory from slughorn as requested by dumbledore..
even the para where u wrote about their childhood.. anjali feeding cadbury.. learning to make sugar free chocolates.. for arnav.. sending him abroad, encouraging him after his rejection at his jobs struck a cord in me.. its by such lines that i understand their pain of having to grow up without parents... kudos to u 👏 Being his mother when no one else could. epic epic line...

six... can i just say wow??? for the first part?? i am simply out of words, rae.. dont know what to say!! arnav without even realising it was his tears.. waited for his sis to cry.. when she consoled him.. and her realisation that she had got her chotte back is so heartwarming this sentence is a wonderful depiction of it...
If her Chotte had put on a mask, then his Di had turned her face away from the reality too, not seeing how even weaker it made him.

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Amanram

@Amanram

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#336

truly different and very well written. really enjoyed reading all the parts at one go

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Soulmate27

@Soulmate27

Navigator

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#337

Well, all i can say is MEZMERISINGLY BEAUTIFUL, SAD, ANGSTY and SOOO BEAUTIFUL :)

Very well worded :)

Happy endings are RARE in real life...

they exist only in fantasyland...or tvland...

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Japonica

@Japonica

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#338

What a beautiful story, AT. How come I didn't even know about till I stumbled on it by chance about half an hour ago. I'm really glad i found it- it was very poignant and beautifully written.

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babli0204

@babli0204

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#339

I very much enjoyed reading your FFs. I understand your anguish completely to restrict your works in a blog because of plagiarism! I detest such mean acts and am with you in your decision.
But I also want to read your works further. Please give me permission to visit your blog!!!