A Lost Battle -SwaRon OS- Part 2 updated. - Page 7

i read it from mobile...its really a nice one...every emotion very touching...u have written it beautifully...swaron romance...hayee...the last part cud have been lil something satisfying...but thats okay... title wise perfect story...i wud love to see a continuation frm it but this is the end...loved swayam a lot

Originally posted by: tanharocks

Sudha...it was fab...but why did u made sharon go to us...but then on other tht u justified ur title 'the lost battle'...plz contiune writing n plzz pm me when u do because i do miss most of the thing written of forum...so plz..

p.s- it's a request...will u write another os sort of extension to this in which u would get swaron together...plz...

Originally posted by: luvSwaron4ever

i read it from mobile...its really a nice one...every emotion very touching...u have written it beautifully...swaron romance...hayee...the last part cud have been lil something satisfying...but thats okay... title wise perfect story...i wud love to see a continuation frm it but this is the end...loved swayam a lot

Originally posted by: Sawyer_Tom

Nicely written Sudha. 😃

Loved the fact that it was long. And I somewhere got the feeling that it was more your story than SwaRon's. Though it did compliment them very well.

It was simple yet tragic. And that was the most endearing quality of your OS. I don't have to say that it was realistic because I'm certain that you already know that. Loved the way how she left him, knowing that the next time she turned back it would be impossible to leave.

I enjoyed it very much and I do agree with Kanks. You do need to improve on your punctuation a little.

Do keep writing. 😊

Originally posted by: chimpukli10

hey dear it was awesum Os was able 2 connect with the story..understood why sharon acted like dis..do pm me whn u write sumthng else

Originally posted by: swaron95

Sudha...Wow...this was just a beauty..I loved the way you write..do write more...

I know the ending is a bit sad but the way you handled it was just wonderful...very very realistic...I enjoyed reading it...

Do write more...many many more..and maybe a bit more happy ones...

Do PM me...Thanks for the PM...

I know I'm late..I guess you know why...

It was amazing!! The story line was so well thought out, you really put alot of effort into this and it shows awesome results.

Sudha first of all sorry for being late in reading and commenting...

and now coming back to main point os...it was just awsome and beautifully displayed feelings of a girl who is trapped by a bitter reality...i have no words to display how much i liked this os...the simiplicity of writing touched me deep down...

i could feel myself connecting to the story personally...dnt knw why but it was like i was feeling the pain of both sharon and swayam...sharon unable breakfree from a bitter truth and swayam not really wanting to hurt or force himself on sharon...i know ending was different nd sad but thats the most natural part of the story sometimes you love someone but destiny doesnt allow you to stay with him/her...

wonderfull os...thanks for PM...sorry again for being late latif...

regards...

pratik...