My first ff... ONCE IN A BLUE MOON - Page 2

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Posted: 13 years ago
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its nice thriller very very unique
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Posted: 13 years ago
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thrilling..!! waiting fr nxt prt :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#13
Good 1 😃...keep it up...wating to read your next part...😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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CHAPTER 3
A week and few days later...

In the main meeting chamber, Maha Ari(MA) sat on the chair in front of the fireplace. His fingers traced the rim of a small bottle again and again until the door creaked open. Two young men in their early twenties entered the room and came and sat in the chairs kept for them.

MA: Jo karya tum dono ko diya vo sampoorna hua?
both the young men exchanged a look of concern.

Harshvardhan: ji MA. parantu.. baat yeh hai ki unhe sanshay hone ki sambhavna hai.kaise yeh vo nahi jan payenge .

MA:(frustated) yeh yeh dekho kya ho raha hai .

he threw in front of them a newspaper whose headlines read--
'A NEW CIVILIZATION DISCOVERED. INDIA'S HISTORY PUSHED BACK BY MANY CENTURIES'

MA: Sab log ek naya itihaas ka panna samajhke ise dekh rahe hai. jabki yeh sabse puratan hai. yeh chitra, sikkon ki, eeton ki(bricks sorry for the spelling).

he threw the paper in the fire while both the men stared at it for a long time until one of them spoke up.

Vikramaditya: humare liye ab kya agya hai MA?

MA: Pehle yeh dekho- (he showed them the small bottle and brought out an old hollow cup. he opened the bottle and poured the almost invisible content in the cup. the cup gleamed and and shone) dekh rahe ho. yeh rajeev ne us firangi ko mili hui eet se laya hai. tumhe batane ki koi avashyakta nahi ki yeh kya hai.

Harshvardhan: avishvasneeya! yeh to un eeton mein se hai jo-

MA: Unhi mein se ek. ispe likhi gayi hui lipi najar aane lagi thi. samay ke sath iski shaktiyaan kamzor ho rahi hai. ab toh vinash hi vinash dikh raha hai.

Vikramaditya: aapke kehne anusaar hamne sabhi sikkon pe kavach daal diya hai. un logonko lipi(script) toh samaj mein kabhi bhi nahi aayegi. aur un mein se yeh do sabse mehetvapoorna vastu hum laye hai.

Harshvardhan: aapko vishwaas nahi hoga parantu sadiyon baad vo mile hai. jo vastuen dhoondhtein dhoondhtein hamare poorvaj poorna bharatvarsh bhraman karte rahe vo vaha mili.

A group of 15 people came inside carrying two separate heavy metal trunks. they struggling under the magical weight of it because literally they were not carrying it or touching it, they had lifted it with their magic. it was becoming difficult to keep those trunks apart. finally vikramaditya and harshvardhan went forward and brought them single-handedly.

MahaAri blessed them both by saying- tum donone kitne varshon tak atyant sahas ka karya kiya. mein tumhe aashirwaad deta hun ki hamare yeh do maseehe tum dono ke parivaar meinhi janm lenge.
saying thus, the two trunks shone with blinding light.

MA: inhe surakshit rakhna hoga . hum sabhiko tum dono ki avashyakta hai vikramaditya aur harshvardhan. ab jab meine tum dono ko yeh ashirwaad diya hai, to avashyakta aur prabal ho gayi hai.

MahaAri smiled satisfied as though that light had given
them a ray of hope. Who knows if it did.

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end of chp3!
do comment😃

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Posted: 13 years ago
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awesome mistry story dear ...and what a concept..this is too unique
but i think u r talking about harappan civilization...whose lipi couldn't be read yet
so in ur story these men have done something with those lipis so that none can't read them
i think in those lipis there were something if it would have been read then those britishers could destroy india as india was their colony then
right time hasn't come to read those lipis
and are harshvardhan, vikramaditya are reincarnation of those ancient kings??maha ari is chanakya isn't it??..so there were something about indus civilization which the ancient kings wanted but they don't want modern people would know about this
but why???
mind blowing concept
hope i am right about guessing this
but i would request your writing such complicated so that readers would face difficulty to understand this
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awsm updt!! n vry unique thought... plz continue soon...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#17
chp3 is too good ha...realy waitin for next 1!

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Posted: 13 years ago
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niceee...!! 😃 bit confusing though...took me sme time 2 undrstnd 😛
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Posted: 13 years ago
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dear can u plz clear ur concept/?ur writing is great.but sometimes we r failig to understand
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Posted: 13 years ago
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@to all of u-- thanks for ur comments. i m so sorry if i confused u all😛. i m surprised at my own complicated thoughts coz its the first time i am writing anything and i mean it anything. i guess its too much of "dan brown, jk rowling, cs lewis... i apologise again and i'll reduce the confusion and i hope that all these chp will become clear as i write further (as i intend it to). actually i mean everything to unfold in its sequel. coz this is much like a puzzle falling back into place at the end and the picture will be clear. but m afraid i'll lose my readers if i continue along this way!!!😆 i hope u all will be alright with the mystery quotient. i'll certainly improve my writing and make it clearer.

@aru- i'll say 25% of ur guess is right. m writing about the indus valley civilization. but no m not dealing with reincarnations but something very different(dunno wats gonna happen!!)😉 maha ari isnt chanakya coz if read the 2nd chp he mentions to bhadrabhatt" vishwaas nahi hota ki tum kabhi acharya chanakya ke shishya the"
vikramaditya and harshwardhan are not those kings but just their names are common.
m not highlighting any specific type of people(british). rather m concentrating on the complete mankind which is ignorant as compared to peaople of the ancient times.

lastly thatks for all of ur time!! and do keep reading😃

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