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Posted: 13 years ago

#631

wicked update!!! loved that arnav was repenting. really sad but satisfying. sorry i'm a sadist like that, lol.cant wait for khushi to be in the picture, but patience is a vitue,lol

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Posted: 13 years ago

#632

because she was not only the victim of Shyam Manohar Jha but also of Arnav Singh Raizada.

Wow! Each one of us picked different parts of the update as our favorite lines. That only shows how amazing you are! :D

Loved this update Rae! I was busy downloading 'Zindagi Na Milegi Dobara' or i would've been here sooner!

Nisha Frnacia Oberoi's father Alessandro did something very wrong, right? I know this chapter was all about Arnav, his repentance, the process has started you said. But I'm more interested in the girl. She doesn't deserve this, she doesn't want it too.. And she knows, she is aware of these things. Still, she's doing it, to appease her grandparents so she can redeem her father?

There's a lot more to her story, right? Apart from her being in love with a man named Sharman..

Hmm.. I'm loving this story Rae. It is good to see Arnav repenting. We're all sadistic in this respect, I think people will concur.

Continue soon.. And you're bringing Khushi in the next update? Awesome! :D

Loved it! :)

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Posted: 13 years ago

#633

Too bad she wasn't there to listen to any of his cries.

Wow, This was just so emotional. The way you described Arnav and what he was feeling. How he was regretful of how he treated her, the words he said, the actions he took and the way he acted around her. If only he could go back in time I'm sure he would change a whole lot of things.

Nisha, Oh Boy, What a dilemma. The promises they made only a while ago making them think how about if one of them broke it. The way the dinner progressed, the awkwardness, but the fact that only one person sensed this does scare me. I mean do they not know or can they not see the tension between the two and how they act?.

I can't wait to read Khushi's side now and also Sharmans. You have truly done this chapter justice Rae. Don't worry about it you have the talent and the gift of reaching out to your readers, and dragging them into your story.

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Ritu

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Posted: 13 years ago

#634

That was a sad but great update.

I am not liking the fact how easily Nani can give Khushi's place to anyone.I mean can't anyone see how unhappy Nisha and Arnav are.I loved it how you described Arnav's feelings and his guilt.

How much he hoped she was happy and satisfied and well without him there to corrupt her life.

These lines brought tears in to my eyes and I am having a feeling that in your FF,Khushi won't come back to Arnav easily.

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KaaminiJha

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Posted: 13 years ago

#635

I cried.

I think it's proof enough that the update was an amazing one...

Thanks for PM.

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Sona

@mistyrains

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Posted: 13 years ago

#636

This is one of those chapters that makes a tug at your heart, bringing back whirlpool of memories with every word and makes you smile, sadly.

And you have done a flawless job at it.

Arnav's agony, his helplessness is so piercing, that I can't begin to imagine what Khushi would be going through.

Update soon, really looking forward to the next chapter.

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Shruti

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Posted: 13 years ago

#637

aww arnav realised his mistakes quite late hon

because she was not only the victim of Shyam Manohar Jha but also of Arnav Singh Raizada.

this line made me...😭

the anguish of arnav was very well written👏

and nisha is going to stay at RM and even on that he is remembering khushi aww😭

great update continue soon

PS update ab main kya karoon? plzz Rae

sorry i should not say here but cant resist myself😛

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Posted: 13 years ago

#638

Oh dear! That was so painful yet beautiful!
Seeing the unbreakable Raizada laid bare was strangely intriguing!
I'm glad u gave us a glimpse of the agony and pain he is suffering without Khushi!
Oh I wonder why he didn't stop Khushi when he found out she was innocent?! Guess we'll find out soon?

Awesome update!
Continue soon :)

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Posted: 13 years ago

#639

"How much he hoped she was happy and satisfied and well without him there to corrupt her life.

Too bad she wasn't there to listen to any of his cries."

That is such an Arnav thing to do... So he let her go... but still hasn't let go of her.. from his heart i mean... that's not very fair towards Nisha.. Then again Nisha has some what the same disposition as well.. this is a business transaction for them.. nothing more.. a mere convenience..

Since you asked for feedback here are my two cents where your writing is concerned

I am definitely liking the way you're writing... the tone... the shift between the POVs are all done very nicely and smoothly... You got Arnav's anguish bit really well... and Nisha's hesitance and feeling of being cornered were brought about very well...

A word of caution though introducing your own characters is good... very good in fact... But when you put out a work of fanfiction then your appealing to your readers' love for IPKKND/which ever show... So too many new names not a good idea... Though i am loving Nisha and i am sure i'll love Shramn too... but other than that my only suggestion would be to pick knows names while introducing additional(i am loving the leads!)characters.. that will reach out to the audience more, IMO.

Cheers

-Shri-

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Jalebi Jane

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Posted: 13 years ago

#640

The girl whose dreams he had crushed and whose soul he had broken and who he had left as hollow as she had found him.

The above seemed to encapsulate the impetus/catalyst--and in his earlier comments, I feel he is trying to right a wrong--with a new woman. He doesn't want to crush another woman. The first episode where he wants to send her a car and she refuses, he doesn't impose it on her as the old ASR would have. I wonder if that is the lesson from his life with Khushi: give a woman space.

But, I STILL don't want him to be without Khushi.

(Maya drumming fists on table and howling indecorously!)