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ArhiIPKKND

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Posted: 13 years ago

#91

beautiful...the emotions shown by khushi and arnav are excelllent...i love it that arnav is so repentant here while khushi is so fiesty...loved the part she said only she had the right to decide what happens to him...possessive...

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Asmita88

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Posted: 13 years ago

#92

hie marybarton,

i have to admit that i am on of those reader who just read and wait early for the next update but never comment..

let me tell u i do love ur ff but i was a little bit disappointed in the part 9..

when u are on the verse of losing someone u love so much, i think there will be so much emotion when the loved ones are reconciled..

i don't know maybe it is just me.. i was thinking the confrontation of khushi and arnav would be more dramatic and full of emotions...

nevertheless , i did love other plots..

i love how u have moved the story of imad and anjali.. imad has unknowingly bind himself in the life of anjali through 2 person that matters most to anjali her brother and her daughter.. i loved this..

and i loved the fact how khushi chachu found himself connected with arnav situation..

now about the prediction .. or i would rather say my wish

1. i wish to see more dramatic confrontation between anjali and arnav regarding arnav suicide.. arnav was the one who always tell anjali not to leave him like his mom and anjali must have felt devasted when arnav was the one who was nearly going to leave her like her mom did..

2. i would love to see imad coming to support anjali and maybe even get angry at for creating such pain for anjali..

3. since you have shown the reconciliation between arhi, i think there would be more matchmaking attempt between anjali and imad..

since i really love anjali and arnav sibling bond,plz could u have more of them in next update..

and yes i am eagarly waiting for the next update :P

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Asmita88

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Posted: 13 years ago

#93

Originally posted by: Marybarton
Quick note, yes there will be a part 10 and it will probably be the last part 😊

nooo... i don't want it to end... :'(

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asumi

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Posted: 13 years ago

#94

that was just damn cute!!! and the pics u placed!! too good!! :) :) love the equation these two have!!!! very beautifully written!!!

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sheks007

@sheks007

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Posted: 13 years ago

#95

would love to see arnav and khushi as cupids for anjali and imad...also arnav bonding a lot with anisha...finally ziyad acting as a father arnav never had...

thanks a lot and these are just some suggestions..u will do much better than my expectations i know...but plz update soon

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princessnida

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Posted: 13 years ago

#96

I just read all 9 parts in one go. I apologize for not commenting on every post! I thought I'd write a big comment on this one! :)

First of all, YOU ARE BLOODY BRILLIANTTT!!! I fail to understand how you came up with this whole story, but it feels sooo realistic and enchanting!! The fact that you connected their pasts sooo beautifully, truly amazes me!!! I am not joking when I say that you most definitely connected their pasts in the best way possible (I doubt the CVs will be able to come up with something this amazing!!)

From Khushi's angry outburst at everyone in the first chapter, to their reunion in this chapter, you have blownnn my mind!!!

Arnav acted in a way that only Arnav would. Yes, he did frustrateee me beyond belief when he oh-so generously decided to let Khushi move on. But, when I think of it from his point of view, what else would the guy do?

But, OMG!! He thought of suicide!!!! Ahhh! Sooo glad you didn't kill him off (you would have killed all us readers if you killed him lol)

I don't know what else to say. There's just sooo much going on in my head right now cuz I just finished reading this. I loved all of your characters! Just the way you write about Ziyad gives him such a royal flare! I love it! I also love Ziyad's undying love for Ashlesha! Does Arnav know about Ziyad and Ashlesha? Somehow I feel he doesn't! I want him to find out though! And ofcourse, Anjali and Imad should get together. The scene between Imad and Anisha was adorableee!!!!

Okay, I will stop rambling now. Now I'm just starting to summarize your SS!! And, I would be doing grave injustice to you and your piece of work if I did that!!

YOU SHOULD MOST DEFINITELY WRITE ANOTHER PART. I really do hope people comment!!! This SS deserves all the love!!!

Can you add me as a buddy? I-F doesn't allow me to buddy people due to some weird e-mail problem. I would love to receive PMs from you, and I promise to comment in return! ;)

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bismillah5985

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Posted: 13 years ago

#97

Love it to bits love imad the way he iz worrid 4 arnav n the thway he handles the baby last bt nt th least loved arnavs reaction on thinkin he waz in heaven i want 2 c more of imad n anjali n my fav arhi overall love ur ff
PS m very sory 4 nt comenting b4 bt frm nw on comment on evry update plzzz plzzz pm me nxt time n update soon

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AllSmiles86

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Posted: 13 years ago

#98

Mary, oh Mary! You have a talent for writing heart wrenching stories. Although I have LOVED all your parts for Avenging Angel, this one fell short. Maybe because I expected Khushi's anguish to last longer or their expression of love to sink in. In previous parts,you describe the character's internal turmoil quite well. With this part, you were on point with Imad's internal dialogue as he was rifting through his new found duty, which he never signed up for. That was brilliant. I loved it. My favorite part was how you showed Arnav contemplation about suicide! It was something I haven't read in any of the OS or SS in this forum. Bravo 👏

I hope you dont take my criticism as bashing! Trust me, I will still come back to reading your series. 😊

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medha

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Posted: 13 years ago

#99

hey it was really nice...im happy 4 d reconciliation...i just saw d update now...i guess i didnt get a pm coz my inbox was pretty full...anyway...i was kinnd of flabbergasted at arnavs decision to actually commit suicide...i mean he didnt do it ultimately,but he actually started acting upobn his instincts...that was quite surprising 4 a man like arnav whose steely determination sets him apart from everyone...looking 4ward to wat u hav in store,update soon!!!