The Memories of a Butterfly-ch 12 PG142 Updated!

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tennismaniac19

@tennismaniac19

Voyager

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Posted: 13 years ago

#301

Gosh! You updated again! You're like my favorite person!!! 🤗

I ❤️ your story! It's refreshing and so cute!!!!

Plus you have some awesome twists in store for us! I like that 😈

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christmas

@christmas

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Posted: 13 years ago

#302

i really like your characterizations so far. each one though at a glace might be overtly positive are not so. somewhere they are still balanced. its good to see a more balanced asr. hrishi im assuming is the brother whom she often keeps remembering. def looking forward to all that is in store...continue soon

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Anamika100

@Anamika100

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#303

One more relationship. I had left out Shyam and Anjali and in this chapter that is evident.

I like how TItli is making a space for herself and that she and ASR are drawn to each other. I was really irritated at Akashi for interrupting them when he came to get her.

Found the sentence about 'a pair of eyes watching' TItli and Akashi disturbing just because it seems to early to start that BUT it is an assumption that it is ASR and the inference has already been made to the fact that he has a dark past and is damaged or fragile.

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sun_shine_girl

@sun_shine_girl

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Posted: 13 years ago

#304

I love the way you are adding layers after layers to this incredibly beautiful story.

Fabulous Gargee.

And yes, please please please update this weekend, you promised...

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deviarshi

@deviarshi

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#305

I m excited for ur next part bcoz this was really awesome, i really enjoying khushi's innocent and she is just a darling.

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beccky

@beccky

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#306

loved it 🤗

but shyaam and anjali ka discussion.. the past... confusing 😕
and hrishi and lavanya.. interesting 😳

update ASAP 😛

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--Siva--

@--Siva--

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Posted: 13 years ago

#307

It was amazing!

Aww. Shyam is nice here! Poor guy, he needs a much needed breathing space! What is that they were talking on? Hirshi and Lavanya!!

Except for Dia, I hope there are no negative characters!!

Thanks for the PM

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Maddy1270

@Maddy1270

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Posted: 13 years ago

#308

read the last two three updates at one go and loved them all! like the fact that you've brought subtlety to the romance... I prefer each person understanding and supporting the other than loud declarations: appreciating khushi's painting was far more romantic and meaningful than rose petals and lighted candles would ever have been! love the gradual development in their relationship... appreciate shyam being a supportive hubby and the hrishi-lavanya bond and connection to khushi is interesting

as a teacher of English, I truly enjoy a well-written story, especially when the words used are simple and appropriate as well as evocative! can't wait for the update

Edited by Maddy1270 - 13 years ago