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zafi

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Posted: 13 years ago

#421

Absolutely brilliant.⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏Loved it. I actually loved what Khushi said to Arnav at the end about how he must have thought of ruining her life when his own sisters life was being ruined. Karma is correct. Same as: "you reap what you sow".Well done.Continue soon. Thanks.😃

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Posted: 13 years ago

#422

Hi, I've just read all the parts of your FF and it's fantastic😃

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illusiveworld

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Posted: 13 years ago

#423

Originally posted by: -Drishti-

Hey Rachita :) Brilliant updates!!! Sorry for the late comment .. couldn't get time to write coz of exams :/

Khushi, please don't leave without giving me one chance... Everyone gets one chance; why not me? Khushi, I'm fading... please come back. Please bring me back. I can't go on without you... Khushi, give me one chance to tell you how I feel, what I feel... Khushi, let me make you feel loved, let me hold you in my arms, let me correct every mistake... Khushi, I've lived a lie my whole life and for the first time, I want to find the truth. Please let me find it... please come back to me. There is no Arnav without Khushi. There is so much to say Khushi... so much to explain. I don't have the right words; I never did. But if this means anything to your heart, my heart yearns for you... Khushi let our heartbeats become one... let us become one... please come back... please don't leave me... Khushi, you know how they say soul mates exist? That's us Khushi, that's us... please help me accept that. There's nothing I want to do more than hold onto you... forever.

^^ I LOVE LOVE LOVE these words!! They come directly from Arnav's heart .. no pretence, no ego .. just reflecting the pain, helplessness, guilt, anguish that he feels inside himself. You know, sometimes you read something and it just touches your heart? This is one of them! Its absolutely beautifully written!

I LOVE the Khushi in your FF ' she's childish and immature, but also the one who'll rationally think when she needs to. More than what Arnav did, its his lack of trust that hurt her I think ' that's what I feel will happen in show too .. because Khushi is someone who can forgive easily .. like she did in your FF too .. and she is also someone who greatly values trust .. but when that trust itself is broken she finds it hard to regain that trust .. but here she does give him a second chance, because in her heart she knows that no matter what, she still loves him .. and she doesn't want to let go.

I like how she tells him to tell Anjali everything ' no matter what her condition, she deserves to know. Infact, it may just be worse if she knows only after the baby is born .. but I also like Arnav's concern for his Di'because she is after all, all that he has had the last many years before Khushi.. and he doesn't want to break her heart, even if it means making her live with fake love.

I LOVE Arnav and Khushi's thoughts at the end of the chapter when they look at the other one sleeping!!

Hahah overdose of yellow 🤣 Arnav is TOOO cute!!

I like that Arnav asks for Karan's help again .. it shows that he's not letting his huge ego come in the way! And I LOVE how she tells him all those things .. no doubt they were harsh words, but he needs to know everything that he did .. not just to her and indirectly Anjali .. but it was almost like she spoke for all the ppl who wouldn't raise a voice against ASR all these years ..

Can't wait to read the next update .. heres hoping that Anjali can take the whole thing strongly .. and well obviously hope that she doesn't blame Khushi for everything. Lovingg this FF Rachita!!! Continue really soon and good luck for the major report you have :)

Hey Drishti,

First of all, THANK YOU SO VERY MUCH for the WONDERFUL LONG comment <3

I absolutely love it, appreciate it, adore it :)

Secondly, I hope your exams went GREAT! & don't need to apologize for late commenting. As long as you read it, that's all that matters to me :)

Now, coming to the comments... I am soo happy you liked that monologue. Not very many people commented on it, making me think it might not have come out correct. But I really wanted to show Arnav breaking down. That's why he keeps repeating Khushi's name... He thinks calling out to her will somehow bring her back...

Hence, I am happy you loved that part. & it brings tears of happiness to my eyes when you say that touched your heart. The last two chapters did actually make me cry while reading. I looked like an emotional fool writing those but those words really do touch your heart... At one point, they made me wonder if anything like ever happened to me, what would happen to me.

Coming to Khushi, I think currently in the show, they are only focusing on her childish aspect and missin out on the great woman that she has potential to be. So I try to compensate for that in my FF. I agree with you that Arnav's lack of trust caused all this to occur and Khushi's undying faith in him will bring them up.

Khushi really does forgive easily. I don't think it's in her to hold grudges. I'll tell you something personal here... The character Khushi in my FF is inspired by my sister. My Di was one happy-go-lucky girl. I don't think the word "hate" existed in her dictionary. But at the same time, she was firm in her decisions and always made logical, rational decisions. Thus unconsciously, I ended up making Khushi in this FF like that. So it touches my heart when you like Khushi's character because indirectly, it means you'd probably like my Di and Di means the world to me.

I am glad you noticed Arnav's dilemma in telling Anjali because yes, you are right - his Di is ALL he had for years! Agreed, Khushi is there now but so far, Khushi has never made it obvious that she'll always be there for him. On the other hand, Anjali has wiped his tears of blood over & over again. So his concern is justified. & I think that's why I understand him hiding the truth in the actual show too. It doesn't matter if he has to build a castle of lies if it means that in that castle, his Di will be safe and happy.

I always try to end on a deep note; hence, those thoughts at the end of the chapter always turn out to be a bit more emotional than I intend them to be. But I'm glad you still like them :)

HAHA! The overdose of yellow made my day. It just shows that everything is extreme for Arnav - be it love, hate, care, jealousy! His care for his Di is extreme, so extreme that he would ruin a girl's life to save his Di's marriage. His jealousy is so extreme that he would agree to become waiter if it means NK keeping a distance from his Khushi. His hate for Khushi is so great that he'll physically hurt her, manhandle her. But at the end of the day, his love is so extreme that he'll turn his entire life upside down to show his love.

Yes, Arnav has reached the point of breaking down. He already fears for his Di in his heart and now he can't afford to lose Khushi. & ever since he saw himself in Karan's eyes (that of a brother), he feels he can trust Karan.

Those words were harsh but you are right, they were for ASR, not Arnav. Khushi needed to break the truth to him and so she did. I didn't think about this one before but I'm amazed you point out that Khushi probably spoke up for everyone who has ever been hurt by ASR. Nice observation and connection there :) This is why I like readers like you! You make me see things in my writing that even I failed to notice :)

I will put the next update either tonight or tomorrow night. You'll find out very soon how Anjali handles all this and what happens to Khushi after! & thank you for the good luck! I think my report was alright :)

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illusiveworld

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Posted: 13 years ago

#424

Originally posted by: paridhipoddar
sry 4 the late comment for tis part n also 4 not commenting on the previous 1s as i was out of station so sry 1ce again😔 any way coming to my views i loved ery bit of it hav no words at all to xpress wt a treat it was to read all these parts n a few thighs tht i wld especially lyk to mention are :
1.every ones reaction in sv on knowing tht khushi owns 51%shares 😉
2. the way u portrayed her innocence in ch 6 n her dailouges to arnav for sleeping on the bed
3.khushi's covo wid arnav wen he regains conciouness
4.anjali's dialouge wer she comments on arnavs talent reserves while playing antakshari
5. the songs in the antakshari wer awesome they suited the senario soo well
6.karan n anjali convo
7.arnav not hitting karan back n he realising tht he is seeing his reflrtion in karan
8.the way khushi tells arnav 2 get out of the car ws a nyc unexpected thing too c
9.the way khushi speaks about her prince charming
10.the way arnav requests khushi to earse emptiness frm her eyes n her reply on tht just makes the heart bleed
11.the way khushi spoke abt arnav's mom
12. arnav surprise to khushi
13.the answer tht arnav gives to khushi abt spreading khushi in a dull room 😊
👏 n ya lat bt not the leat ty 4 tthe pm pl do so again ...waiting ...

Hey Paridhi,

Please do not apologize for late commenting. I totally understand that everyone is busy with school, work, job, etc etc. So absolutely no worries about lateness! As long as you read it, that's all that matters to me :D

A biggg THANK YOUU for liking my writing. It really does mean A LOT to me!

With regards to the stuff you liked:

1. Haha! Khushi is one rich woman now. No more aukat shiz coming up :P

2. Khushi is one of the most innocent people ever. She doesn't manipulate, she doesn't think beyond the obvious. So I definitely had to show that innocence in this FF!

3. Khushi Arnav conversations are the most important so I'm happy you liked their convo!

4. Haha, we all know Arnav's talents are only reserved for Khushi. Afterall, he did sing that song only for Khushi :P

5. Yayy :) I like those songs too!

6. Karan Anjali ;) <--- that's all I am going to say :P

7. This is one of my favs! Arnav realizing Karan's p.o.v. b/c of the brotherly-ness they both share

8. Teehee! Role reversal. Enough of Arnav yelling "Get out!" This time Khushi was on a roll :P

9. Khushi's idea of prince charming made me tear too

10. That dialogue by Khushi is heartbreaking! It was one of the hardest to write because I usually say my dialogues out loud to see how they sound and when I read that one out loud, I was crying!

11. Khushi has a special place in her heart for Arnav's Ma :) We saw that from Episode 1

12. Yellow to the power :P

13. Yay, I'm glad you noticed that subtle compliment :) - spreading Khushi in his room ... meaning allowing Khushi in his life!

I shall continue to PM you and update very soon too :)

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illusiveworld

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Posted: 13 years ago

#425

Originally posted by: zafi
Absolutely brilliant.👏Loved it. I actually loved what Khushi said to Arnav at the end about how he must have thought of ruining her life when his own sisters life was being ruined. Karma is correct. Same as: "you reap what you sow".Well done.Continue soon. Thanks.😃

Awww THANK YOUUU!! That last line by Khushi is heartbreaking but an absolute necessity for their future relationship! You are right - You reap what you sow :)

I shall definitely continue soon :)

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illusiveworld

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Posted: 13 years ago

#426

Originally posted by: april2003
Hi, I've just read all the parts of your FF and it's fantastic😃

Thank youuu so much for the wonderful compliment! Would you like to be PMed for future updates?

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mashal

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Posted: 13 years ago

#427

plx upate soon...eagrly waiting 4 da nxt part😊

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illusiveworld

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Posted: 13 years ago

#428

Originally posted by: crazy_mishee
plx upate soon...eagrly waiting 4 da nxt part😊

Heyy, I was supposed to update last night but lately I had been running on 3 hours of sleep each night so I just crashed last night. But I'll definitely update tonight :)