Feelings/Aftermaths THE END PG 19! (arhi OS/SS) - Page 11

OMG!!! How cud u write such an update... IT made me CRY... I always pray that this shud nt happen to any one... It is a Living nightmare... no woman/girl who goes thru such a horrible incident ever forgets it... it always remains in her memories... bitter memories... a part of her dies that moment she is forced... She can never be whole again ever... how much ever her soulmate/partner tries to put this behind in their past...

it was a dark dark update... but the best bit was Shyam being castrated... and that shud happen to any man who does that... but lovely update... now I am waiting for the end

Amazing!!!!!!!!!! I can't believe the hell that Khushi has gone through.

You have written it so well. I felt like I was a bystander watching the whole thing from the side lines. Its a great story and you wrote beautifully. Please empower Khushi in the end and make Arnav realise and repent for his mistakes.

Originally posted by: ccuteaangel

First of all, thank you for the PM

and thank you so so so much for the extra long part, your story is more intriguing than the show...

Your words evoke such strong emotions, the rape scene, was gritty and terrifying, it felt appropriate and horrible at the same time. You have everyone reading, chanting along with Khushi for Arnav to get there on time. Obviously his regret will do no good, he has to learn that making mistakes with Khushi over and over again will leave him at a place where he cannot come back.

The beating up of Shyam was violent and very well written, it felt so satisfying. I love how you use your words to paint real pictures, it was beautiful. The part where he cleans her up, draining away the dirt and tainted fluids, the bubbles bursting against he soft hair, the way he leaves her fresh and warm in silk pajamas, snuggling her up between pillows, it was such a treat. it makes you feel so relieved, the way you feel when you get home after a horrible ordeal, and finally get to sleep peacefully. it made me feel warm and fuzzy inside. It was beautifully written !

My request would be to not make Arnav commit suicide, or do something to hurt himself. i think that he should learn from the experience to not make rash decisions in his favour that could hurt everyone else. Maybe show how he confronts Khushi for the first time after the incident, will he apologise, will he try to forget what happened. Maybe he talks to her and supports her through it? I don't know, it is difficult to suggest things because it is your story, i gave you a bit of what i think, but this story is yours, so you have the right to choose what to do with it.

Thank you for the wonderful piece of writing

Love, Hayley x

AWWW hayley! thank you!
it feels wonderful to have someone be so responsive to the chapter!
it took me almost three days to write it, and your feedback made me feel it was all worth it.
i'll post up "THE END" soon!
it wont have as much action, but it will hopefully give this story a proper ending.
and HOPEFULLY, :P, you guys will like it.
meanwhile, let us drown in barun sobti's eyes.
that's all i look at when i watch the show.
i put it on mute so that the tension and the music and the words can't reach me.
because i'm DYING here! i knew this was coming but it hurts so much! :(
but i bet everyone noticed them looking at each other at the end of the new wedding promo!
what was THAT about?
should we allow hope to flare in our hearts? or squash it lest our hearts break again?
of course, we wont find out until monday. they'll probably drag this whole thing out until friday.
what a terrible week.

You are a truly gifted writer dear! I think there should be some sort of penalty for selfishly keeping this talent to yourself by being a silent reader. I have been a silent reader since MJHT days but I just had to comment on your writing and humbly request you to post the last part. Your writing was so dark yet so deep and profound. To those people who said that it was confusing, I personally thought that it was the beauty of your writing. The ambiguity intensified everything so much. I don't know if you're familiar with The Lovely Bones (book, not movie), but I felt the same feelings coursing through me when I read this SS... I personally loved Lovely Bones & your writing reminded of the first chapter. However gruesome and horrid the scenario was, you portrayed it with mastery. Please continue! The power of your writing made a silent reader for 4 years come out and comment... so continue, pretty please!! I request you to not make Arnav commit suicide. I would love to see a follow-up SS by you of how they deal with their lives after this ordeal. Give us a happy ending which all the readers need after watching the poignant, yet plaintive and depressing turn the show has taken. Hats off to you dear... You have a new fan(:
Love,
Jazzy

hi i just wanted to know is teh ending stilll left or posted somewhere i dont know

Originally posted by: noor j

hi i just wanted to know is teh ending stilll left or posted somewhere i dont know

thanks

heyyy
yes i will be posting up the ending soon
i'm sorry about the delay!
i've been extremely busy!

Originally posted by: cmileyfreaky

heyyy
yes i will be posting up the ending soon
i'm sorry about the delay!
i've been extremely busy!