MG[SS]-The Yellow Dot of Eternal Joy[IMP Note Pg 1 & Pg 72] - Page 43

Originally posted by: deejayaqueel

O-K-A-Y...!!!

So this one was theee toughest ever to 'precap-ize' 😆😆...

For you had taken this deep into your territory of painting vividly the colours, the emotions, the thoughts... of bringing a visual beauty to his unsaid words...

Am not too happy with the result as it has not completely captured the beauty of the update, but am posting it for whatever it is worth...

A Rangreza. A myriad colours swirling to her will,

Splashing away my midnight hues with burnished gold and coral,

My life an empty canvas waiting for her brush stroke,

Hers to colour as she will, hers to reveal or to evoke.

Hers to set alight, the horizons of my existence,

Hers to paint my heartache, my hope, my persistence.

Cloaked beneath a tiny name, my deepest truth does lie,

I hesitate to take her true name for fear of a goodbye.

Can I risk this tenderness for a deeper intimacy?

Will she become something more or stay for me 'Nanhi'?

Originally posted by: jazzerette

I started reading this with a smile...but by the time I was finished...I was so drawn in...the lines start gaining momentum from "hers to color as she will..." and it ended perfectly in sync with what I have envisioned for this story.

Originally posted by: Cloud9.

I was grinning through out. One sentence where I actually understood where this is heading is .."She calls me her best friend. But I have always simply called her special."

How simple yet how effective.. He calls her Special. Not defining their relationship. Not defining what she is to her. Aww!

That reminds me Jazz what do you call me? 😳

Apart from Jalebi bai baby parjhai.. nautanki rani, DQ, etc,. etc, and not to forget.. that annoying little name BABY.😡🤣
There is difference between calling someone by a special name and teasing...I tease you when I call you baby, baby parjhai, etc.
But ...hmm...try remembering what I call you when I take you name...

Chaddo!😕

Oh BTW i did prepare notes from this update as well..

A jubilant shout of glittering gold

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All I knew that my heart was all blue in absence of a feeling so profound. All I knew that my essence was now cloaked in saffron unbound. Every ether soaked in yellow.

I tried to color the word yellow in yellow par woh dikh nahi raha tha😆

I loved it how you described how he felt in her absence by a color. Show me your brains. I want to give aarti to it😆
*rolls eyes*

BTW Maan has turned a poet. Aaye Haayyee! 😆

I loved one line BTW "Because like a stubborn fool, it was my own want that sought this stain on my soul." Beautiful!! Oh in Jazzy style, "Bloody Beautiful!!"😆

This update was one of the beautiful updates of TYDEJ. I entirely loved the update. The poetic style was to die for and hence i have quoted them but more than that, the ones in blue stole the show. I could actually imagine her name on his lips. How simple but how beautiful! Hayye!

You did clear everything.. and I am glad most of my guesses were right.. kind of. Except of course the main one.. rofl. I always thought Sameera is Nanhi.😆
😆😆...lolz...and this was despite the fact you knew so much already!!


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I read the last para over and over and over and over again and the underlined line gave me goosebumps. Haayyee!!

And dont be surprised if this comment lacks continuity. This is what happens when you write exams over a longgg longg time🤣
I can see that ... Lolz

Originally posted by: t_areeb

waiting to meet nanhi

Originally posted by: reachsky2011

Loved it...update soon..

Originally posted by: serenelove

Can I also reserve? 😈

...EDITED...

HUH..., Shikha beat me to it with micro seconds difference 😡

Hey Jazz,

Maan was trying to divert his mind with physical exertion so that he does not have to think about the things he did not wish to face.

Yes...desperate measures of a frustrated heart ...lolz!

Vicky is glittering gold with some orange tinges as well but our focus is more on Maan's brown color all the while him focusing on his yellow dot.

Maan is blue...poor him...

This Ghazal Part describes Maan's condition & his wish.

"Tumhein Jab Kabhi Milen Fursatien, Meray Dil Se Bojh Utar Do

Mein Kai Dinon Se Udas Hun, Mughay Koi Shaam Udhar Do

Mughay Apnay Roop Ki Dhoop Do k Chamak Saken Meray Khal-o-Khad

Mughay Apnay Rang Mein Rang Do, Meray Saray Zang Utar Do"

It might sound strange that I believe in love but not a romantic soul & this update made me love "the Love" even more. It's the feeling that counts & Maan's thought, taking the name of ur beloved tells the depth, was beautiful.

Thank you! :)

Zindagi Younhi Teri Chahat K Naam Kardi

Jaisay Ghanay Darakht K Neeche Sham Kardi

Laut Jate Hain Parinde Shaam Hote Hi

Hamne To Har Shaam Hi Tere Naam Kardi

Beautiful lines!! Zindagi yunhi teri chahat ke naam kardi!! Wow!! Loved it!!

Want More UPDATE Soon.

Originally posted by: aashluvsmaan

:P did u get ur Pc back?

Originally posted by: Eowyn

Finally the story has sinked in...

Sorry for being such a tubelight Jazz...kya karein aise deep deep baathein asaani se samajh mein nahin aathi na...

In simple words of a commoner, this work is nothing less than beautiful...

A beauty weaved from strings of feelings so subtle it is hard to describe...

Loved it and will love to see it proceed...

Oh yaar...it was such a regular story...there was nothing deep in it all. Yeh toh aevin si hai.

But glad that you have enjoyed the reading. Thanks for being here🤗