MG[SS]-The Yellow Dot of Eternal Joy[IMP Note Pg 1 & Pg 72] - Page 4

Originally posted by: --Shika--

To start with, I love the title. For many reasons of course😉

😆😆...you would know how random my thought processes are...lolz

The beginning of the story.. with the sweet chiming of her voice, was so simple and beautiful. Her desperation to get back her prized possession back and her cute little pout saying that it was a happy yellow, not a dull yellow.. ahh adorable it was.

And our Munda Maan, i was dissecting it and i found his grumping session interesting. And i do have few questions.

Yeah yeah...I know 😛

But before that i want to go random about the cafe name. Cafe chrome.. Google chrome's inspiration is it?😆

Silly Girl!!! Chrome is a shade of Yellow!!

Umm I'm happy with my PJ. You see i can't complete a comment without being my usual crack-a-joke-at-which-no-one-laughs-except-you jokes. Haha.😆

Err...🤔

Anyway moving on..
He got up by her sweet chiming voice. Personally i hate it when someone wakes up..well not really. You should wake me up with a sweet voice.. If you wake me up with loud music or if you yell at me you are so dead.
(Make a note. You need it in future🤣) Oh yeah you can on my music player and can go so that mein aaram se uthungi par haan no bhayankar songs like who let the dogs out. (Oh yes i do have it in my playlist🤣)
Me n my randomness.. I'm wondering will i ever i mean EVER talk anything straight?

You know it is said that people talk as they are...I mean if you can't talk straight...what does that imply?? Hmm...*taps finger on chin*

Anyway..
so Maan got up from the exhausting sleep. After traveling and working, and passing out, when you get up, you'll obviously be i the worst mood possible. And even then.. he was able to notice the sweetest conversation about the umbrella.
Me liking it😳

Aww...thank you😳

The look of adoration that Dadi held on her face while listening to her summed up the warmth of her personality. I could feel it tug on my heart too and I had to get myself next to her.

as usual i found this line interesting. You got some magic..that some lines of yours grabs my attention and i'll be reading them over and over again (not that i don't understand the first time😆 Ok to be frank in some cases even that happens😆)

Am supposed to feel good or bad about it?😕😆

"Dadi it is for your darling Nanhi's sake that I am burning myself out here. I have only slogged through yesterday and will do so today, so that day after remains completely free."
First question who is nanhi?😆
Better be Maan's sister. I don't want competition you see... i mean i don't want to see competition. Haha
Arre I told you na...then why are you worried?

I have never waited for Sunday so eagerly before.
You are awakening the curious cat inside me 😡

😈...everyone waits for a sunday yaar.

I watched out of the window to seek her again. But she was walking away from me, from my reach. What wouldn't I give to hear that golden voice again!

aaye haayee! The last line was to die for. What wouldn't i give to hear that golden voice again.!

And then comes these lines..

Every other color faded into oblivion as her yellow umbrella over-powered the surroundings she occupied. Every other shade dulled to a grey as the yellow dot shone brighter with every step she took away from me. A single image became the only vibrant phenomenon as the multitude of the city paled in comparison.

A single yellow dot became the focal point of my convergent thoughts.
Beautiful Jazz! I could actually imagine her walking in the streets with the big yellow umbrella, Maan looking at her through the window, other colors fading and showing the BIG yellow umbrella. The concept was sweet and simple. It was like a beautiful painting. Of course now i get where do you get the ideas and how do you get them exactly Miss. Painter.

I prefer Miss Artist...you see my creative skills extend beyond painting...crafts are included too.😆

To be truthful i have not even one yellow or orange dress but i've a feeling that at the end of this beautiful story the first thing i would do is to go and get a big bright yellow umbrella. Beautiful Jazz!

If you find a yellow umbrella...in chrome or light cadmium...please keep it for me!!!😃 I have been trying to find a yellow polka dotted umbrella for last whole season!! Nahi mila😒 I have to HAVE A YELLOW UMBRELLA!!!

And haan should i say about the sketch? It was Marvellous. Waise you would've imagined me carrying it haina isilie toh itna acha aaya hain🤣
me and my silly jokes!😆

exactly!!😛

Nanand Ji Now you gave me another task. I've to crib for two updates *rubs hands in glee* I love cribbing you see.

Sure...what else does a BABYdo??🤣

Originally posted by: abinash079

awesome dear
loved the concept
continue soon

Hey Jazz,

Loved the part.

It was amazing start. Loved how the apparent grouch could feel the liveliness in girl's voice & tried to be near the comfortable reverberance of her.

Whoever coaxed u to write the idea; Thank you to him/her because we get one more story by Jazz.

Waiting for more.

awesome update

loved it

looking forward to the next part

cont soon please

thanks for the pm..!! :)