MG[SS]-The Yellow Dot of Eternal Joy[IMP Note Pg 1 & Pg 72]

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Bye_Bye_if

@Bye_Bye_if

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#171

Awesome update

Loved it

Continue soon

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khwaishfan

@khwaishfan

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+ 9

Posted: 13 years ago

#172

hi thanks 4 da pm n rcoking update!

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deejayaqueel

@deejayaqueel

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+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#173

Aaah! the light at the end shines... thoda thoda chamka mujhe!! 😆😆

Am attempting another Transcript... am also trying to keep it as er... obtuse 😉😉 as you kept the chapter to keep the suspense alive... though i might be completely off track or might have made it too complex or too vague... judge for yourself... if it doesnt fit well with the current chapter or future direction junk it as a precap...

An adorable li'l imp holds the key,

To my heart's secret desire within me.

A weekend of promise, a bright sunny day

Yet clouds of doubt mar my way,

"What if...?" Life's eternal question I ponder...

The yellow dot reappears, my mind does wander...

All else dissolves but something has me in its hold,

Yet I yearn for the rainbow and that pot of gold!

Incidentally, why are you saying the story will fall flat... it is going fabulously well, each time a cliffhanger!!

Edited:

Ugh! Just read it after posting it... junk it... way too many liberties with the 'meter'... not reading well at all 😕😕

Edited by deejayaqueel - 13 years ago

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Devil-By-Birth

@Devil-By-Birth

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#174

Fab. update Jazz... 👏
But you never told me its going to be suspense in terms of its genre...😆 Nanhi, Maan-Sam, and ofcourse yellow dot...😆 Yahan we people are dying out of curiosity and you are saying story is falling flat.😲
Keep updating...😳

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mystique_girl

@mystique_girl

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#175

I finally managed time to go through this all over again...

Can I say how much I loved the whole story, the concept, the characters and the suspense ?

Just reading about this little yellow dot seems to brighten up my mood too. Loving the bond between the senior and junior Khuranas and Handas...and Maan's character has been portrayed fabulously well.

So waiting for Sunday. Maan and Sameera - i promise - i love you - ??? Are they a couple? Or is Maan stuck between Nanhi and the yellow dot?

BTW, Nanhi is the best name I have heard in a looong time😃

Continue soon (shooing away all those flat story ideas) 😊

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516645

Suspended

Posted: 13 years ago

#176

Updated comments in Page 10 and 19

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516645

Suspended

Posted: 13 years ago

#177

I couldn't help but re comment on the latest part.. As per my little research I already know Adi is a Handa. Now by this part Sameera is a Handa as well and it is crystal clear who Nanhi is. So we are left out with one person who is a Handa, and I'm assuming this is the person who is not able to attend Adi's Purple Platter's opening. M waiting for Friday you-know-why!

Edited by --Shika-- - 13 years ago