MG[SS]-The Yellow Dot of Eternal Joy[IMP Note Pg 1 & Pg 72]

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deejayaqueel

@deejayaqueel

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Posted: 13 years ago

#91

Nice Update... so they are like 'chaddi-buddies' from childhood, eh? 😆😆 And that totally killed it, didnt it... 😛😛...🤣🤣

Vaise, i have decided i am going to stalk you on this thread... so here's my transcript of the second part... 😃😃

A fragrance or a touch, on my name lingers...

I feel a warm caress of some known fingers.

A spot of yellow flowers & my memory gets a jog,

A ray of golden sunshine pierces the great fog…

…the fog of distance, the passage of time,

And a bell rings... a beautiful chime.

The yellow dot turns, in my mind at last…

And a misty face smiles at me... a kin from the past.

Edited by deejayaqueel - 13 years ago

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NidhaA

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Posted: 13 years ago

#92

Yash and Dev...I actually imagined the ones from the show😆

Nanhi seems like a sweet young lady...

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soniya_lovesu

@soniya_lovesu

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Posted: 13 years ago

#93

awesome work dear 😊 thanks fr d p.m...

loved the 2 fathers n son talk 😊 who is nanhi btw?😕

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579908

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Posted: 13 years ago

#94

that was wonderfully written Jazz ⭐️

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LuvScooby

@LuvScooby

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Posted: 13 years ago

#95

I decided to finally check ur OS (apologies in advance for being late) and when I read the first and second part...I thought wow Jazz is writting from Maan Singh Khurana's perspective, this ought to be very interesting.

Only here I see the great MSK being not so great and actually getting teased by someone (chalo at least that's his dad). So, who is this nanhi and why did he get all rallied up by that name? Can't wait to read more, but why is it just OS, is it possible to make it a long OS 😳

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truth1-1

@truth1-1

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Posted: 13 years ago

#96

That was great jazz!👍🏼

P.S: when r u updating?😊

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jazzerette

@jazzerette

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Posted: 13 years ago

#97

Originally posted by: ritzy09
absolutely awesome...loved the friendship and Maan's relationship with his two dads...

but for me highlight was when he touched the name plate and felt a touch of woman before him

Originally posted by: Remya_Pillai
wow!beautifully written!
"Odd! Why did it feel that it has not been virgin to a human touch? Why did my senses pick a lilac of woman's touch on from the metal?"

wonderful!

Thank you...glad the moment left it's impact :)

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jazzerette

@jazzerette

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Posted: 13 years ago

#98

Originally posted by: mechantefille
Jazz - what do I say - for a change it's nice to see Maan being ribbed by somebody - and I'm curious to see who this nanhi is.

babe you have a full-on FF and now an OS too - I love!!

The very fact that you've channeled this unique part of you into the OS - I love that bit!

Maan seems to lead a dreary life - and I guess ad the colour been anyt other than yellow - you'd probably have enthused the same flavour in the story.

Keep it coming hun - am all eyes!! 😆

Hmm..I really don't know if any other color other than yellow could have inspired this.

Maybe it would have been another story.

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jazzerette

@jazzerette

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Posted: 13 years ago

#99

Originally posted by: -bansi-
Loved the update Jazz...!!
hmm...maan n his fathers...share a great n nice bond..!!
awww...who is nanhi...??
curious to know that...
did u have to stop there jazz...😡 😡
awaiting the next part already...!!
update soon..!!

@bold...are those your favorite words for me?😆