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Jiya

@Jiyyaa

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#401

aw itna short😒

It was a great update!! I hope next tym you'll make up for the short ones😉🤣

mm so coming bak to the story em liking the fact that nupur is so open with mayank. She shares whatever she's feeling for him with him rite away and not being shy

Update Soon😳

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bhargavi

@gopi06

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#402

beautiful updt kinza
thanks for the pm

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arjunratirocks

@arjunratirocks

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#403

woderful update

hppe nupur understand his point of view

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Sara

@immayurfan

Inactive

Posted: 13 years ago

#404

Awesome part

Thanks for the pm

Continue soon

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Faria Ferdousi

@Faria.

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#405

in one word it was mind blowing
simply awesome...
mayank knew how to control nus and make her understand politely...
Hats off to him

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Varshini

@varsh-mayur

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#406

amazing...mayank's love is selfless...true love always wins...always...😊just loved it kinza

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parul_bansal

@parul_bansal

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#407

awesum...

😊

thanks 4 the pm

may god bless u

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crazymayurian

@crazymayurian

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#408

superb

u and ur update is amazing

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Kankshita

@thegameison

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#409

Fantasia,

You know right, I have a pattern of commenting just like you have one for updating? I update once in a few updates, this time - three, I guess! 😛

You've been writing this really well, Kinza. Just that, I think Nupur's gone topsy-turvy. I think she is already obsessed, so maybe the gently greedy man here is right, she's to do with a bit of distance and everything. Their rapport with each other is fierce, at the very least. Extremely fierce, so most of your fan girls here are going hot in the cheeks all the time, aren't they?

But alright, the story makes a really nice read. Your skill at writing is exquisite, you should work on your aesthetics as you once mentioned are my forte, though. Like you know, you could present the story in a more polished manner, which pleases the reader in a way they fall for your writing before the characters you etch. You write really well, you need polishing and you'd be there! Work on your grammar a bit here and there.

I'd be really happy if any of my criticisms help you on, I don't mean to offend you, you are indeed very good at this and I like the story too!

Thanks for all the PMs you've left by. :)

-Savage