Dhundlae aks THREAD1

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Dhundlae aks

me again.. back with my new FF...
I know the title sounds little heavy heavy
..it is not...
it took me a long to decide on this..


Geet ' 17yrs


High in spirits & rebellious. She lives life in her terms. Independent & very practical in nature. Hales from a very typical Punjabi joined family. She is positive & cares a hoot wat others things.. she does wat she things is right.

Koi dhundla sa ek aks meri aankhon mein rehta hai,
Koi bechan khawabon mein rehti hai,

Ek manoos si awaz mujhe sone nahi deti,
Koi uljha sa ek sawal meri yaadon mein rehta hai,

Hai kiske shabnami anchal ki khushboo mujh mein,
Koi ehsaas mehka sa meri saanson ko mehkata hain

Mujhe khud par nahi kabu na main kuch bol sakta hu,
Asar yeh kiske lafzon ka meri baaton mein rehta hai,


Maan ' 18yrs


Ambitious, hard working engg first yr student in Delhi. His dad Yash khurana & Dev Khurana whom he looks upto & has to live upto. A little of a spoiled brat being the youngest of the Khurana's.

Prachi ' 17yrs


Geets best friend almost like a soul mate. Very soft, sensitive, intelligent hard working. They have been together since 6th grade when Geet joined the hostel after having a big fight against the whole family to peruse her studies.. Prachi was a day scholar there.

Armaan ' 17yrs


prachi & geets best frd. Wanted to do medical student but stuck with engg thanks to his frds.

Karan ' 18yrs


smart dashing 1yr engg student. Same college as Maan but different stream.

Rajveer ' 18yrs


maans best frd & class mate from childhood. Partners in crime.


Uff.. there are more ...shall introduce as & when they come..

PART 1

In the a remote district between delhi & punjab. Handa 's hawali.
Geet crosses her arm & turns her back angrily to her whole family.
Mujhe engg join karna hain bus.
Rano ' lekin wohi college kyun
Geet '
mujhe prachi aur armaan ke saat hi join karna hain bus
thai ji '
lekin puttar
Geet ' mujhe kuch nahi sunna kaha na Delhi tho bus delhi
she hit her foot on the floor walked out angrily to her room.

Papaji sighed & went behind her. Geet ..geet beta meri baat suno..
mujhe kuch nahi sun na
papaji ' tumne bataya nahi tumhe kaunsi car leni hain college keliyen
Geet jumped up in joy & opened the door in a sec...
I love u love u love ..u a lot
my papa the bestest..love u a lot papa..
mujhe mujhe..
papaji - pink
nahi ..actually I want a red color
papaji smiled ok

ok.. thats me.. Geet handa aapne papa mama ki ladli.. meri har zid..har marzi puri hoti hain.
Bus thoda manana padth tha hain..
lekin mujhe yeh nahi samjh aata ..jab unhe aakir meri baat manni hain tho mana kyun karthen hain.. uff.. I just forgot to call armaan.

Armaan.. main bolna bhool gayen. ...meren cuty punjabi munda.. chalenga tho meren saat hi na..
lekin style kuch kam nahi hain .. actually frankly.. raaz ki baat hain.. puren district main bus ek hi handome munda hain. Thanks to me. Agar main ussen aapne saat 6th grade join nahi karvathi tho ..wo bhi yanhi ke school se padtha.. abhi tho dehkne chayien.. sari 12th grade ki ladkiya uspe marthi hain.

Khurana Mansion Delhi

Maan gets ready & rushes down for the puja..while Dev & Yash were almost done with the aarthi.
Daadi points down at the pyajama.. Maan narrows his brows & looks at her. Daadi ..comes close to him & whispers.. tumhara nada ..
Maan stuck his tongue out & tucks it in & straightens himself.
Daadi ..whispers again.
aaj bhi late
Maan whispers
...wo..woo.. assignment Daadi
Daadi whispers .. phir jhoot
Maan immediately pinches his neck
..sachi Daadi
Daadi rolls her eyes..
jhoot aisen bholo ki pakten na javoo
Maan
..kasam se Daadi
yash clears his throat..
Maan & Daadi straightens themselves

yash ' kaisen assignments?? tumhari tho 2dn sem ki holidays chal raheyen hain na
Daadi giggles softly
Maan looks down nervously .. nahi dad wo...
Dev covers him up ' dad ..its like a summer project
yash '
ok.
If u say so
yash gives the ladoo to all of them & goes to his room keeping the puja thal on the table.
Maan hugs Dev ..thanks bro
Dev '
waisen khanha tha kal raat?
Maan scratches his head ..
wo main
Daadi '
kanha ho.. hoga rajveer ke saat
khud tho bigda huwa hain..aur rajveer ko bhi bigad raha hain

raj just walks in '
Daadi main ne kitna bar mana kiya tha issen
Maan '
haan Daadi issen mujhe mana kiya tha kal
every one looked at him in shock.. did he just accepting his mischief..
well short lived thought
Maan '
issne mana kiya mujhe juice peena se..
mainne tho organe juice hi order kiya
raj ne hi..

he emphasized ..MANA kiya.
Raj coughed...
Daadi & Dev laughed & left them alone.


So ' tell me how do u feel abt this..
this is not a fast pace story.. but shall try to make it a regular update
to keep the story moving.
Plz let me..know how u feel abt it. Shall continue accordingly
love u lots
muskan

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princess163 thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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First of all congrats for the new Ff di😃

And, ME FIRST
Now, I get your point...now I get your context😊
Dhundhla aks...beautiful name!
I so wanna write a poem already😳
Love
Swati
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Congrats for the new FF..😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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on new ff

great starting

love maan & geet' characters carefree & bindass
dadi is also partner in maan's mischievousness 😛 😆
now now now geet is also joining maan's college 👏 😃
waiting for their encounter 😆
& for the

part


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Posted: 13 years ago
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On the new FF!!!!!!!

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Posted: 13 years ago
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oh oh.seems interesting.but can u plz tell me the meaning of aks?i didn't understand that.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Congrats on the new ff:)

The story looks quiet interesting and a new face of maan and geet,prachi armaan and raj nice start waiting for the next parts.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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ausum yaar!!
you started new one..
congratulation!!
it was mindblowing!!
Loved it!!
LOVE
KJ
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Posted: 13 years ago
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congrats on the new ff..
wow looks gud... nice start...
continue soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
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muskaan..
but why are you not continuing aparichit!!:(((

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