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Posted: 14 years ago

#921

Originally posted by: ninand
Sam! I loved it! totally. but why so short?!

give us another one quick.. and it had better be looong. but seriously, Maan' s pain and loneliness was very well written - simply and pointedly.

I didn't realize it was so short until I posted it! 😆 Never fear - I'm going to force myself to extend the next chapter, even if I have to die trying. Thank you for commenting my Drashti lover! 🤗

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423728

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Posted: 14 years ago

#922

Originally posted by: bansipatel
I loved it sammy...!!
brilliantly written..!!
he din want to lose geet again n he made a run for it n caught her...he brought her close to himself...
he cud not see hatred for himself in her eyes...it sent daggers to his heart...!!! is he already falling for her..??😳 😳...me wud b more than happy..😳
n he pierced his fingers with the knife to punish geet..??? 😲 😲...was he punishing her or himself..??
n geet stood dumbfounded there...ohh i hope she stops him from hurtn himself further...!!
loved the update..!!
update the next part soon...😉 😛

Thank you babe! :)

Well I'll let you decide whether you think his falling for her or not. No no he was punishing himself. Re-read the last line - I hinted it out. 😆😳

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Ankita

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Posted: 14 years ago

#923

Originally posted by: _SiinnceMaan_

😆 Comment ! Tell me how you felt during the reading of the chapter.

Edited the comment!! Now you tell me how you felt during the reading of the comment😆😆

Edited by ankita10 - 14 years ago

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Mirela

@Myra.nelly

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Posted: 14 years ago

#924

What was that?!

Oh...a great update from sammy...short but eventfull! 😊 😉 They both have the worse opinion about eachother,him a monster she manipulative,but still feeling for echother...come on,i am sure that there are sparks between them...otherwise he wouldnt chase after her or kissed her wrists...and she caressed his cheeck ...subtle and beautiful...me like it 😉

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423728

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Posted: 14 years ago

#925

Originally posted by: ankita10
me 3rd... Dont know what to do now😆

Edit: OK... really really nice part... Didnt find it short, it was just right for me...Maan and Geet both went through a lot of emotions in this one... For Geet from shock, to fear and disgust,to a rush of sympathy and understanding,then anger and hurt and finally fear again... She is just overwhelmed with the reality of what she witnessed and conflict in her own feelings. For Maan, I think it shook him to see hatred and disgust in Geet's eyes for him. He knows he has hurt her and her sympathy made it worse for him. Maan's loneliness and his fear of rejection from Geet was very well described... I think he is just now realizing the effect his action has left on Geet... Looking forward to next one...

PS-Did you really think I didnt know what to do😆

Yaaay! At last I found a person who didn't find my work too short. Bless your soul !! Come here and gimme a hug 🤗. I love the way you pin pointed her feelings. It was straight to the point and very precise. I guess the whole encountering a Gangster, getting shot, watching people die has been overwhelming - hence the variation of emotions were depicted. I also like the way you analyzed Maan's reaction. Kuddos to you. 👏

P.S. Oh no I trust my readers blindly. 😆 How dare I ever question your intelligence? 😆

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Remya

@Remya_Pillai

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Posted: 14 years ago

#926

luvly one..

omg maan s hurting himself for his princess...emotional...

maan showed his inner feelings and geet took it as an advantage.. very bad..

expecting more nhok jhok...

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LuvScooby

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Posted: 14 years ago

#927

A thought occured to me while reading this...does he believe he is a monster? If he does, then is it from his actions he would believe that? I found the last part very intriguing b/c it shows that he can inflict wounds on his enemies, however inside the hard exterior, there may be a lonely/tortured soul.
Killing is his business, but that's not his life from what I'm understanding.
Maan is pushing Geet away and that only means that he might be afraid that she will break the shell around his heart which will leave him "naked."

Wonderful part, enjoyed reading it

Edited by LuvScooby - 14 years ago

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Ankita

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Posted: 14 years ago

#928

Originally posted by: _SiinnceMaan_

Yaaay! At last I found a person who didn't find my work too short. Bless your soul !! Come here and gimme a hug 🤗. I love the way you pin pointed her feelings. It was straight to the point and very precise. I guess the whole encountering a Gangster, getting shot, watching people die has been overwhelming - hence the variation of emotions were depicted. I also like the way you analyzed Maan's reaction. Kuddos to you. 👏

P.S. Oh no I trust my readers blindly. 😆 How dare I ever question your intelligence? 😆

Giving you million hugs🤗🤗 for your beautiful updates... My sympathies to Geet... Falling in love with a gangster is no fairy tale... But yes if Gangster is Maan,it becomes so much more appealing😆... Btw the music you posted at the end was really beautiful and poignant...

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naamteeg

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Posted: 14 years ago

#929

Originally posted by: _SiinnceMaan_

*Dodges bullet* Woah woman! Talk about being fast. I had only just clicked 'post reply' without bothering to edit the chapter and I already saw your comment reserved 😆.

Well I couldn't do the comedy right after he killed someone. If she started cracking jokes already - it would seem as if she were heartless too! Hm mayhap he didn't have any feelings for her initially. You could sense a change in him from the moment he kissed her 😉.

🤣 You and your fetish with cowboys - I shall never understand it!

OOH make sure you don't get caught! Your seriously placing your life and job on the line by commenting. But it shows your dedication and hence I love you for it 😳

Back from a meeting... bandwidth.. packet loss..blah..blah..blah😆 ...

..I shouldn't be doing this but it is kind of slow at work other than a couple of meetings this morning.. most of the people at a convention, so the work place is deserted.. I left the IF page open on my personal laptop.. its a secret on how I found your update that quickly.. luck played a small part in it as well😆

true.. agree with you, this update was an appropriate setup after the gruesome ending of the last one...I am amazed at how you writers keep it all straight from one write up to the next.. even after weeks go by.. 👏

You are an amazing writer and it is a pure pleasure reading your work🤗

Till the next time.. I will come hunting for your next update...if i get lucky and be in the top 4 pages I will post if not... riding off into the sunset... another meeting...😊

Edited by naamteeg - 14 years ago