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Geet Maan Sing Khurana




A poem by Geet


Led by the whispers

of the beautifully in tune

under the spell of

your love and the moon.


Yet in the shadows hid

deceit on your side

traveling the world

and many oceans wide.


You were very intent on

tearing me apart

leading me to love you

than shattering my heart.


Yet your plan fell apart

as what you wanted most

was me to fade away

with heartache as my host.


Yes, it hurt me deeply

but in seeing the real you

I saw that your love was fake

and my heart knew what to do.


It walked away from all

that had led me there

for your supposed love

was far to hard to bear.






Maan Sing Khurana



Author: Joanna

A Poem By Maan...

We were so young, so carefree

We had the world on a string

But we didn't yet know

what the next day would bring


Will I be forced

to grow up too fast?

We've got to take it back,

but we can't change the past


I had so much potential,

that's what they'll say

How could one moment

change my life this way?


How were we to know

that one little mistake

would come back to haunt me

with every breath I take?




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Remorse
PART 1
hay you all.. hope u like this… more parts on its way to give you a good clear picture.. :D pls do comment if you would llike me to continue.. :D
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It was early morning when her sleep was disturb by the strong sun light. She yoned. She quickly read some of her surra. And blowed 3 times on her chest. "Allah please mera din aur peahrai sub tik ho. Please! Please! Please!" she looks at rina who was still sleeping. Geet quickly takes a shower and wore her pink Salawar. By the time she was all ready to leave it was 8.00 am. Her school starts at 8.30. Hostel wasn't far from school at all. It was only 3-4 minutes walk. Geet quickly cheeks her self in the mirror and puts her dupata over her head covering her whole hair just few at the front was showed. She cheeks her 100 rupy. Just for her lunch. And hurriedly walks out. Rina was still sleeping.

School was huge. Mixed of all culture. She founded odd. Everyone was so reach & powerful. She is no where near match to anyone... But she have done this for maan. His dad made her promise that she will never leave his sighed. No matter what! He was in collage. 3rd year. He is 5 years senior then her. They have known each other since forever. He hates her to the core. But Geet never gives up. After all it's his dads promise. How could she ever refuge him. Even the place her parents live in it's given by them.

Geet looks at the long celling. It was huge. All the girls wearing short skirt. Mini top. She is the only traditional girl. She stood out. Everyone was giving her looks. A filthy look. Judging her by cloths. Her bag. Her hair.
Geet felt awkward. She hurriedly walked towards her class. Which was about to start in 10 minutes. But she still wanted to be there early. Then suddenly she bumps in to someones back...
Geet- I am sorry! I didn't see you.... She was about to walk off when the person turned round. He knew those voice well. & hated them. Geets eyes widens. She instantly looks down. Closes her eyes. Maan.
Geet- I am sorry. She hurries off.

Maan stood there num. Confused. How did she managed to get admission in this school? How did.... Her family is not rich enough. Barely get enough money to feed there stomach. He was angry frustrated.
John- maan. Let's go. Shila & Sammera waiting. We have to leave now.
Maan snaps out of his thought- yea. Lets go.

Geet was shaking. She ran in the class & took the back seat. Where no one possibly could see her. Geet closes her eyes. It seemed like her rapid heart was about to pope out. She sighed. It took her 10 minute to become normal again. He had a huge effect on her. Something even she couldn't explain.

Maan sat there driving. Angry frustrated. He hated her guts. He never knew why his parents were friend with filthy like them. A dust-bean. She in this school. Won't even last for a day.

One by one all the other girls and boys walked in. Giving her filthy look. She felt awkward but closed her eyes and ignored them all. She is here for maan & study. Nothing els. Nothing els.
Teacher walks in. Everyone be quiets down. No one spoke.
Teacher- hello year 10.
Everyone replied in a lousy voice but after teachers shouting people started to take everything seriously.

A year have passed like this. Even the teacher failed to realize geet. She have been quit. Never answered any question. Simply studying. Observing every details. Students started to get used to her weird look. Her weird behavior. She was so quit... No one bothered to talk or be friendly with her. She did't mind. Or cared. Simply ignored. Another year have passed. She sees maans glimpse time to time. Only with his anger. As this two year have passed by he would only hate her more. This was his last year while geets 1st year in collage. He already have started to join khurana industry. Very sussexfull. Even in collage he will be with security guards. It's his graduation day.
Dadima have noticed me at the corner. Standing all alone. I smiled but in return I only got filthy look. I still smiled. It was usual for me. I got used to it from there family. I clapped & smiled from far. I was so happy for him. I think that was it. I will never see him from today on. Only in paper & newspaper. Owo. I shied. I re-fixed my dupata over my hair to cover the last bit of hair. I smiled. Looking up. As he finished all the press everyone started to cover him. Close family & friend started to give him gift. I also brought him gifts. But it was nothing compare to there big expensive price.
Rina laughed at me. We became good friends. She was also with scholarship.
Geet- he will through this way instantly + I am really scared to give this to him.
Rina- give it to me I will do it.

I watched from the far. He did take it but soon as he opened it he crashed the gift and through it on the floor. He knew well I have given the gift. He gave me one filthy look and disappeared. The driver of his quickly picked the gift and flowed him like a puppet.
Rina- owo. He does hate you. Can even say it's your gift without looking.
Geet- yes. He hates me for sure. Today I the last day he will ever see me. I can only be with him up to this. From now on he will be all alone... But if he ever decided to look back...
Rina- will he ever find you there?
Geet- I don't know. Will he? Geet gives her a sad smile. Tears rolled down her eyes as she walked off.
She staid in her room for week from maans graduation day. Looking at the paper of his picture. Mr maan sing khurana just took over khurana empire & already in a profit list. Mr maan sing khurana found his lady love. Sammera. Soon to be Sammera khurana. Mr maan sing khurana helping the poor people!
Geet- liar... Liar... Liar.... What rubbish. She was happy that he is happy in his life... But everything was lie. His whole life was lie. Building on the lie. Geet smiles at the same time cried.
Another year have passed by. She have never seen maan after that day. Not in real life at least. Only in newspaper. Only on telly. Geet started a part time job meantime in a 5* hotel. Owned by khurana of course. But this is one of the millions of hotel he owns. So no chance of him here. She was getting good money. 5 000 rupy + tips. Which sometime more then her wages. She have rented a good reasonable house for her family. Now her family earns just about 21 000 rupy a month. Now she can afford new cloths. Not expensive of course but good one.

It's one of her usual Saturday. Geet wears her light pink suit. Ready to start her shift. Rina also works with her as she recommended.
Rina- Geet....
Geet- ha....
Both spike as they started to clean one room after another. Suddenly her eyes fell on maans photo. She knew his everyday news. Never missed a chance.
Maan sing khurana- marriage few months way.
Rina- owo! They are still not married. Geet already had tears on her eyes. Why she was crying? This man hated her to the core. Giving her filthy look all the time.
Rina- long as he doesn't come here. Our job will be gone.
Geet- he will never. Don't worry.

That day when Geet went home... Her dad sat with some property paper.
Geet- what are you doing dad.
Dad- I have a surprise for you.
Geet- yes... What is it?
Dad- we have brought a place. I mean at-least we have a permanent place.
Geet- per money dad?
Rano- we have broke our savings & all my jewelry.
Geet- why dad? She was shocked. She knew the answer well. Only few months ago when maans worker came & told us to move out. Gave us only 1 month warning.
Dad- we still have there property paper. We have to hand this to him. I mean we would have went but you know we don't have good cloths. Our dresses are wars then there Servants. You have some decent cloths. Why don't you go & hand them the file.
Geet nodes. She wears one of her best dress even that wasn't good enough.

Edited by FIRESafiReFIRE - 14 years ago
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waiting.............it sound so interesting.............love title
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Sounds so interesting. I am up for this. X
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Nice
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But I didnt get a pm from ure new acc
Have u sent yet?
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This is totaly diff concept, i thought u were workin on concept3, but never mind i lovd ths too. Plz cont soon.
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Wow...different but really good as always :)
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Remorse
PART 2


Geet- why dad? She was shocked. She knew the answer well. Only few months ago when maans worker came & told us to move out. Gave us only 1 month warning.
Dad- we still have there property paper. We have to hand this to him. I mean we would have went but you know we don't have good cloths. Our dresses are wars then there Servants. You have some decent cloths. Why don't you go & hand them the file.
Geet nodes. She wears one of her best dress even that wasn't good enough.

She stood in front of the khurana haveli. Big golden gate. The land property she held worth more then billions. At least 10-20 millions. The property was also under geets name... But of course this isn't there's. Some how when maans dad brought the place it was very cheap & it was a gift from them to handas. But maan wanted this back now. She have transferred everything under his name. Her sign was there. Soon as maan sign this paper it will be his property again.
Geet took a deep breath and asked the guards If he could go in.

Savetri & Anvisha was waiting for her impatiently.
Anvisha- oh good. Where does this filthy people comes from. Geet staid strong. Not to cry.
Savetri- Because people are only after money now days. Nothing els. She is a example. Leaves no chance to catch a rich guy. That's why she is here I am sure.... Well thats what all the other girls are like.
Geet stood in front of them. Shaking. She only wanted to give this paper and leave. She have no intention to come here or trap there sons.
Savetri- oy girl! Why are you here. We don't have the whole day for your rubbish. We don't want our carpet to be dirty.
Geet holds her dupata tight. Covers her hair again & again.
Geet- I am sorry mam. Abbu.... Have given me this paper. The property your son have left. It was under my name. I have signed the paper... Soon as m.... He sign the paper it will be his. Geet leaves the paper on the coffee table and runs out. She was in tears. She knew well what to expect from this rich filthy people. Who forgot about we are human after all. We are all living under the same sky.
She bumps in to maan again.
Geets eyes widens. She was scared now. More then anyone els he hates her the most.
Geet- I... I am sorry. I... I didn't see you at all.
Maan looks at his shirt where she was holding. Geet frees him instantly.
Geet- I am sorry! She was scared. Fearing his angry eyes.
He pushes her off. Geet was shocked. She lands on the wall beside.... she hearts her hand.
Maan- how dare you. How dare you bring your filthy self here. He retires.
Geet- I... I...
Maan- GET OUT! He shouts. What? He smirks.... Trying to melt melt me in your love? He laughs. Geet stood there shocked.
Maan- anyway. I am getting married soon. I would invite but I really don't want to invite a dirty figure like you. You never know.... I mean you don't even have right cloths. Living off of my money all those years. What els do you. Don't worry I won't want them back. Think of as a charity. You know like the people on the road....
Geet looks at him in shock. There was endless tears.
Geet- I... I am sorry sir. That was the last word she spoke and left. Promising her self never to look back. Never to look back at her love. She ran out. Maan smirks.
Maan- dirts. He takes his blazer off and throughs in to the dustbin.
Dadi- that filthy girl was here again.
Maan- yes. I have seen. Sick. Now my whole month will go bad.
Anvisha- cheap. I don't know why mum & dad ever be came friends with them. They are so poor. Euuuu.... I need to take a shower. Sick. Have you ever thought about my reputation.
Maan- anyway why are we spoiling our mood for that dirty girl. Sammeras family is coming round today Dadi.
Dadi smiles- everything is ready beta.

Geet was in tears. She couldn't even see the road. She hated him. Hated him... But still she loved him as much. She loved him more then anything in the world. His one sweet word would have been enough for her to live her life... But that was too much to ask for. Too much.

Geet walks in to her house. Crying. She broke down in her dads arm....
Geet- he hates me dad. He hates me. He hates me like always. Why me dad? Why me?...

Her Saturday job was going well until one day when maan managed to see her. He fired her instantly....

Geet- sir... What's my mistake?
Maan- you are filthy & that's enough. Get out. Right now.
Geet didn't look up at all. She left instantly. Everyone was shocked. She had no mistake.

She was forced to look for another job. Luckily maliq hotel... Again 5* took her in because of her good experience.

Few months have passed. Because of the work lode maan had to postpone his marriage by a year. Geet started her designing degree. Again in scholarship. Her family is well off now. Atlas-able to afford good food & cloths. Geet have started her practices in a company called kapoor as a intern. Her Design is very good & there for the boss always parses her work. She never went in front of the telly. Purely knowing how much maan will hate her.

Geets family was out of poverty. She have brought a good property. She gets well paid. Of course not rich but reasonably good. She just brought a car.

Her degree was only a year. She is 19 today. While maan 24. There birthday was only few days different. She... like every year have brought her a present. She smiled. She wanted to see him today badly... She knew well... The place she works... There company is one of maans clint. There was slight chance of seeing him in the fashion show.... But again...

Geet walks in to the changing room. She had to. She is one of the Design. And out of her luck... This Sammera was modeling. So maan should be here.

Sam- oy hello! You girl. Geet looks at her. Geet was helping one of the girl but her... So Stubborn. She wanted one special designer for her self.
Geet walks towards her- yes mam.
Sam- hurry fix this & where is my coffee? Hurry.
Geet jumps with her shout- yes mam.
Geet runs to get her coffe & then starts to fix her cloths.

Mr Kapoor walks in. He is a middle aged man. Age 50! Still looked pretty young. Rich people geet thought. If you are getting old what's the point of holding it?
Mr Kapoor- Geet! It's your birthday today. You should not be working.
Sam- excuse me. My dress. Hurry she orders. Geet quickly fixes her cloths after she leves- sir... Only 5 minute. Then I will go promise.
Mr Kapoor- alright! But I want you out & enjoy your birthday. Understood.
Geet nodes...
She peeps from the curtain to get jut one glimpse of maan. Just once. But she failed.... No maan. Half broken heart she walks out leaving the crowded crowds behind.
Then out of the bloom maans car stops right in front of her. He was shocked to see her. Disgusted more likely.
Maan- what the f*** are you doing here? He shouts.
Geet jumps with his sudden outburst. It was her birthday.
Maan- actually don't bother to open your filthy mouth. I don't have time at all today. My GF... You know love of my life waiting for me inside.
Tears rolled down geets eyes.
Geet- don't hurt me maan. I have no intention to come in front of you. I am sorry.
Maan- look at it from outside because poor girls like you will never have anything.... Oh! Hold on.... Are you here to melt one of this rich guy? ... You are. He mocks her....
Maan laughs... And walks off. Like she is a filth. A mere dust. Have no right in him. No right. If course that was right. She never had no right on him. Never. Geet walked along the empty street. Tears rolled down her eyes. Was she that ugly... Was she that same-full to the society. Sometime she feel like she wanted to end her life.... Just end this misery. She feel in love with a man who hates her to the core with out any reason...

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