MAYUR FF ~ The Dark Magic ~ - Page 28

Cinderella, you are amazing and you know that right? I LOVED the fact that M knows the truth, hoping N won't be in the dark for too long now! right? But the pain and agony of N is too much...that it supresses all pain M is bear with the confliction of Nupur and his past and them colliding together.

Brilliant.. I loved the Update.

Sajjal

Part 7

Another great part! I loved how u went back and forth b/w M & N's thoughts! It shows their pain but of different kind.

I love how they r getting along but scared of the future that awaits them.

Poor Nupur (I don't feel bad for Mayank, he deserves it..)..she doesn't realize that she is not moving on but is going back to that very same point.

I love Mayank-Priya bond…father-daughter bonds are always special! & they have the same taste too!

She told him? U left at a cliffhanger…thank god, I read them together.

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Part 8

-I liked how u handled the whole Nupur-Mayank convo @ the beginning. U portrayed their emotions and the dialogues were simple yet powerful….and how u brought back the dialogues from part 1.

So Mayank knows now? So far..I really didn't feel sorry for him at all but this part made me feel a bit sorry for him but one can't forgive the kind of thing he did. U described his feeling well….first making the connection and then remembering Priya and smiling…then remembering Nupur again, then deciding to confess….and then last minute distraction…I really hope that mayank will come clean with the truth but seeing the last part, it seems like he won't tell her…Looking forward to the next part.