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Sania

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Posted: 14 years ago

#181

sorry for the late comment!

very interesting concept

all the parts r mindblowing 👏

plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz continue soon

nd thnx for the pm 😊

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tehzeeb25

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Posted: 14 years ago

#182

gr888 prt

thanxxx 4 d pm

update soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooon plezzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz

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SAISakura16

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Posted: 14 years ago

#183

Another awesome part! I loved Mayank-Priya interaction...Mayank fell in love with his daughter already. Priya seems like a sweet child.

Nupur-Priya relationship is adorable..how she carried her home. Priya understands her mum so much to know when to stop the questions.

Though I hate Mayank for what he had done...I can't help but like how he was admiring her smile.

Both are going towards their child...wonder what nupur's reaction would be. Looking fwd to the next part.

U started cooking?Good job..Hope u have a better time with it than me. I love baking but cooking ...not so much.

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Beet

@Beet

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Posted: 14 years ago

#184

Mehak 🤗

First of all congratulations on your new FF 🤗

And ohmigosh, this is absolutely brilliant! Bravo!

Your writing, the story, it is all just too amazing! And I am so glad that you picked such a powerful subject! Absolutely brilliant!

All the parts were just too fabulous!

Keep it up hun!

Love

Daania

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Supriya

@-SupriyaluvsMN-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#185

awww. mahek!🤗
part 5 ws cute!
esp luvd d last lyn!😳

& congos... u startd cookin... badiya hai ji!!🥳

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munni_sheela

@munni_sheela

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Posted: 14 years ago

#186

hope mayank find out soon abt priya
awesome part
thnx for pm

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Fantasia.

@Fantasia.

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Posted: 14 years ago

#187

hehehehe..thank u so much for the wishes guys..i made spaghetti and cream soup, under the super vision of my mom..😆

PART 6:

M..priya..

Priya was so deeply engrossed in the book, that she didn't notice some one calling her, mayank took a step froward and tried again..

M..priyaa

this time she turned and stood up from the bench, smiling..

P..good afternoon sir..

M..good afternoon bache..kia ho raha hai?..sab khel rahe hain aur ap parh rahi ho?..

He came to sit on the bench she was sitting and priya also sat beside him..

P..wo ye nayi book hai meri...tu main parh rahi hon..

M..acha ..dikhao kaun si book hai..

He took the book and it was summarized version of shakespear's plays for children, written in simple english..

M..ap ko Shakespeare psnd hai?..

P..pehli baar parh rahii hon..maa ne kaha k is ko parho..tu parh rahi hon...

M..kaun sa play parh rahi ho?.

P..macbeth..

M..kaisa laga ap ko?..

P..bilkul bhi acha nahi hai..

M..kuuu?

P..us ne ghalti ki..aur usey pata tha k ghalti kar raha hai..phir bhi..he continued knowing it was wrong..

Mayank felt as if someone brought his past in front of his eyes..he went back to his trance...continued knowing that it was wrong..

P..aisa tu nahi hota na..ghalti tu sirf tab hoti hai jab pata na ho..hai na?..

M..nahi..aisa hota hai...

Mayank's voice almost broke down..he swallowed a lump in his throat..a tiny tear wetting his eye pockets..priya who was looking at him constantly, got scared..

P..ap ro rahe ho.?.

Mayank manged to block the tears..

M..nahi..

Priya was unsatisfied so she tilted her head as to look into his eyes, for a proof and mayank started giggling at her cute gesture, so he opened his eyes wide..

M..ye dekho..nahi ro raha..

Priya looked into them for a moment and then she was convinced..

P..haan thek hai..

Both of them started giggling..

P..pata hai maa kehti hai k only helpless people cry..jo apni ghalti thek nahi kar sakte wo rotey hain..

Mayank nodded, she was right, he had shed countless tears of regret in these 8 years bcz he was helpless , there was no way he could repent his mistake..

P..is liye man kabhi nahi rooti..

she was proudly saying and mayank admired her innocence..

M.acha ye baatao k..

Priya..

both of them turned on the voice..

P..maa..

she ran towards her and hugged her legs, whereas mayank and nupur were staring at each other in amazement and disbelief..

nupur was shocked to see mayank and priya laughing like this and mayank was amazed to see that nupur had a child..

, priya's voice brought them out of the trance..

P..maa..

N..umm..haan..wo ye..tumhari worksheets meri file main reh gayi thi..

P..oh!..in ka period tu recess k baad hai..

she grabbed them and placed them and them in the bag while mayank and nupur were shocked at seeing each other in such a situation..the school bell rang and again priya brought them back to the world..

P..bye maa..main class main ja rahi hon..

Nupur forced a smile..

N..bye beta..

P...bye sir..

M..bye bache..

Priya left and finally mayank spoke up..

M..priya ap ki..

N..meri beti hai..

nupur smiled fully and mayank responded back with an equally warm smile..

M..very sweet child..

N..thank you, waise main ap k office mian hi aney wali thi..main ne questionnaire prepare kar liya hai ap..

M..office main chal k baat karen..

He said it with such a sweet voice and for a moment her heart skipped a beat..and his sweet smile was a bit difficult to refuse..

N..ummm..sure..

They started walking to the office, both of them silent, mayank opened the office door for her and then follwoed her in the office, both of them sat down on the table..

M..ap coffee ya chai..

N..no thank you..

M..ok..tu wo questionnaires..

N..haan..

she took out the papers from her file,and handed him..he started reading them and nupur observed dimple on his cheeck..

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maa meri life main jo bhi aye ga na us k dimples tu zaroor hon gey

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she loved dimples, but after that day , all her dreams were just shattered...she was discussing her life partner with her mother in the morning when she was..

M..bht acha hai..

mayank again looked at her and saw that she was lost in thoughts..

M..ap thek ho?..

N..umm..yess..thek hai main distribute karwa deti hon..

She was about to get up when mayank stood up..

M..nupur..

She turned..and he walked to come in front of him..

M..umm..i hope ap ne mind nahi kiya k main priya k sath aseiy baat kar raha tha ..i ..

N..its ok..i know my daughetr..agr ap se baat kar rahi thi tu i am sure ap ne us se affection dikhyia hogi..she never makes wrong decisions..

mayank observed her eyes twinkling at the amen of priya..

M..i know..she is a very intelligent child..umm..but nupur i dont understand k why do we are not on good terms..

N..mtlb?..

M..i mean jab se hum milen hain, there is some strange distance between us, we need to work together..asiy tu kaam affect hoga..

Nupur knew that he was right , may be she was just bringing her past too much..

N..nahi wo..

M..friends?

Mayank put froward his hand and for a moment nupur was speechless to react..she looked at him and he was smiling..nupur also smiled gently and placed her hand on his palm..

she shook hands, looking straight into each other's eyes and smiling t each other..apparently they were normal..but somewhere deep down in there heart ..they sensed something...they knew this touch..they knew these eyes..

mano na maano
dono k hathon main
yadoon ki kuch zanjeerain hain...

Edited by -Mehak - 14 years ago