'Intikhaab' A MaYur FF -Completed (Epilogue pg103)

First Previous

Page

Next Last

Frequent Posters

-SharNeela-

@-SharNeela-

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#401

Originally posted by: anishalakhani78
amazing job!!👍🏼
wow I loved it!!❤️
you're amazing!!!
add me to your pm list!!
update soon!!😃
*ani

Thanks Ani. Welcome to my world 😊 I will send you a bud request so that you are notified of all the updates moving forward. Hope you continue to enjoy the FF

-Neela

Quote

-SharNeela-

@-SharNeela-

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#402

Originally posted by: ...Mahak...

First of all'.I am so sorry that I missed to comment on the last three parts'.well I am reading them now only'

I was away'.so I just couldn't get my hands on them.

Well, now that I am back, I can read them and enjoy them as much as I like.

Missed my comments?? Cause I definitely missed reading this one.

Toofan se aane waali khamoshi? God! Now I am scared *laughs*

Hey, and I read the entire concept again. And some questions arose in my heart.

Would Nupur hate Mayank so much that she would forget about her love for him? And Why? And Nupur would be so blind in her hate that she would even neglect the love thrown at her by Tanmay?? Why?

You have got to answer me some questions soon.

Okay, I think now I can start reading the parts. So that you can get my first thoughts like always.

Hmm'..so Mayank wrote a mail for her.

True yaar, whenever we are angry or upset with someone or ignore that person because we think that we have hurt that person, we never think about that person's thinking. Maybe the other person is thinking the same way too!

She is sooo happy! Its great to see her like that.

She imagines so much! Kids? God!

Apni Nupur se kahiye ki thoda intezaar kare. Itni jaldi sapne mat dekhe cause jab sapne toote hain, tab bahut dard hota hai.

Lol'.whenever I have to do something, which is a little different and personal, even I feel that everyone is not doing their own work and are plotting to know my secret. It's really funny!

Aha'so she finally wrote her reply! Great!

WOW! The last four poetic lines were sooo touching. Teach me how to write them too. You are just beyond awesome at them.

Hmm, so now I proceed on to the next part of the story.

In love, people do not change'.it's you that change'.everything seems so happy. Or so, I have read.

She is something! She hugs her friend just like that? And I thought that she was a little mature!

And it's great that Tanmay won the match.

I hate lofers. Trust me, when a boy gets into my way and tries to flirt, I feel like trashing his face. But I am extremely a follower of non-violence, so I ignore them.

Lol. I loved this scene. Exactly what I would have done. And exactly what my friend would have said! Because they know ki jab tak main chup hoon, tab tak theek hai'jab gussa aaya, they are so gone!

This Tanmay, makes me laugh. His talks are so amazing.

So, finally Tanmay knows ki Nupur loves Mayank.

Were they really about to kiss? *extremely shocked*

Nupur bahut badi idiot hai. And umm'.I can't comment on that scene.

I mean, I already knew ki Tanmay would fall for Nupur'but umm...I didn't wanted his heart to be broken.

Amazing six lines.

Nupur jab bhi Tanmay ke saath hoti hai, she forgets the fact that Mayank even exists!

Isn't this love? Not the love she has for Mayank 'but what she feels for Tanmay.

I mean, kisi ke paas khud ko safe mehsoos karna'and khud ko bhool jaana?

Anyways, this is what I feel, is love.

I am sad right now, but I am proceeding on to the next part.

Wow'.I mean start se hi MN?

And I so loved their talks.

I just couldn't stop myself before reading them all.

And Mayank is such a romantic guy.

His description of Nupur was more than amazing.

Online proposal!

Pata nahi kyun'par online proposal itna shocking nahi laga'.jaise hum usi ko expect kar rahe the'

Wow! It was so heart-touching!
WoW! I am so in love with this update. I have read it more than 10 times already.
I don't know how long I would keep reading it.

But I guess, before reading it 11^th time, I need to give you this as a comment.

You deserve a round of applause after this update.

This was the most beautiful update of this FF.

This time, the update was so beautiful that it could match upto the beauty of the last four poetic lines.

Itni achi lines aap likhti kaise hain?

Amazing! I loved the update. I am in love with it completely.

Now I know, the troubles are going to start.

Anyways, nothing can spoil my mood right now.

Thanks for such an amazing update.

Do continue soon. Kaafi intezaar hai.

Love,
Mahak

My My...what a comment! Truly said...of course it does compensate for all the comments you missed during the past few parts. And yes...do I need to say that I missed your comments?? I am sure you know it...don't you? 😉 Although you may not believe it, the day before you commented, I was thinking about you. I was wondering where you were and was constantly reminding myself to scrap you and to give you those links for KAJ and Ashna but me and my Gajniwali beemari 😆 😆

Now coming back to the comments (let me read again). So you too getting into the habit of referring me to the concept. good yaar...woh kya hai na hum apni kahani khud hi bhool jaate hai and its good some readers keep on reminding me of what the story is all about warna abhi tak to Intikhaab ki khichdi bann jaati 😆 Yeah...all your questions will be answered...so sabar kar baccha 😛 I am glad you did not find the proposal shocking..this is good news. And another thing I like about you is you relate to Nupur. Whatever she does..is something you do in real life as well. I guess this gives a fictional character in a story the life it needs. So thanks...meri Nupur ko Jaan dene k liye.

Anad once again...the 4 lines. *sigh* keep enjoying them.

-Neela

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

-SharNeela-

@-SharNeela-

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#403

@sariska_mnarti

No need to be sorry yaar...I am glad that you still get the time to catch up and comment 😊 Thank you...thats more than enough for me 😃

@aanchal

Thank you for your comments Ragini.

@RAtiArti

Welcome to Intikhaab dear. I believe I have already sent you a bud request so that you can be notified of the next updates. I hope you continue to enjoy the story moving forward.

@mahakmev

Thank you!

@Ayesha_LuvSajan

Thanks for your lovely comment.

@DhanakZ

LOL...yaar samajh nahi aaraha yeh sab log Tanmay se itna darr kyun rahe hai? Is it because he is coming across as more of a suitor than Mayank himself? sochnewali baat hai 😉

@ginny09

hahhaaa...so Tanmay ka tension khatam hua aakhir me 😆 Good yaar...per doosra tension abhi shuru honewala hai. watch out for the next update.

@shaheen_menon (Shaheen)

Thanks for your comments Shaheen. Keep reading..

@drkhoobsoorat

Hi there...I think I have seen you in many times in the LIKE list of either Intikhaab or Qayenaat. But you have been always a silent reader and this is the 1st time you commented 😊 I am really glad to see you interacting like other readers. If I may...can I add you to my PMList? I am not sure if you will be interested to continue reading. Please let me know.

@gopi06

Thank you ! Waiting for MaYur wedding!!! LOL...lets see what happens 😃

@bhawna_arti

Thanks sweety. I have sent you a bud request. Hope youi continue to enjoy the story.

@love.mayurarti

Thanks !

-Neela-

Edited by sharneel - 14 years ago

Quote

-SharNeela-

@-SharNeela-

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#404

Writer's Note

So we have crossed halfway of Intikhaab. 15 chapters...all written to establish one and only one fact...Nupur and her characteristics, her life style, her dreams, her hopes, her beliefs and her memories. Her world...beautiful and simple, her parents and her friends and her neighbors..all reflect her simplicity and naiveness. During these chapters, I tried my best to put my readers into her shoes so that you see things from her point of view. There wasn't a single incident where Mayank's life was shown or Tamnay's background revealed simply because that wasn't the focus. They are what they appear to be in front of Nupur's eyes and what was written was only what Nupur saw and thought. So the question or opinion that I hear from readers regarding the connection between Mayank and Tanmay remains out of scope for the sake of the story. If it helps some readers to assume they both are the same person then so be it. But let us focus on Nupur again...because the time is nearing when the readers have to choose the right ending for me and if you cannot relate or connect to Nupur, the ending will not be justified.

Anyways...moving forward, from this point on the story takes its turn. I must make a confession here...its not going to be an easy ride from here and from my past experience from some of my readers, I have decided to be a bit cautious simply because I, myself, am a bit apprehended about what I am about to write (not sure so far...all depends on how I am feeling when I write those parts) but some readers may not like what they would read. Hence, I have requested/recommended some selected readers not to read any further. Although I cannot stop anyone from reading but there will be no PMs sent to them. Sorry about this but I had no choice.

Hope we all continue with this journey together. Till my next writer's note, thank you for being with me so far. Feel free to express your thoughts and feelings via comments and press the LIKE button if you do as I use it to update my PMList.

-Neela

Edited by sharneel - 14 years ago

Quote

-SharNeela-

@-SharNeela-

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#405

~~~~Part 16: Golden Letters~~~~~

Life has never been so beautiful for Nupur. She wakes up in the morning with new hopes and dreams in her eyes. Dream of living a simple yet pleasant life with the love of her life. She wonders whats going to happen next? Will Mayank be visiting her soon? Or will he send his parents here? Either way, they will be meeting soon. First time, after 10 long years, she will meet him…face to face. On her way to college, she wonders how he looks like! He was quite chubby when he was young, loved eating all the time. What if he has gone fatter? As soon as her thoughts ponder that way, her sub-conscious mind shoves that probability. Her heart takes over her logical mind and she starts sketching his image in her mind…a tall, not so fare, well-built body…he will have bright eyes that will spark intelligence…his hair will be short and tidy…he will be very well dressed, smart and handsome. When he walks pass anyone, he will demand respect and honor. He will be strong in his faith and beliefs and he will win hearts with his words. Wow..what a charming man! she says to herself suddenly realising that she was actually describing Tanmay!!! She wondered…how did Tanmay come into her mind and instantly the reply came from within…simply because she hasn't been so close with any other man..physically other than Tanmay. Mayank has been close to her heart but it cannot be denied that there is no strong image of Mayank in her mind that would represent his current appearance. Saying that, she suddenly realised that for the past 3 days since their last meeting during that rainy evening, she hasn't seen Tanmay around.

N: kamaal hai…3 din se Tanmay dikha hi nahi aur humain iss baat ki khabar ab horahi hai!
N: kyun nahi…tu jo Mayank ki khayalon me itni doobi hai k aur koi tujhe yaad hi nahi raha
N: haan..so to hai (blushes) per kya karoon…itna sab kuch itna achanak se hogaya! humnain to socha bhi nahi tha k Mayank humse itna pyar karte hai k baghair humain dekhe aur baghair humse miley woh humse shaadi karne ko tayyar hogaye
N: ab issme tu itna hairaan kyun horahi hai? tunay bhi to usse nahi dekha phir bhi aankhein bandh karke usse shaadi karne ko tayyar hogayi. bewkufi aur kise kehte hai
N: yeh bewkufi nahi meri jaan…yeh to ishq hai :)
N: ek hi baat hai ..ishq ho ya bewkufi. aajkal k zamane me bhi tum jaise paghal mil jaate hai. waise tu to paidashi bewkuf hai per Mayank to foreign me pala barha well educated modern ladka hai. ussne apne zindagi ka itna bara faisla aise kaise kar diya? kuch garbar lag rahi hai mujhe (Nupur's suspicious mind kicks in)
N: isi liye to hum unhe na nahi keh paaye. mera khud ka faisla ghalat hosakta hai per unnka nahi
N: wah..itna bharosa hai uss per?
N: khud se bhi zyada
N: bina kisi ko dekhe, usse sahi tarha se jaane ya pehchane iss tarha aandhon ki tarha uss per yaqeen karna kya sahi baat hai?
N: kabhi kabhi hum logon k saath saalon saal bitate hai aur humain lagta hai k unnko humse zyada aur koi jaan ya pehchaan nahi sakta. phir zindagi me aise muqam aate hai jab humain wohi log ajnabeeyon jaise lagte hai. saawal waqt ka nahi hai, sawal hota hai kaun aap ke dil me kab aur kaise ghar kar jaata hai…kaun achanak se aapko iss tarha se samajhne lagta hai sirf chand mulaqat k baad k koi kareebi shaks bhi aapko na jaanta ho aise. khaas karke jab aapko lagta hai k ek aisi baat aapki jisske baare me aapko khud hi nahi pata tha aur woh insaan aake aap hi ko aap se milwa deta hai aur aap ko jatata hai k aap khudko jitna accha samajhte ho aap usse bhi acche ho, behter ho tab aap ko uss per khud se bhi zyada aitbaar hone lagta hai.

Nupur doesn't hear her inner voice anymore as she arrives at college. She goes through her classes but doesn't find Tanmay anywhere in any of the classes. After the class, she searches for him everywhere and asks all his friends. All she hears that no one has seen him for the past couple of days after that basket ball match with Abhi. Nupur gets slightly worried about him but what she does not recall is that confession she made about Mayank to Tanmay and hence, is not aware that this could be one of the reasons why Tanmay is not seen around anymore.

With Tanmay's concern in her thoughts, she arrives home late in the afternoon. Aparna was watching TV and as soon as she saw Nupur, walks toward her with a smile:

A: are baccha aagayi tu?
N: haan maa. baba kahan hai?
A: bahar gaye hai. sunn mujhe tujhse zaroori baatein karni thee kuch. tu pehle naha-dhoke fresh ho jaa. main khana lagati hoon
N: kis baare me baat karna hai maa?
A: tu jaa pehle…fresh hoke aa phir araam se maa beti baatein karte hai.

As per the instructions, Nupur freshens up, takes her lunch and retires to her bedroom. She picks up a novel to read when Aparna enters.

A: beta tujhe araam karna hai to main baad me aati hoon
N: nahi maa…aao na.
A: kitne din hogaye tujhse sahi tarha se baat nahi hui. tu to college me jaake bohat hi masroof hogayi hai. college se bedroom aur bedroom se college. apni ma-baba ko jaise bhool hi gayi hai
N: nahi maa aisi baat nahi hai. woh imtihaan sir pe hai na..to isi liye. per ab hum hai na. aaj poora din hum apni maa se baat karenge…no parhayi no likhayi :)
A: poora din ki zaroorat nahi hai ..bas tujhse kuch kaam tha
N: hmm bolo..
A: tujhe teri Shilpa Aunt yaad hai?
N: (although she recalls her but denies) ermm…kaun…kaun shilpa aunty maa?
A: wohi..tere baba ki best friends..Sharma Uncle aur Shilpa aunty…tu bhul gayi hai shayed
N: ooohh woh Sharma uncle…haan maa yaada aaya.
A: kal unka phone aaya tha
N: (gets nervous…oh my God! but she hides her expressions and calmly asks) unhone kyun phone kiya maa? khairiyet?
A: hmm…pehle to main bhi chauk gayi thee. kaafi arse k baad shilpa ne phone kiya. phir jab poori baat batayi to wajah samajh aaya (she smiles)
N: kkkya..kkya wajah maa (she strutters)
A: unhe apne Mayank ke baare me baat karni thee
N: (now she is at the edge of her bed….has he told aunty already?? Gosh this is happening so fast…she is feeling so excited but there is no way she can let Aparna know anything) yeh Mayank kaun hai maa?
A: kya kaha? Mayank kaun hai??? tujhe Sharma uncle yaad hai, Shilpa aunty yaad hai aur Mayank nahi yaad? arre tum dono bachpan me saath saath khele..badey hue. unn dino to tum dono ko koi alag nahi kar sakta tha. tere paida hone k din se lekar teri 9-10 saal ki umer tak tum dono ki dosti aur pyaar dekhne layek tha. per jitna pyar tha utna hi larte bhi the tum dono. aaya din ek doosre k khilone tor diye…ya phir usska saman kho diya aur isi liye Mayank tujhe bohat maara karta tha…aur Shilpa Mayank ko. Shilpa tujhe bohat pyar karti thee..(sighs) apni Mayank se bhi zyada. na jaane yeh log pardes me jaake kahan kho gaye. itne khush haal zindagi thee hamari..teri baba ki jaise dil hi nikal ke le gaye Sharma bhaisaab. usske baad barson hogaye na woh log yahan wapas laute aur na hi hamari mulaqat hui.
N: (hugs her maa) udaas kyun hoti ho maa. apna mulk aur apni mitti se door koi bhi zyada din nahi reh sakta. koi na koi wajah nikal hi aayegi unnke wapas lautne ki aur iss baar jab woh lautenge na to hum sab milke unnko phir wapas nahi jaane denge
A: (smiles) teri mun me ghee shakkar bitiya. aur isi liye Aparna ne phone kiya tha. woh log aarahe hai yahan
N: (jumps off the bed) kyaaa? aarahe hai? kab maa? Mayank bhi aanewale hai kya? (she quickly realises that her maa is staring at her sudden enthusiasm about a family's arrival whom she didn't even remember 5 minutes ago)
A: arre baith jaa aur sunn. woh log aarahe hai Mayank ki shaadi karane k liye
N: (blushing…as her heart beats at 1000 miles per hour) accha?
A: haan..woh Mayank apna MBA khatam karnewala hai aur yehi tay hua tha k usski MBA khatam hote hi woh log usski shaadi kara denge. hairaatgi ki baat yeh hai k woh Mayank ki shaadi apni purkhon ki haveli me karna chahte hai..yahin pe. isi liye aarahe hai
N: iss me hairatgi ki kya baat hai maa…ab shaadi k liye yahin pe to aana parega na unko (she thinks to herself..how else would she be there in the wedding..this is her hometown after all)
A: haan per mujhe lagah wahin London me shaadi hogi. aakhir unnke saare dost aur rishtedaar to wahin k hai na?
N: kinke rishtedaar ki baat kar rahi ho maa?
A: Raheja sahab ki..
N: kaun Raheja maa?
A: arre jinki beti se Mayank ki shaadi horahi hai buddhu? kya naam hai uss larki ka…ruk main dekhti hoon (and she brings a wedding card with her). haan..Simran.

Nupur picks up the card and sees the golden words on a red card:

"We would like to cordially invite you to the wedding ceremony of our one and only son "Mr. Mayank Sharma" with "Miss. Simran Raheja" daughter of Mr. & Mrs. Ashish Raheja...

Nupur cannot read anymore…the words have become so blurry as her eyes become full with tears.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Ya Khuda meri madad karo
Yun na mujhe nashaad karo
Mita do meri naam-o-nishaan
Yun na tabah-o-barbaad karo
Har kaushish hamari nakaam rahi
Ab to daffan unki yaad karo
Ya Khuda meri madad karo
Doob chuki hai zindagi gham-e-hijr me
Ab to mujhe azaad karo
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

-Neela-

Edited by sharneel - 14 years ago

Quote

Sanchari

@--Sanchu--

Stunner

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#406

wow!!!...

👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

outstanding concepts and amazing style of writing...

please PM me if posssible the next time you update...

Quote

.SilentPrincess

@.SilentPrincess

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#407

Reserved...

Edited

ab kya kahein... It was definitely shocking, but more than shocking I'm confused. Ek taraf bare bare vaade kiye aur dusri taraf kisi aur say shaadi ka plan. Kuch khaas samjh nahi aya.

Bohat bura laga Nupur ke hawaley say, kitne khawb sajaye the sab tooth kar bikhr gaye. Aur sabse ziads duhk iss baat ka hai ke hum naye un khawb ko bante hue dekha hai aur jab woh humare samne tooth rahe hai toh bohat dukh hua.

Mayank say koi shikayat bhi nahi kar sakte, kyunke humein abhi Mayank ke baare main kuch pata nahin. Kya pata Mayank ko iss baarein main kuch pata na ho, woh toh Europe main tha na aur wahi say Nupur ko propose kiya. Bohat confuse kiya iss update ne, par humein yakee hai Mayank aisa nahi kar sakta, iss ke peeche koi na koi wajah zarur hai.

Aur rahi baat Tanmay ki woh toh jaise Nupur ne kaha itne saloon main uss ke kareeb tha he kaun. Aur yeh Tanmay toh Mayank ki yaad ki ek tasveer he. Ek he larke ko janti hai toh kaise yaad rahe gha Mayank.

Update ka kya kahein, haan dukh toh boihat hua lekin humara mana hai ke joh writer reader ke emotions ko control kar sakta hai us main kuch na kuch toh hoga. Aap say koi shikayat nahi iss upodate ke liye bas ke choti si guzarish ke please jaldi update karein.

-Laiba

- I'm extremely sorry for editing so late...

Edited by princez_94 - 14 years ago

Quote

ALIMA AFRIN KHEYA

@kheya-mayur

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#408

awsom.

but eta ki holo!!!!!!!!
mayank na nupur k bier jonno propose korlo!!!!!!

accha story nad dilam but writer note er kisui bujlam na bhai!!!!!

tumi ki abr sad ending planing korcho naki!!!!!!!😔

r kake kake jeno pm korbena bole humki diso ami tar moddhe asi naki!!!!!!!😕

amke bhai pm koro.plzzz

Quote

ragini sharma

@-DreamzGirl-

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#409

so aap apne purane form me aa hi gai .

koi baat nahi .i don't know ab mein aap se kya kaho but i must say you are a very good writer but i am not strong tto read more .

but agar aap in future mayur story likhne to hame bhul mat jayiega .