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Posted: 14 years ago

~~~~~ Thank You Note ~~~~~

@aanchal (Prachi)

Aapko akele nahi...90% of my readers think Tanmay is Mayank 😊 Glad you're still enjoying this FF.

@vampire_girl (Tashu)

After 20 quotes on my threads and 100 scraps, did I miss anything at all? šŸ˜† Other than a plain old THANKS 😊

@princez_94 (Laiba)

udhaar me rehne ki aadat hogayi hai...haina? 😊

@achoose (Aswathy)

Thanks dear for LIKEing and commenting

@sariska_mnarti (Sariska)

Hey you're back! And no need to say sorry yaar! har koi apni zindagi me masroof hai..Glad that you came back though. Thank you for reading and commenting. Watch out for the next part.

@drfizaahmed (Fiza)

Commented already in both my thread and yours. apni to chalti rehti hai šŸ˜‰

@-Mahak- (Mahak)

The award goes to Mahi for the longest comment on this part šŸ‘ Andolan?? woh bhi hamare khilaaf 😲 haila..aisa mat karo plz. kahani slow lagti hogi kyunki character based hai. If I take a step back then the lifespan of the 3 characters living within Intikhaab will probably be no longer than 3 months after they grow up. iss liye shayed slow lag raha hai kyunki kahani me pace nahi hai...per characters me jaan dikh rahi hai na? improtant is characters ko samajhna..you'll know soon why. aur hamari aur koi stories to nahi hai! Qayenaat to aap ne pari hui hai. 'Kuch Ankahee Jazbat' bhi..bas usske beech ek OS likkha tha..Aashna. and I think you read that too. hum aap k tarha itne mashoor writer nahi hai ji. hum to bas awaein awaien...šŸ˜† About to 4 lines..aapko andaza nahi hoga dil ki kis kaune se woh alfaaz nikalte hai. saari duniya parhti hai...kuch hai jo samajhte hai...kuch hai jo tareef karke chal dete hai per jinke liye likhte hai bas woh hi anjaan reh gaye *sigh* Thanks...for such lovely comments...thanks for understanding..thanks for reading between the lines.

@fariaa70 (Faria)

ekhono ki rege acho? scrap er uttor dilena to!

@mahakmev

Thank you Sweety.

@nightdreamer_mn (Summi)

Thanks for your lovely comment. Arse k baad aisi compliment sunne ko mili..thanks 😊


~~~~ Neela~~~~

Edited by sharneel - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Writer's Note

After a long time, I come before you with my thoughts. First of all, my apologies for disappearing for such a prolonged period where I kept you guys away from my updates. Actually I was very busy and traveling for the past 3 months...hence I could not even write something for reserve. I hope to catch up with you all by updating more frequently and this time I hope my next break will be after Intikhaab is over.

Coming to the FF...I have been going through the comments for the past few updates. So majority think Tanmay is Mayank or Mayank is Tanmay or they are somehow related. I do not want to make any comments here other than this...first time I have not written the last chapter yet as I don't know how the ending would be. Let me remind you, you readers will be choosing the right ending for me. So I am as much lost as you all are. I am just writing with a caution so that there is flexibility where any of the ending will fit the storyline so far. But I am glad to see your comments...you are on the right track. Still not thinking like Nupur though...may be I am failing here and I need to work harder to get you there.

Last of all, the next update I believe, is the best chapter I have written so far in Intikhaab. And I want to dedicate this chapter to all my new readers:

jiya_angel
roshneerakhali
dhano_arti
ayesha_luvsajan
ansarSssssS
gurtilover


Welcome on board you guys! Thanks for your lovely comments and I sincerely hope that I can meet your expectations as I hear that not only you guys are very good readers but also excellent writers as well. So feel free to comment and feedback if you have any.

Also, this part is dedicated to TASHU (you know why) and LAIBA...for having faith in me

Next update..for you! Enjoy and please do comment at least this time. Should I really be proud of this update? 😊

-Neela

Edited by sharneel - 14 years ago
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~~~~~Part 12: A Hidden Gem~~~~~~

The day has ended and Nupur's hesitation has now turned into a fear. She wondered what Mayank must be thinking. That sudden behaviour may have come across very rude to him.

"kya hojata hai tujhe Nupur! sahi tarha se baat bhi nahi karni aati. kya soch raha hoga Mayank! yeh humain kya hojata hai achanak se. kitni umeed se ussne message bheja…main jawab kyun nahi de paayi? ab kya karoon? kya karoon…ab woh mujhse shayed kabhi baat na kare. ufff…"

She spends a restless night that day and the thought pattern continues next day. Tanmay cannot help but notice that Nupur is still lost in her thoughts and is not her usual self. As they walk by the road, suddenly he pushes her towards a passing car and instantly pulls her back…

N: Tanmay…yeh kya kar rahe ho.
T: wohi to main pooch raha hoon k tum aakhir kar kya rahi ho. aise chalti gari k saamne kuddne ka matlab?
N: hum kudday? tumne dhakka diya!!!
T: arre maine kab dhakka diya!! maine tumhe khincha iss taraf …warna to tum gayi thee kaam se
N: mujhe samajh nahi aaraha…dhakka diya phir khincha!! maarna chahte ho ya bachana?
T: marray tumhare dushman aur bachane ki naubat bhi Khuda kare kabhi naa aaye. main to bas apni khoyi hui dost ko dhoondh raha tha
N: khoyi hui dost?
T: kal se dekh raha hoon Nupur tum kuch khoyi khoyi ho. aha..main wajah nahi poochoonga. batana hota to kal hi bata dete, nahi batana to koi harj nahi hai. per kam se kam iss tarha khud ko pareshaan na rakkha karo. tumhari pareshaani ab mere shakal me dikhne laga hai aur to tum to jaante ho aise looks mujhe suit nahi karte (as he back brushes his hair with his fingers)
N: (starts smiling) kitna drama karte ho yaar. kisi 1967 ki hero lagte ho pata hai! (she starts giggling)
T: saal koi bhi ho..lagta to hero hi hoon na.
N: hahhaaa…accha ab style marna bandh karo. kisine agar iss nakli hero k saath itne nakhre karte hue dekh lia na mujhe to iss college me meri reputation barbaad hojayega.
T: accha…to Ms. Nupur Bhushan ki ek reputation bhi hai college me. humain bhi to pata chale kya reputation hai? batao mujhe..kaunse teer maarke reputation bana liya apna
N: woh to ab bataker nahi…karke dikhana hai. tum bhi kya yaad karoge iss college ki kis shaksiyet se paala parha hai. (and she holds his hands and drags him to the college campus)


Tanmay follows her with a grin on his face..he feels good that whatever was bothering Nupur has, temporarily, may be has gone off her mind. Before his thoughts can go any further, he finds himself in the college auditorium where there is a dance rehearsal going on. Nupur, as if forcibly, sits Tanmay down on one of the seats and disappears. After few minutes, there is a new background music playing and from behind the curtains, its Nupur. As she walks towards the stage, she is tying her dupatta round her waist and she has ghungroo on her feet. As the music fades in, she starts dancing…a form of classical dance. Tanmay sits up a little as this is like news to him. Nupur dances…that too she seems like an amazing dancer. Every step, every movement, every angle is in par with the tune. Its picture perfect. As much as he was enjoying Nupur perform, Nupur too was proudly showing her talent that was hidden from Tanmay all these days.

Sooner than Tanmay's expectation, it ended and all the other students who were present there, started applauding. They started chit-chatting with Nupur while Tanmay is still sitting there like a statue with his jaws wide open. Nupur walks up from the stage towards Tanmay and with a smile she says..

N: mun to bandh karo Mr. Tanmay Sengupta


and she passes by him untying her dupatta from her waist. Tanmay follows her instantly.

T: wah…tumhe to maine jhansi ki raani samjha tha..tum to meena kumari nikli
N: tareef kar rahe ho ya taane kass rahe ho?
T: nahi baba tareef hi kar raha hoon. I mean you were great! kab se ..I mean..
N: bachpan se. humain hamesha cultural activities me bohat lagao raha to humnain shuru se hi sikhna shuru kar diya tha
T: pheww…aur bhi kuch jaanti ho ya phir…bank robbery to nahi karti na?
N: dhet! ab chalo yahan se…class me waise bhi late horaha hai.

For the day, Tanmay manages to keep Nupur's mind off the tiny issue that was bothering her since yesterday. But when she comes home and recalls the day with Tanmay, suddenly Mayank creeps into her thought again. But this time rather than sulking over it, she decides to put it aside for another time and thanks Tanmay for clearing up her mind.

Next day…Nupur is feeling her usual self again and no one is more excited to see her like that than Tanmay.

T: oh hello Meena Kumari ji…aadab arz hai
N: yeh kya meena kumari meena kumari laga rakkha hai
T: to aur kya kahe janab ko…kal jo sample dikhaya usske baad munni ya sheila to nahi bula sakta na!
N: Tanmay accha nahi hoga….poori campus ke saamne ek ladki se pitne ki chances dikh rahe hai humain
T: o baba…maaf kar do maaf kar do. I take Meena Kumari back. (then he murmurs to himself) pata chala k meena kumari me bruce lee ki aatma bhi basi hai
N: Tanmayyyy….(she starts beating him up)
T: ok….ok chalo ab.


As they walk towards the classroom, Nupur opens up the topic.

N: Tanmay…agar kabhi koi aisi baat hojaye jahan pe jaane anjaane hamari kisi baat se ya kisi harqat se kisi insaan ko taqleef pohunche per aapko samajh na aaye k kaise usse samjhana hai k yeh bas ek ghalti thee..jaan bujhke nahi hua to aap kaise kahoge usse. I mean…usse shayed bohat bura laga ho aur yeh bhi hosakta hai k uss per iss baat ka koi asar hi na hua ho. kisiko kaise pata chale?
T: hmm…to janab ko yeh gham sataa rahi hai! per Nupur tumne to aisa kuch nahi kiya jisse mujhe ittttna taqleef ho (he starts giggling)
N: o hello…yeh hamesha tum khud ko kyun khinch le aate ho beech me!
T: kyunki mere siwa aur kaun hai tumhari zindagi me jissko lekar tum itna socho
N: wah wah..khudko Tees Maar Khan samajhte ho kya? aur tumhe kisne kaha k yeh hamari problem hai! (she starts struttering) woh to ek friend ki problem hai…ussne humse jawab maanga aur hum sahi tarha se usse kuch bata nahi paaye. socha tumhari raaye jaan le
T: (stops walking and looks into Nupur's eyes) dekho…woh jo koi bhi ho jisse yeh problem hai or jisske saath bhi ho..mera manna to yeh hai k agar woh tumhe acchi tarha se jaanta hai, samajhta hai to tumhari kisi bhi harqat ya baat ka bura nahi maanega khaas karke jab woh harqat tumhare shaksiyet ke khilaaf bolta ho to. aur agar usse bura laga uss baat ka jiss baat ka intention hi aisa nahi tha then he doesn't know you at all and for these kinds of people, its not worth losing your sleep over.

He finishes his words by slightly removing her hair from her forehead. Nupur, for a few seconds, forgets everything and slowly closes her eyes as she loses herself to the very first touch of a man on her. Then again, in split of a second she gains conscious and looks away from Tanmay and starts heading towards the classroom

As per Tanmay's advise, she now knows exactly what needs to be done. That day, later in the afternoon, she goes to the lab and writes a quick note to Mayank.

Mayank,

Hum nahi jaante kal hamare iss tarha achanak chale jaane se aap kya soch rahe honge. bas itna samajh lijiye k uss waqt hum zeheni taur se aap ka iss tarha saamna karne k liye hergiz tayyar nahi the. humain nahi pata aap kya soch rahe honge…per aapki woh choti si Nupur ab aisi hi hai…bilkul apni iss choti si sheher ki tarha. hamari ek dost ne humain kaha tha k saamnewala agar aapko samajh saake to woh aapka accha dost hai aur aap to hamare bachpan k saathi ho. agar aap samajh paaye to hamari khush kismeti aur agar na samajh paaye to isse zyada humain aur kuch nahi kehna.

-Nupur

After sending the email, she lets a sigh of relief out. She thinks to herself that Tanmay is right…if Mayank understands her that no further explanation is needed and if he doesn't than its not even worth the self defense. She starts heading home wondering what Mayank's response would be.


-Neela-



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woh kehte hai rangon ki tarha dil bhi badal jaaya karte hai
asar ho aahon me to aasman bhi pighal jaaya karte hai
lamhein khushiyon ki koi kaise qaid kare ya rab…
raith ki tarha bandh mutthi se bhi nikal jaaya karte hai
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Edited by sharneel - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago

Reserved..

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Pehle sab say dedication ke liye shukriya....šŸ¤—
Coming to the update, I would say this was one of the many awesome updates. You potrayed things ever so beautifully, the hidden talent of Nupur you brought it up very elegantly. And the concer Tanmay holds for Nupur... Aur ahar main Nupur ki e-mail...
Waise toh Mayank-Nupur bachpan ke dost hai ek dusre ke baarein mein bohat kuch jante hain, ek dusre ko samjhte hain. Lekin ab aisa lagta hai ke in guzre hue saloon mein doori aur barh gaiy hai.
Aur ab toh Nupur ko ek aur dost mil gaya hai. Tanmay, jho kuch bhi kar sakta hai ussko wapis laane ke liye, apni dost ke liye. Mujhe lagta hai ab jaise Tanmay Nupur ko ziada acchi tarha se samjhta hai, Mayank bhi hai lekin woh jho ek dosti thi woh ab nahi rahi...
Aur mujhe toh aisa lagta hai jho ek muhabbat ka ehsaas utha tha woh nafrat main badal jayega.
I clould be ever so wrong, lekin pata nahin kyun ek darr hamesha sa tha.. Ab toh Mayank ka jawab ka muntazir hoon, pata nahi kya jawab de gha...
sorry if this was not the comment you expected, lekin abhi dil aur dimagh main ek he cheez hai.. Ke Mayank ka Jawab kya hoga..
-Laiba
Edited by princez_94 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
reserved!!

*edited*

hello neela, thank you for the dedication....
and I must say you are an amazing writer, the way you portrayed the progress between Tanmany and Nupur, is beautiful...
kahin na kahin mujhe bura nahi lagega agar Nupur ko Tanmay se pyaar ho jaaye, kyunki dus saal mein bahut kuch badal jaata hai...

waiting for the next update

thnx a lot for the pm

~jiya~


Edited by jiya_angel - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
OUTSTANDING ......................U should not be proud of this particular update.............U should actually be proud of ALL ur FF's ...............!!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
mindblwoing update dear......am truly mesmerized...
awesome....
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Posted: 14 years ago
hey dear please is bar mayur ko mila dena pichle bar ki trah nahi jisme mayur alag ho gaye the . ek bar to hamne unki judai seh li sayad is baar seh na paye.
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Posted: 14 years ago
hey neelašŸ¤—
OMG...you dedicated me this part..you know i couldnt sleep the whole night..kahin ap humse narz na hojayen😭...par shayed ab ap nahi hain...aur haan sach hai hume ap par bohot yakeen hain😃

now coming to the update😳

OMG...that was truly amzing part neela...surely it was surprising too...nupur can dance..well that was sure a hidden talent of her..loved tanmya's reaction🤣🤣..becahare ka mu khula ka khula reh gaya🤣.šŸ˜†...yea itni boding kyun horahi hai nupur aur tanmay me..kuch thik nahi lagraha mujhe🤢....and the repky which nupur gave to mayank..was lke nupur apni baat nahi tanmay ki zaban bol rahi hai...hmm..me too waiting for the next part😊

i still feel tanmaya is releated to mayank..will end up falling for nupur...and how can i forget those las lines...awesomešŸ‘ā­ļø

and one more thing ...you concept says....


Can you be so much in love with the hatred you have for that one person that you are willing to throw away the unconditional love someone else is showering at you?

yea someone else tanmay hai itna pata chala gaya mujhe...aur yea harted😲..mayank nafrat kyun karega nupur se😭😭...OMG..neela kisi din mujhe doc ke paas jana parega apke ff parke🤣🤣

continue soon😳
love
tasfia
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IM speechless...neela hw beautifully...šŸ˜ ...describe dem..
.u r just rockstar...seriously...šŸ‘ da letter part was really cute...luved tanmay n nupz bonding..tanmay is really sweet ..n caring 2wards nup..u r really
🤪..mindblowing WRITTER....šŸ˜

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