hey ruchi.. (is tt ur name?)
well... thanks for sending me the link..
i read ur concept and cs, and loved it so far.. but i still hav to read the parts, from the beginning and comment on it.. so i'll edit this post as i go along.. k?
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part 1...
i loved the interaction between nupz and her parents prerna and rishabh.. it just shows how close they r.. such a wonderful happy family..
i wonder what past nupz had wit mayank.. did he rag her or smth on her first day in college?
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part 2...
so y did nupz finally say yes? was it because she was afraid of mayu and what he can do?
i love mayu's character,.. angry ruthless young man.. i can totally imagine arjun in the role.. he'll be perfect coz of his ability to portray the emotions of mayu in ur ff so well.. i am still wondering what mayu did to nupz to hurt her so much... he must hav played wit her feelings or smth.. but tt's just my guess..
its also so sad how nupz slapped samrat without listening to him first.. but sammy is a real good friend.. he seems to care for her so much.. he does not hav feelings for her does he? coz i also notice tt there is no gunjan (yet) in ur fan-fic..
(ok, so for the rest of the parts, i'll comment later k.. hav some urgent last min work rite now..)
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part 3...
nupz papa seems to understand her real well... more than her mom, he is able to sorta read his daughters mind.. i liked the beginning, where though nupz mom was happy for the marriage, her dad was still able to see her pain and hesitation.. he knew there was something wrong coz she didnt seem fully happy when she said yes...
He smiled and kissed my forehead ... '' i love u beta and u are the best daughter in this world '' he said as he made his way out of the room
this part especially, was nice.. u dont get to see or even read this type of father-daughter interaction nowadays.. so sweet...😃
i also love sammy... he is so sweet, and such a caring friend.. he is willing to go against his own family (i mean mom) who he loves so much.. i love sammy's dialogues here..
''yeah...thats the worst thing in my life that i am Mayank's brother but u failed mom ..u failed to notice that girl's depressed face , tears glistenin in her eyes , the hesitaion in her eyes ...u failed to notice that ma..'' unknowingly tears started flooding from his eyes.. and then later, this too...
''and if anythimgs happens to nupur ..trust me , i am not gonna leave ur son ''
He slammed the door leaving behing shilpa
btw.. i am still wondering what is the reason for mayu behaving so rudely and badly wit nupz.. i cant stand mayu being so mean.. i dont mind the padaku and sadu mayu.. but i dont like the mean ruthless hurting mayu..
part 4...
i love sammy and even shilpa for supporting nupz and not mayu..
at first, i didnt like shilpa for supporting mayu and not sammy and nupz.. but the way she just slapped mayu and offered to let nupz go away from the house, if she didnt wanna stay wit mayu anymore was just so sweet..
i can see a gr8 bond forming between these 3..
and i wonder y mayu is this way.. so rude.. so hateful😡 (but i still love arjun though😳😆 and of course, i love the actual mayu😆)
cant wait to read the next part...
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Part 5...
hahahaha.. ok sorry, i didnt mean to laugh.. this part was quite serious.. but exactly what i suspected was their past actually happened.. mayu tried to rag nupz by kissing her and she slapped him.. and then, from tt moment onwards, he "vowed to get revenge"..
i hate mayu here😡
i can understand mayu.. he liked nupz from the start.. but he couldnt her rejection.. and then when she humiliated him by slapping him in front of everyone, he just lost it.. but i'm sure mayu will comes to his senses when he realises the true meaning of love, and truly falls deeply in love wit nupz..
the consoling factor here is tt at least sammy, shilpa and dia are showing their full support for nupz...
Part 6...
i really hate mayu here...😡
so sad tt nupz parents had to shift to delhi.. she's gonna be broken now..
and omg omg omg!!!!!
mayuuuuuuu😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡
he is so sick... i cant believe he did zabardasti wit nupz....
did he really rape her????? omggggggggggggg... no words!
(and k.. now i hav to go out for lunch, so i will edit this wit further comments after a few hrs ok? but lemme tell u one thing.... i loved it a lotttt so far... ur writing is excellent..)
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part 7...
omg omg omg again!!! nupz tried to kill herself after mayank raped her?
i really hate mayu😡😡😡 for doing this to nupz.... he actually liked her at first sight, but then had to go spoil everything by torturing and ragging her further for revenge, then eventually marrying her.. and finally the rape too.. arggggggggggggg😡😡😡😡😡😡 i so wanna kill mayu right now.. how can he do this to nupz?
but at the same time, i actually pity mayu as well... poor guy has friends like rv who instigate him to rape his wife just coz they didnt consummate their marriage yet..?!!! its partly coz of idiotic friends like rv that mayu became like this.. but at least, he's feeling guilty about hurting nupz.. now tt she tried to kill herself, i'm sure he'll realise her true worth and try to redeem himself in whichever way he can..
btw, did dia break up wit rv yet or is she still wit tt jerk?
i love dia, and sammy too for supporting nupz tt way.. sammy esp is so sweet.. he cares for nupz so much tt he can kill his own bro.. sammy is a tru friend and super nice person😃😳
part 8...
i love how dia gave mayu a proper fitting answer.. these dialogues are excellent...
Its rightly said ..sometimes soft words can damage you more than loud voices ...
i love how dia scolded mayu... now, will truly be his turning point.. wonder how mayu will redeem himself..
i like the last part.. mayu's pov is very nicely expressed...
part 9...
thank god dia broke up wit rv.. he was such a jerk😡😡😡.. and dia is just so sweet.. i love the support she is showing for nupz.. dia deserves someone much better... when is benji entering ur ff?😳😆😆😆
and finally this idiot mayu came to his senses... i'm so glad he himself told shilpa to send him to jail.. and i'm sure she will.. at least there when he is tortured so much, he will know the seriousness of nupz situation, and how he mistreated her..
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hey ruchi.. i really love ur writing style.. though u kept shifting between the pov's i was able to understand well (coz at first i thought it mite be a bit confusing...anyways...)
the pov's just made the story more interesting..
i really hate mayu, but am glad at least he's repenting..
rv is also such a jerk and doesnt deserve a sweetie pie like dia.. i am glad dia is nupz friend.. and even sammy is such a tru friend.. the way he's always wit nupz, supporting her, is just so touching..
do continue to pm me whenever u update..
i love ur ff, and will be glad to read it.. i cant wait for nupz and mayu to finally truly fall in love and start living a happy life together.. plz dont hav a sad ending for this ff, where the 2 separate...
take care ruchi
Edited by NehAditya8791 - 15 years ago
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