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Posted: 15 years ago
awesoeme update ruchi i loved it plz make evrything fine btw mayur i cant see mayank like this
thx for the pm
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Posted: 15 years ago
gr8 update
it was painful...my poor nupur😭....it was'nt fair
but mr.mayank needs a doc😡...his obssion was tooooo much ... hope he makeup for all tht he done...though it cant be....
i think he'll leave home
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Posted: 15 years ago
mayank has committed crime
but he should atleast now think what he did to her
she needs only care and love
but he should understand ruch
and i guess ab mayank achha ho kam se kam
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Posted: 15 years ago
Hey, this is like an all Indian story. Indian as in, you know. . a dominating male. . a woman who's a victim and gradually love happening and whatnot! Yeah, jeesh! I know the love thing's gonna be up next. Predictable enough and henceforth, Indian! 😆 Things are so predictable here in India, so are the stories.

What makes your story unique is they way you pen it down and the companions the protagonist in the story has, Samrat and Dia. Not all victims have such support systems with them, I am sure. And not to my surprise, men like this Mayank are so confused. I don't understand how can a man hurt the woman "he's attracted" to so much? No wonder, this fellow needs to get a life. I really hope to witness the other side of his nature in the rest of the story. REALLY!

Alright, once again - Unique and amazingly penned down! Keep up the good work. 👍🏼

I am really gonna miss you and your FF post your going back to hostel. Please make sure you keep in touch AND update.

-Kanky
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Posted: 15 years ago
Thanks guyz...!!!...I am thinking to update it today itself !!!...Seems quite impossible...but let me try ! :))
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Posted: 15 years ago
that was such a touching update
i loved it a lot
poor nupur
i am glad she atleast has samrat and dia
amazing job
love it
mahima
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Posted: 15 years ago
PART-8 PAGE-57
Hiii...
This must be a big shock for u ol ..that i am updating the very next day 😆..But i want to finish this FF tooo very soon [ hahaha...jutte-chappals on me ] but seriously guys , once my college starts i wont be able to update regularly and trust me , person slowly starts losing interst , once u start to lag behing ur updates . So i dont want to lose this time .
**My journey- just one uppdate more and itz over .
**Broken ends- 5 more updates to go ..one /two upare-neecche ho sakti hain😆 ..
**Expected/Unexpected - wel truely saying , i have the concept but need time with it
**Thorns with Roses - sorry twineee....ii'll try my level best !!
Cuming to those , who still didnt comment on m previous uppdate ..huh !! M not talking to u , unless u guys post a longg comment this time 😉
@Kanky - Watch out for this one 😉
PART- 9
Samrat's POV
I along with Dia and Nupur went to park instead of going back home . I was not sure of this idea but Dia insisted me to go for it , maybe she was right coz at home , Mayank will be there to add misery to Nupur's life .
Nupur was sitting with her body supported by Dia's , as she was not evn in a condition to support herself now . Dia and I started taling randomly just to gain her attention but it was too much we both were asking for . For entire two hours , we sat just to hear something from her , just to see a smile on her face , just to get that twinkle back in her eyes, just to reduce the pain ...but alas !!..Finally we headed home , coz Npur needed rest and evn it was not good to exert her so much .
We entered my place , and to Nupur's luck Mayank was nowhere seen . I was going to open door to Nupur's room when Dia nudged me not to do so and i looked at Nupur , who was trying to grab Dia's hand tightly ..and i understood .
''Dia , u both sit down ..i'll be back '' i asked and Dia nodded while Nupur just followed Dia to couch .
Nupur's POV
Maybe i forgot to have feelings ..i forgot realise it..i forgot !! The pain i felt now was far beyond for my words to explain but my mind was not in a condition to express anything . Evrything around seemed to come to a hault , i felt paralyised !..
I sat on the couch and could feel Dia speaking something to me but i couldnt register anything in my mind ! Not evn a single freaking word of hers ...I looked around the room , it was similar yet so different .. ! I dont evn remember the last time i let out my emotions ..except when i saw him ..HIM in hospital....My mind again started to bang , with my heart thumping each vessel of mine ... I turned myself to Dia and clutched her hand , as if trying to avoid him drag me again into that hell ..
Dia patted my back ..but it was not helping evn a bit..it was not !..His lips tearing my skin apart , biting my upper lips..his hands moving harshly over me ..everything was again back..I felt myself naked with HE on top of me . My body shivered and last thing i could register was Dia shouting for Samrat .
Mayank's POV
I was standing upstairs trying hide from Nupur ..or maybe myself . I saw them coming back but Nupur was hardly capable to take a single step on her own . They made way to Nupur's room but Dia stopped Samrat and Dia-Nupur sat on couch while samrat rushed to his room .
I saw nupur sitting lifelessly and that tiime my mind was judging me worst than a criminal . If i was not a air-headed person , Nupur would have been much better than what she was now . Her expressions were suddenly changing , She clutched Dia's hand , who was shocked as she herself was wiping off her tears . Nupur's body started to shiver and she again fainted . I rushed downstairs but Samrat crossed me and i stopped . Maybe i lost the right to evn show concern for her .
Samrat picked her up and moved to his room . Dia rushed behind them and i stood there like a big loser . Dia took off Nupur's slippers and rubbed her sole while Samrat adjusted Nupur on his bed . Dia moved out to get some water but i was standing with it already
''Take it.,.'' i said , Dia looked at me and without uttering any word took the jug from me and moved inside again . I stood on the door , witnessing , how big my mistake was ..!!!
Later in the day , doctor came for Nupur's check-up and only advice she could give was to help her move on in life .
Samrat's POV
''Dia you are gonna stay with Nupur in my room . '' samrat said
''But what about you ?'' Dia asked concern
''I'll manage ..but Nupur wont be sleeping in her room ..'' Dia nodded
Dia seemed stressed out. She was always the pillar of strenght for me and Nupur ..She was the strongest of ol but inside this tough girl was a fragile one too . Only Nupur knew her deep secrets ..i dont know what these girls talk about !!.. I came to see her vulnerable side when she broke with RV ..wel , RV was a jerk but this girl loved her . She broke down completely but , thanx to Nupur , she recovered soon . It was not typical ''give-n-take'' relationship between Nupur and Dia but they were always there for each other and supported in taking some of the toughest steps in life .
Wel , i was never blessed with best of friends except for Dia .. Mom was always busy with meeting and my so-called brother was never a help to me but always bringing on some or other problem for me . I knew Mayank cared for me but he never showed , or he was too high-headed to express it . The rift between us widened when he mis-behaved with Nupur , not because nupur was my friend but it was something morally wrong ! But alsa ..it was too late for him to realise it ...and the result was Nupur in this condition .
The day went passed like that , i saw Mayank standing next to door but didnt have the energy to argue with him anymore ..Sometimes this brotherly blood takes over me ! Dia too slept while i took couch for me .
''Samrat ...'' he entered the room while i was laying my bed
''What the hel are u doing here ?'' i said trying to keep it low
''Nothing , just give these medicines to Nupur . '' he handed over the medicines to me and turned to leave . Before closing the door behind , he looked at Nupur ..for the first time in my entire life , i saw him in this state ..maybe he changed !..but this cant help him with his crimes .
Next Day
Dia woke me up but Nupur was still sleeping . The entire night , nupur didnt sleep wel . I saw her getting up several times at night but preferred to keep quiet ..maybe interrogating her wouldnt help her recover .
''Samrat , u should get ready '' I looked at her confused '' aunty is coming back today ''
As i registered her words , panic struck me . Mom's reaction ..Mayank-Mom fight ..it was al becuming really messy for my mind to comprehend but these things are bound to happen . Nupur woke up after sometime and Dia helped her with her breakfast , while i went out to kitchen to get some juice , only to find Mayank sitting alone , sipping tea . My heart ached to see him in this condition but the thought of Nupur made me forget everything . Why are we so weak ?..When some woman is harmed , we pity but at the same moment ..we start consoling the criminal , the moment he realises his mistake !!!..Why ?..What Nupur suffered is the worst thing for any lady to go throu and still i pity Mayank !!..I hate myself for it ..i hate that very second when the thought of forgiving Mayank came to my mind !..I hate myself for being such a loser !..
Mom arrived on time and I welcomed her back
''How are u mom ?'' i asked
''Good..it was really hectic ! '' she said '' but how is Nupur ? ..Everything fine between Mayank n Nupur now? It is quite sometime..they must be on talkig terms..ryt ?' she asked looking at me with so much hope that i was almost scared for breaking that hope into pieces.
''umm...Mom ..i need ..i mean..'' i almost fell short of words
''What happened ?'' she asked worried
''umm..i need to show you something ''' i said taking all the courage left in me. I walked upto my room with mom and slightly opened the door to my room .
Mom was almost stunned . Nupur was sitting life less..
''samrat ..what happened to nupur ?'' She looked at nuupur again , just to be sure of what she saw previously . Maybe the wounds and bruises helped mom to make-out everything clearly . N my face was enough to complete the incomplete story.
Mom silently walked away from there and made way to her room.
Mayank's POV
I felt miserable , every moment i was engulfing in cloud of guilt . Mom walked to her room and i today , all her trust on me broke . Just because of me so many people suffered !!!..just because of me ..
I entered mom's room , she looked destroyed , as if all her weakness are being explored and all her strenghts are being taken away ..! Tears welled up in my eyes , i never in my life wanted to hurt her but today i took everything from her . I went inside and kneeled down . She looked at me aghast and anger shot-up in her eyes . She moved her hand to slap me but stopped in between ..
clutching her fingers together ...
''I evn hate to touch u mayank !!'' tears rolling down her eyes
''mom..i am sorry '' i tried to keep my hand on her lap but she shoved away . Mom didnt reply to me ..
''Please put me behind bars '' Mom looked at me shocked..''mom , i cant bear this guilt..please''
Wel guys , here it is !
Love ya ol
-Ruchi
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PPS - PLZ GUYS PRAY FOR SONAM DIII...PLEASE .
Edited by ruchimayur - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
hey ruchi

It was an awesome update .....I really liked the way you portrayed nupur's emotions....poor girl !
And i don't sympathize with mayank really.....

You did justice to d part.....waiting fr d next part...

Do update soon and sorry for d late comment was a bit busy and frgt ..

-Fatima
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: -shabnoor-

hey ruchi

It was an awesome update .....I really liked the way you portrayed nupur's emotions....poor girl !
And i don't sympathize with mayank really.....

You did justice to d part.....waiting fr d next part...

Do update soon and sorry for d late comment was a bit busy and frgt ..

-Fatima

Fatima ..thanku !!
I am upating nx part soon...toh stay and comment and then gayab !! Puhleeejjj

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