Baatein (MayUr) Last Part:Kahaani | Pg99 (08.8.10) - Page 13

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Posted: 15 years ago
Nice part
Really liked Maa's filmy pan n the way Mayu knw MM was jus fab
Nups relation wit Maa was jus same as Mayu
Loved it
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Posted: 15 years ago
Another wonderful update Sonam... loved the caring and loving Mayank....too sad that Shilpa Aunty has not much time left...
@Akki - You keep count on the scores.... I'm loosing it anyway...
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Posted: 15 years ago
loved ur ff
do continue soon n keep me posted....thnx
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Posted: 15 years ago
awww This is sooo sad :(

The relation between the son and mother is just oustanding and the wway Mayu cares for his mother indirectly without auntie haveing noticed is really carrinng :(

But I dutn know what aangan is? what is it?

I love ur FF...its sweet an realllyy sad, but i like it

thnx for updating soon...
cont...

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Posted: 15 years ago
awesome part..!!
really amazing..
loved the caring mayank..
the end was sad..
cont soon
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Posted: 15 years ago
Lafz


Mayank, Nupur and maa reached the hospital ... on the way, Mayank had already called Dr. Singh and told him that he was bringing maa ... Dr. Singh was ready with all his stuff and the stretcher was ready too .... Maa was immediately taken to ICU ... Nupur was holding her hand until doctor told her to wait outside ....

Nupur (sobbing) - Maa ...
Mayank was controlling all his emotions and was preparing to face maa .... Both were standing next to each other and looking at the door of the ICU .... Nupur's tears were not stopping while Mayank's face had no expression on it ..... Dr. Singh put syringe in maa's hand ... Nupur couldn't see it and in an impulse reaction she touched her forehead on his shoulder ... her tears rolled down on his shirt ... he could feel his shirt getting wait ...

Nupur - Maa ko theek kar do .....
Mayank - Nupur, humein apne aap ko sambhalna hoga ... hum maa ke saamne toot nahi sakte ... humein unki taakat banna hai ... apne aansuon ko chupana hoga ... is aakhri waqt mein main maa ki saari khwaishein poori karna chaahta hun ... unhe har khushi dena chaahta hun ... unhe nishchint dekhna chaahta hun ....
Nupur pulled herself and wiped her tears ...
Nupur - Aap sahi keh rahe hai .... par main maa ko aise nahi dekh sakti ....
Mayank - Sambhaalo apne aap ko ....

At night maa finally gained consciousness .... Mayank and Nupur rushed inside ... Nupur stood at the door as her feet gave up ... she could not see maa like that ... Mayank quietly pulled the stool and sat right next to her ....

Maa (trying to smile) - Mayuu ...
Nupur turned around ..... she didn't want to face what was coming ....
Mayank - Maa, Mayank ....
Maa - Pata hai, pata hai .... ab sach bol, kya hua hai?
Mayank (sighed) - Maa ... (he knew the time had come) leukemia ...
Maa - Aur kitna waqt bacha hai mere paas (still smiling) ...
Nupur could not bear it ...
Nupur - Maa ...
She came on the opposite side and pulled the stool; sat right next to her .. and held her hand ...
Nupur - Aise bolna zaroori hai kya?
Maa - Beta, sach ko accept karle .... tu to meri strong bachchi hai na ....
Nupur didn't say anything and softly kissed her hand ....
Mayank - 5 mahine .....
Mayank got up and stood facing his back towards them .....
Maa - Meri ek ichcha poori karoge?

Nupur immediately looked towards maa, Mayank turned to see her once ... he knew what she wanted and turned around again ... Maa understood that he knew what she wanted ... she looked towards Nupur ....
Maa - Beta, kya tujhe mujh par bharosa hai?
Nupur - Haan maa ... khud se bhi zyada ...
Maa - Kya maine tere liye kabhi bhi galat faisla liya hai ya kabhi lungi?
Nupur - Nahi maa ... kabhi nahi .... par aap aisi baatein kyun kar rahi hai ...
Maa - To kya tu meri baat maanegi?
Nupur - Maa ye koi poochne ki baat hai, maine kabhi aapki koi baat taali hai?
Maa - Nahi ...
Nupur - Kya baat hai maa?
Maa - Maanegi meri baat, banegi meri bahu?
Nupur could not utter a word .... Mayank shut his eyes as he heard maa ...
Maa - Main tum dono ko akela nahi chodna chaahti ... aur main jaanti hun ki tum dono ek dusre ka sahara banoge ..... main tum dono ko khush dekhna chaahti hun aur tum dono saath khush rahoge ... main jaanti hun .... bas meri ye ek ichcha poori kar do ... phir main nishchint hokar is duniya se vida lungi ...
On an impulse, Nupur kept her hand on maa's mouth and Mayank turned around .... he slowly came back and sat near her ...
Maa - Tum dono shaadi karlo .... meri khaatir .... meri aakhri khwaaish samajhlo ...

Nupur remembered what Mayank said outside ... her whole life came as a flash in front of her ... she owed her life to maa, couldn't she do this much for her ... after all, she won't take a wrong decision for her ....

Mayank knew that her happiness was in seeing him married to the girl of her choice ... what was wrong in it? All her life she fulfilled all his wishes couldn't he fulfill her one wish ....

Both - Haan, hum shaadi karenge ...
Both looked at each other for a fraction of second, both knew why were they doing this ... they again looked at Maa ... both were holding her hands .... she had a huge smile on her face and tears in her eyes ....

Mayank - Aap ab aaraam karo ... kal aapko discharge mil jaayega ....
Nupur - Main aaj raat yahin par ruk jaati hun ....
Maa - Nahi beta, Mayank hai na ... aur waise bhi tujhe kal school jaana hai ... exams hain na aur tujhe duty mili hai ... tu Aangan ja ...
Nupur - Par ...
Maa - Maa ki baat nahi maanegi ...
Nupur gave a faint smile and reluctantly left her hand ....
Maa - Mayank, tu ise chod ke aaja ... raat bahut ho gayi hai .... akele kaise jaayegi ... (she wanted both of them to talk to each other)
Nupur - Nahi maa, main chali jaaungi .... aapke paas koi tohona chaahiye ...
Mayank - Doctors hai aur waise bhi Aangan zyada door nahi hai ... raat bahut ho chuki hai, paidal jaana safe nahi hai aur auto milne ke koi chances nahi hai ...
Nupur didn't utter a single word after that ....

Both sat in the car, both of them were feeling very uncomfortable .... awkwardness was there in the air ... silence flowed between them ... they had nothing to say to each other ... soon they reached the Aangan ... Nupur quietly moved out ...
Nupur (softly) - Good night, bye ...
Mayank - Good night, bye ....

She walked towards the gate as he reversed the car and left for the hospital ......

Precap :
Khudaya ve ... ishq hai kaisa ye ajeeb re ...
Dil ke kareeb laaya, dil ka naseeb re ...
Khudaya ve, hayye ... ishq hai kaisa ye ajeeb re .....


P.S : Aangan is the orphanage ... and i don't know much about leukemia as I am just using it as a backdrop to the story ... so scenes and whatever I show may not actually happen in reality but these are necessary for my story ....
Edited by sonam961986 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
res...

@Jess di..Seems like my day isnt bad either!


*edited*

Ha! Lafz..kuch unkahe lafz...

Wow di...!!!

I just loved the way their silence spoke..

They understand each other...I hope!!!!!

You brought it out wonderfully di..

I loved the chapter!!!!!!

And the precap is so interesting..Who is it that falls in love..? I am so excited...Update soon!!😃

Love,
Akansha

p.s. @ Jess Di..Di.. the scores are now 13-9..😆😎🤗

Edited by ak12 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
wow sonam di ths was an awesome n touching update...😊
i cant c nupur n mayank in pain...
the way u've portrayed nupur's char is wonderful....shez so mature n understanding...
and loves mayank's mom as her own....lovely ff....
and if im nt wrong aangan is the name of d orphanage na whr nupur stays??


do continue soon!!



*edited*

heya di,

i just read lafz and its simply awesome....the emotions r so raw...wonderful chap indeed
and wow thy both love maa itna k unki khushi k liye thy agreed to marry...it's awesome aaj ki duniya aise log kafi kaam hote hai....bt ppl r der..and i said ths so coz i belive ths does happen in reality...it's just not mere fiction...ur stories have this real feel about them and i can connect to them !!

-fatima
Edited by charming.angel - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
Hi Sonam. Another touching update. Loved it a lot.
Love the bond that Mayank, Nupur and Mum share.
Please update soon.
Alisha
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Posted: 15 years ago
awesome!!!!.........loved the update!!!!........really a nyc one!!!.........do update soon!!!

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