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Suhana

@suhana.dixit

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#11

Hi Priya

How r u???

This OS is one of the best I have ever read..U know aap bahut accha likhti hain.👏👏👏👏 I was so mesimerized after reading this...😊

Raj n Suman ka pyaar unka itezaar bina kuchh kahe bhi bahut kuchh keh gaya..especially title bahut hi khoosurat tha..😃

i really love this song..Lyrics is just so beautiful..

Raj aur Suman ki pehli mulakaatbahut cute thi..Raj is really very talented😛😃

Suman ne ragging ki wajah se hi sahi par propose to kiya tha..😆😉

Shayad Bhagwanji ne unka ek doosre se milna likha tha.. 😊

tabhi to har baar door hokar bhi woh aur paas aate rahe😃

par dono ne chup reh kar bhi pyaar ke har ehsaas ko jeeya..Mann mein dono hi jante the ki woh ek doosre se pyaar karte hain par shayad unke iss ehsaas ko lafzon ki zaroorat thi..

Suman ki shadi tai hone ke baad Raj to ek dum toot gaya... phir bhi kehte hain na jeet hamesha sacche pyaar ki hi hoti hai..Raj ne Suman ke baba se saari baatein keh di aur woh unke pyaar ko samajh bhi gaye😃

Saari mushkilon ke baad bhi Suman n Raj ek ho gaye..😊

Yeh unedited version kaun sa hai??Kripya usko bhi postkarein😃

Bye😊

Edited by suhana_dixit - 15 years ago

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Priya

@pinky901

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#12

beautiful story dear

keep writing such short fics on rajeev

luv u

bye

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sania_58

@sania_58

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#13

awsome OS

loved it

aise post karte raho

superb

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ria

@ronojoy_ria

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#14

bohot he sweet haai story

loved it

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fanatic 21

@fanatic 21

Inactive

Posted: 15 years ago

#15

soooooooooooo beautiful.................👏👏👏👏

loved it completely........👏👏

d way it began and till d end same tempo was der.......loved it.....👏👏

awesome way of presenting suman and raj and also der parts in diff ways.....👏

as usual ur dialogue part is always ur plus point.....aur haan bichme aapki kuch lines jaise yeh

(mujhe pata hai ki aap sab kya soch rahe honge...RAJ...border par jo gaya tha...matlab kuch BAHT BURA...😆!!! come on guys...dis is Priya...bura toh kuch ho hi nahi sakta...aur agar kuch hua bhi toh main hun na...use thik karne k liye...)

adds to the flavour......😉😊

was it poem or song dnt know..(sry for dat)...but it was beautiful...👏👏👏

also kindly post ur unedited version as well....😛😊

keep posting such beautiful and wonderful creations by u.....😊😊😊😛

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ChhalkiSyaahi

@ChhalkiSyaahi

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: Gauri_s
very very very...angry with u di.....😡 😡 😡

tune is shot ka romantic part EDIT kyoun kiya...😡 😡 😡

tu bahat buri hai...😡 😡 😡

ab main tujh se kabhiiiiiiiiii baat nahi karungi...kattiiiiiii 😡 😡 😡

Oye Priya...mai to yahan comment karne ja rahi thi...par ye kya baat hui...kya edit kiya tune...unedited version post kar...jaldi...

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-serenity-

@-serenity-

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#17

Hiiii Priya....

Fabulous os dear 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

tune itni wonderful os likhi aur hum sab se chupayi...too bad ..thanks to guari ....because of her kasam u posted this os

mujhe iski title bahut accha laga yaar ..aur Suman n raj ki love story bhi bahut beautiful n sweet hain ....their feelings, pain every thing u described so beautifully...I loved all the scenes in this os....their first meet is so cute ...the song is so lovely,thank god raj sahi time pe suman ki father se baat kiya ..aur sab kuch tikh hogaya

mujhe sab se jyada kya accha laga is os main pata hain...raj saying to suman in the last part "main tumhe apne se alag nahi karnewala aur jinhe bhi tumhari yaad aaye"...wo khudh aajaye...awesome yaar

i think tum meri is comment ke baadh samajgayi hogi ki mujhe ye os kitna accha laga...to i hope tum jaldi se another os post karke hum ko bore karogi

love

yogitha

Edited by princessyogitha - 15 years ago

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Sumi_162710

@Sumi_162710

Rocker

Posted: 15 years ago

#18

Firstly.....sabse mast hai iss topic ka title...."Lamhein wid Rajeev"....haiii!! Main to dekh kar hi khush go gayi thi Priya....lekin padhke mujhe bada gussa aa raha tha....I mean Bhagwan ne zuban diya hai....kuch to utilize karo....par nahi....baba adam k zamane se the dono....khat likhte rahe!! "I love you"....teen simple se shabd hai....inhe kehne k bajai....kya kya likhte rahe....haath dard nahi kiya kya??

Anyways....inpe gussa karke kya fayda?? Inhone wahi kiya jo aap ne unse karwaya madam!! Ek to itna gloomy start kiya fic ki....mera to dil dhak dhak kar raha tha....in anticipation....i thought ye Priya ne kuch gadbad to nahi kar dii...one shot likhte likhte!! But however I was glad ki u r still the lioness....and they had got sum brains knocked into them!! Achha hua Raj me mohabbat ka jazba aa gaya tha....warna ghor anarth ho jata!!

Waise I loved the way their story were portrayed....like how they came to knw each other....and how they grew fond of each other!! Wo song wala portion badhiya tha....it was veryyyy unique Priya!! I must admire u for that!! And then wo towel wala chhotu sa scene.....do I even need to say wat I was reminded of while reading that??

Khair...anth bhala to sab bhala....btw I liked Raj saying....jisko milna hai wo yaha aa jaye....tumhe jaane nahi dunga....now thats like the perfect husband!! Bas tum Raj ko thodi chhuttiya bhi dila dena....bechare se kitna kaam karwate hai....apni shaadi me bhi usse waqt nahi mila....hehe. Honeymoon pe bhej dena....pls....hehe.

Chalo....ab next shot bhi post karo....and hamein thoda aur bore karo....bye...take care!!

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Sumi_162710

@Sumi_162710

Rocker

Posted: 15 years ago

#19

Edit????? 😲 😲 😲

Madam....aap ne iss shot ko edit kiya??? Ek to tumne arse baad....gauri ki kasam ki wajah se....ye shot post karne ki zehmat uthayi....we so appreciate u for this...ab isme editing ki dikkat kyun uthayi yaar??? Itna jab bore hue hum....to thoda aur ho jate....😡😡....huh!! Me very gussa...🤢

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Priya

@Sweet-Lioness

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#20

@...Gauri, Suri, Suhana, Lipi, Guglu, Yogi, Rakhi, Sumi n all (jo bhi mujhe galiyaan dene k mood me hain😆)

mujhe maaf karo yaar...!!! maine kuch parts is ka EDIT kiya hai...!!! actually aaj kal phones aur e-mail k zamane me koi kisi ko khat likhta hai kya...??? par Gauri ne mujhe ek Task diya tha...ki main is par ek SHOT likhun...!!! aur meri kahani ki suruwat toh rajeev se hi hoti hai...aur usi par khatam bhi...toh maine Rajeev par likhna suru kiya aur maine bakwaas likhna suru kar diya...hala ki natiza baht bura tha...mujhe saar peetne ka mann karr raha tha ise padhne k baad...!!!ab yeh sach hai ki is SHOT me ek romantic part tha...par mujhe laga ki kahin yeh kuch jyada na ho jaye...!!! mera dimag kuch jyada chalta hai...yeh toh aap sab jante hi hoge...isiliye...!!!

ab maaf bhi kar do...main us scene ko kisi aur SHOT me add kar dungi...agar aap log abhi bhi bore hona chahte hoge toh...!!!

Edited by Lion_Priya - 15 years ago