'Confused about the numb pain'(Part VI) ends - Page 5

Originally posted by: mahaklovesmayur

yipee this time too i am the first one to comment!

seems that i always get on the first place!!!!!

Yipeee i am khush as well dear.. Mahak it was great gettign to read ur comments first ..adn ur comments rock for sure.. they bring that every essence which i serch in comments.. gettign in to the real side of what i am trygitn to brign out.. thansk fro makign me feel this story isnt that broign ..:)

thanks to my luck!!!!!

what????????

she decided to be children's nanny??????

in his house????

why?????????????

just to be close to him????

or make him realise that she is very important in his life?

yes she made him realise a lot of things.. and some more things too which next part will tell u ..

and he thought her plan was something else!!!!

gosh his ego!!!!!!!

and when he heard that she will do the same job somewhere else........

then he agreed!!!!!!!

this is his manliness..........

i knew that would happen!!!!!!!!

no man an tolerate to see his wife even after divorce to work with someone else.......

yes men are weird they will say freedom for u and then start reacting to ur every action.. it doesnt change in most cases na.. hehe😉

so she became a nanny.....

and all in laws were confused!!

confused to honge hi..........

jalan nahi hogi use hush dekhkar???

aur woh ab to khush hogi hi kyunki ab use apne bacho ke liye time mil gaya tha..........

so swarna ne sirf apne bacho se hi matlab rakha.........

no one else.........

good.......

ab virat ko uski importance pata chalegi........

and that happened.......

so bacho ki fees ke liye virat ke paas paise nahi the......

now he couldnt share it with swarna.......

aur uski behen to apne pati ke saath ghumne jaa rahi thi......

ya when others r happy and later u realise what all u have not been able to .. hope he understnad know what where he wen twrong..that will surely be some good things comign into his mind... atleast children will haeve something good to learn from their father after that..lol..

ek baat poochti hoon main virat se.......agar woh apni behen ko uske pati ke saath ghumne jaata huye dekhne par.....ya phir uske pati ko uski behen ki achi se dekhbhall karte huye dekhta hai aur khus hota hai.......to phir woh yahi sab apni wife ke liye kyun nahi kar sakta hai>???? jab uski behen khush hoti hai to kya uski wife khush nahi hoti?????????this is called blood relation........jo aapke ghar aaye apna sab kuch hod kar uski koi chinta nahi.....lekin jo aapke saath hi hai uski chinta bahut hai.......

chalo ab virat ko loneliness ka ehsaas hua.......

ek wife hi aapki life partner hoti hai jiske saath aap saari baatein share kar sakte ho......

aur koi ho na ho.........wife hamesha hoti hai..........

par aaj virat ne use kho diya hai.......

swarna's unasked questions were the same which kept ringing in my head........

i too was thinking the same thing when virat approached her.......

swarna i chuppi virat ko ek naya sabak sikha to degi hi.........

i know that.........

what an answer!!!!!!!

swarna ab atleast aatma nirbhar ho gayi hai.......

i love her spirit........

yes woman when tested to theri limits show the strognest side and men feel they nevr knew.. its just woman didnt feel the need to brign that out every time.. they were happy even when husband played the dominant cap in the house.. they were just nto wanting it as they were satified with love for them...

I felt I was superior & dominant as I am the Man,
Bringing home the bucks I decide what is and what can
My family whom I loved through n through was hurt by u,
I took the decision as I knew u would be hurt u with what I do?

these lines r too good.........

glad dear that u liked it... sometimes they poems just come with flwo and when u all appreciate it i feel liek addign them and not deletign feelgin it will make story longer..

Virat told her he is with her when it came to kids and their life, Swarna was a bit unaffected and she said, U always promised me u r with me, and I felt u don't need to be with me, u r in me within me, in my heart in every step I took or tried in our married life. But I was never within u .. ur parents ur sisters ur nephew they always were within u? I never had that place.. I think I believed in promises and made many compromises.. u understood very well it was enough and decided about divorce... now I am sure it was enough be it from ur side...or as u feel from my side..
We won't be together, we will get separated,
I and u never could be one that's what reflected,
U had Ur priorities and u had Ur decisions,
I had my thoughts my love and some reasons...


di........

this paragraph!!!!!!!

this made me cry..........

this is spell boundingly beautiful........

i loved it to the core!!!!!!!!

plz continue soon........

as now i want to know what will happen to them now........

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid

Nice part Bhoomi. Swarna wanted to becum a nanny to her own children.....well....it was an interesting decision....in fact quite a gud one....I liked her confidence....and abt Virat....well....I just dont wanna comment. Btw, u r right....there is no sweet cute moment in the story....in fact it has a kinda gloomy subject.....but then its veryyyyy close to lyf....n so I am loving it!!!

Originally posted by: seema.mittal2

Heyyy bhoomi
I seriously don't have words to describe how amazing it was
Now her husband is understanding her value
But it's too late
Plzzzzz continue soon

Originally posted by: sun_423

bhoomi please tell me one thing how do you manage to write so well every single time.. every time you post a part, there is always something new to it... & it is the new flavor which you add with each part that adds & increases curiosity in the minds of the readers.. let me tell you one thing every time you post a part you take me by surprise, there are many fanfics which i read & for most of them i'am good at guess work, but when it comes to your fanfics i can never guess what is going to happen next... you keep it simple, but still there are varied twists in the tale... such twists which readers never imagined or thought off.. that is just too good.. & that is exactly what you have done in the Part V of 'Confused About The Numb Pain'... wowwww dear the twists was awesome.. what swarna told virat took me by surprise & i was like this is just great, it could not have been better... virat as usual feels that swarna is helpless & that's why she has told she will be a nanny to their own kids in their own house but virat has to pay her.. but then i liked it that virat is in two minds, actually he is confused he has slowly started to realize that swarna is not timid & something about her has changed...i'am really happy with swarna's changed attitude.. she is behaving so confident, bold... it is giving virat shocks.. i feel virat deserves some more shocks like this.. tab jaake he will come in line..tho now swarna has started to work as a nanny & she is calm, composed & no one can get what actually is going on in her mind... so virat's sisters also try to get the fact from swarna but they don't get anything.... i love it.. bhoomi i have a question for virat's sisters , my question is 'Don't they have their own families to look after why are they always in virat's home, interefering in his & swarna's life'... it is my advice for them that they should go find themselves better jobs... jobless people have nothing to do.. tho bas swarna aur virat kii zindagi ko tabah karne mein jute hai.. useless... now on one side swarna is happy with the life she has chosen & on the other hand virat is getting his share of hardships... this will make virat realize swarna's importance & it is happening too.. when he wants his family by his side they are busy with their own happiness, they are selfish people.. & now virat is slowly getting the point what swarna is to him.. & what importance she has in his life.. but still he has that ego which won't let him accept it... & coming to the bit where virat breaks his joint FD & swarna does not question him, this was the biggest shocker for virat.. now he will know... he has slowly started realizing the money swarna spent was never for herself, but for him, his home & his family... & these little things like he never took care of swarna, he never took her out, never gave importance to her preferences is pinching virat more... he is feeling the numb pain.. swarna is still so sweet, though virat has not told her anything she still understood his crisis.. i liked this bit very much... swarna's love for virat is selfless... & i hope virat too realizes his mistakes soon & starts showering swarna & his kids the love & care they actually deserve.... very well written part....👏 👏
please do continue soon... waiting for the next part eagerly..actually very eagerly....😊

Originally posted by: sri_4

Hey bhoomi...

great work yaar,,loves swarnas decision now virat realising his mistake,,she also helped him in FD..

lets see how it goes..

good wishes..

sri:-)

Originally posted by: mahaklovesmayur

kasam se........

mujhse zyada koi lucky nahi hoga........

is story mein maine har part ko sabse pehle padhkar comment kiya hai.........

i am so happy.......

Hi Mahak dear.... lucky me and not u na.... akhir itney world best coments mujeh miley as soon as i posted the parts.. by god mere to bhagya khul gaye hain.. Mahak after reading ur comments i alwys wodnered i have really written so nice or is Mahak so nice that she is saying such beautiful words...and i knew one thing for sure..that Mahak is very nice much much much much more than my stories ...thanks dear for ur support and kind words...

so aaj divorce ke din swarna ache se tyaar huyi thi.....

virat was taken aback by seeing her beauty or by seeing her happy?????

wow!!!!!!!!

what an emotional state he is going through!!!!!!!

hmmmmm........

so virat was confused abt what to say........

cool!!!!!

sooo these were the thoughts of virat.........

but it was not true........

he didnt even tried to know the second side of the coin.......

and he felt he was right????

nothing can be true if not seen from both the sides of the coin........

Yes, as a son as a brother he felt he was right..and when otehrs showed how good he is he was overconfident ..certainly whenver Swarna cried he didnt actually feel her pain but just felt woman crib cry and are liek that its their nature.. which is not true.. have a heart to uderstnad read them properly and nto generalise..be a partner not amere spectator..

Oh love u can see in every corner of the house,
Each ones life is a open book there,
I came into this house and observed the love,
Searched for a door to open immense love for me here?

these lines were perfect!!!!!!!

u r a grt poet..........

ur writing skills r the best i know..........

but ur poetry is best u have to know...........

Awww thanks so much Mahak.. i am glad u have liked my poems... in the story. i certainly feel I am none not a great good poet nor a writer... but only have thoguhts whom i am trygin hard to chananelise thorugh such mediums... anyways thanks for apreciateign my work.. feels good to knwo my poems enhance the reading..

swarna was right.........

she is a dutiful wife.........

and every woman has a right to take care of he in-laws..........

infact only few woman r left who bother to take care of them........

and when she was trying to do that........

what was their problem????????

why wasn't she getting the privilege of love?????

all she wanted was someone who needs to know her........

understand her.........

virat did nothing..........

his mind was already poisoned by everyone before hand........

and he never even tried to ask her he point of views...........

if he couldn't take care of her then why did he married her??????

why did he gave her the vows to be together for seven births??????

he even wasn't fit to be lived birth for i birth even.......

and u know what???????

i hate those people who never listen to other's part.........

why do people see only one side of the coin when the other one is still present???????

I guess a wife when not understood well she becomes outsider.. Swarna was too sweet... initally i guess she shoudl have taken a stand much before.. that woudl have saved her a lot of issues..ahope th efamily gets to knwo their role as well in breakign this realtionship...

so this was the reason why swarna did stayed as a nanny?????

what a strong point.........

it even convinced the in-laws........

and this is the problem with today's men.........

they can be a good brother, good son, good uncle but not a good husband....

and this was inhuman of virat to ask her for a divorce when she was expecting.......

and yes if swarna was selfish then all women should be selfish........

one cannot expect happiness without even asking........

Yes woman who are nto ready to sacrifice and bemahan are called modern day selfihs woman.. why shoudl they not be selfish i cant understnad...?? these serials have spoilt that norm.. be adarsh why?? why nto be normal... and have certain wants and needs ...

Swarna said in the end? with some pain inside her? I didn't ask for divorce.. I still loved Virat? he asked for divorce when I least expected him to. I think he hurt me enough and I lost my patience too. I love my children and they would see me broken, confused and depressed if I stay in there and feel neglected and seem just a nanny in my own house. I better be separated and stay as Swarna. I agree to the divorce and I will try my best to stand on my feet to afford the expense of my children as well.. Still my husband can give money for them in an account. I have decided to trust myself before trusting what anyone else says or does. Divorce I agree to it?
Not actually happy to end it here,
Divorce I agree to give it to u here,
Separation may help me know myself better,
Guide me the way to little happiness later..

di u know what???????

ur words made me cry..........

U never cry haan..warna next tiem sey main aise emotional story hi nahi likhungi.. i cant see my readers in tears with readign my story i cant .. chalo next story i hpe whenver i write has loads od romance and Mahak has to tell me how much she blsuhes what say...?? 😉 on a serious note i feel good that u felt touched soemwhere into the story dear...

these lines made me feel her confidence but the pain she has...........

i love u di.......

thank god virat realized..........

and atlast he showed her the pain.........

and for the first time he pushed his sisters away........

grt job!!!!!!!!

so he cried???????

crying makes ur heart washed from all the pain..........

he decided to cancel the divorce???????

thank god swarna didnt bulge in so easily...........

i am happy for that..........

i would have never liked if she had melted with some of his tears.........

ohk.........

so divorce didnt took place.........

i am happy now.......

but atleast they didnt stayed together............

and u ended here?????????

i wanted to read whether they will come together or not??????

but u did full justice to the story............

Yes i never wanted this story to show the edn what happens.. but end on a note for raders to assuem accordign to what they think shoudl and can.. its easy to say but how family willwork..how situation change who knows..??

i loved it to the core!!!!!!

this is my treat for u...........

for ur completion of a grt ff..............

aww so sweet..i am loving this cake.. need to have it..



this time i cut it down for u........

yummy.. i will have the whle thing in one bite..let me try...








chocolates for u............

wow!! mujhe waise bhi weight gian karna hai... heheeh.. i liked the dairy milk chocolate.. too..















now some cocktails for u.............

haan... its tasty water juice cold freezing.. tasty ..its delicious.. mixture.. i am enjoying thank so much have a sip alogn with me..







now some teddies for u.............
awww take a hug dear.. i love it..

sorry budget mein itna hi tha........

so ab baari hai pictorial representation of my emotions for this story as a whole..........



this story is spell boundingly beautiful.........

thanks a lot ..its all the love u have..warna hum itney bhi kamal ke nahi hain.. but lucky ot have got friends liek u around me.. to make me feel great..and loved trhough... cheers..lets dance and sing slong togetehr..


this is amazing..........



yipee!!!!! i am so happy.............


let me also sit alogn on the swing with u.. we wont fall na.. ??hehheheh
u r the best..........



the ending was very beautiful..........



love u.......
love u too dear..


i just adore ur writing style..........
I just adore the love u show towards me.. thanks a lot Mahak.. waise bhi jo khud bohat pyaar hota hai..they can spread only love and more of loev around.. just as u do




at first i felt like crying for swarna...........
jhappi from my side


but then i was very happy with her confidence..........
good so u smiling... me too smiling alogn with u










hats off to u for this story...........
hatts of to u ..for overwhelming reply and response..and to be the first to comment.. u won hands down na .. first prize for that to u


all the best for ur new story........
ohhhhh let me now think abotu it..


























































































for u..........

even these claps r less..........



hey maine to chocolates khaana shuru bhi kar diya hai..........

aap bhi kha lo.........

varna kya pata chocolotes dibbe mein kal ho na ho..........
maine khayaa yummy hai...muah..wow!!melting in my mouth...absolutely fantastic... yummy.. thanks so much... Mahak u rock ...yaar..kya tasty food to me..treat ho to aisi.. hehe.. loev u sweety for so much love n care..amde me feel special.. thanks a lot..

Originally posted by: seema.mittal2

Hey bhoomi
U ended it very nicely and did complete justice to it
It wouldn't have been right on her part if she had stayed with him
Virat truely diserved wat he got