Sirf Tum...hamesha...(RN)pt.13&Epilogue,pg.75(14/4

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Prerna

@prerna1

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Posted: 15 years ago

#61

that was fantastic
is Raj in love with Naina
but why is he then torturing Naina so much
thats rude
love the way you portray Alekh's character
plz soon

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Nisha

@dazzling_glory

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Posted: 15 years ago

#62

Update was very good.

And your idea about the leap is very intersting....College days are the best.

Raj, abhi and navin are friends now. And they keep annoying Naina by calling her bhabhiji. They know that even though raj keeps annoying naina....he is very found of her.

Naina is happy to get Alekh's support. She now hopes to get some break from raj.

please continue soon

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vvdn

@vvdn

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Posted: 15 years ago

#63

Hello Mana...
finally u updated this.n update is Fab.
poor Naina ye 3 idiots (Raj, Abhi, Naveen) kitna pareshan karte hai bechari ko
Alekh bhai ki bhi entry hop gayi...i just luved when they called Naina bhabhi n Rajveer won't mind at all . vo Alekh ko Naina ke saath bhaithane nahi de raha...is nok jhok ka toh maza hi kuch alag hai.............yoh mam plzzzzzzzz update jaldi karo.

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-serenity-

@-serenity-

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Posted: 15 years ago

#64

Hiiiiiii Mana……

Awesome part yaar…too good

Raj naina ko kitna pareshan kartha hain….….they r now in their junior college....…raj used to torture her so much but infront of elders he would act as a good friend….kitna bada nauntanki hai ye….So abhi aur navin raj ka friends hain….raj allowed them to have fun of teasing naina but a big no for physical harm….jo bhi ho raj really cares for her naina ko bhabhijee bhula rahe hain…how sweet of them…. lagtha raj also dont have any problem with that.....but naina to gussa hogayi.... naina is imagining herself choking raj….aur kar bhi kya sakthi hain bechari

raj to bahut impatient ho ra hain when naina thodi der kardi class mein aneke liye…n he orderd his friends jaao jaake naina ko dekha aao…..kya baat hain…he was scared also

Alekh is so sweet ..aate hi naina ko help karne main lag gaya..n naina thinks of him as her bro… n alekh told her that he will try his best to protect her from raj

really loved the update so much……plz continue soon….

Edited by Sanskruthi - 15 years ago

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Vertika Srivastava

@Vartika07

Stunner

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Posted: 15 years ago

#65

Sorry for being so much late mana dear.
Maine abhi padha first part of ur fic, that was really nice.
Ek shikayat to khatam ho gayi Raj k na hone ki aur first update me Raj bhi mil gaya par as a 8 year old school kid.
Ye Huda aur Shantanu bachpan se hi kameene the kya? Batao ek chote se bacche se badla le rahe hain aur us ne aisa bhi kya kar diya?
Jo accha hoga vo to kaha hi jaayega na to is me jalan kyoun ho rahi hai un dono ko? Is tarah se badla le sakte hain dono itne cute se bacche se? I hate them and wanted to kill them right then.
Vo ladki pakka Naina hogi i am sure tabhi bachpan se us ka saath degi na. Poor Raj karta bhi kya jaan bacha k bhaag gaya vahan se apni.

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Priya

@Sweet-Lioness

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Posted: 15 years ago

#66

Hiiii Mana......... 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃

sab se pahle...apna fav line bolti hun.........'yeh UD itna chota kyoun tha...???'.........!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆

yaar...concept toh tune bada mast chuna hai...!!! JC ki toh baat hi kuch aur hai...maza aa gaya sach me...!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😛 😛

aur ud k bare meeeeeeeeeeeeeee....AWESOME...aur koi word suit nahi karta...👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

yaar raj yeh toh galat karta hai ki har baar naina ko is tarah se chot deta hai...lekin us k baad chot lagi hai ki nahi is bare me bhi parwaah karta hai...haiiii...dekha kitna achha ladka hai...!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆

vaise abhi aur naveen ka use bhabiji bolna achha tha...hun...kyoun ki bichare abhi se practice kar rahe hain...aage toh...matlab 10 -12 saal baad....SHAADI toh pakki hai na...!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆

ab raj naina ko pareshaan bhi karta hai aur us k late aane par worried bhi hota hai...ab yeh is ud me jyada interesting tha...!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😉

aur alekh ki entry...👏!!! tere fic me yahi uniq hai...hero heroine pahli mulakaat se mukka-laat kar rahe hain aur har baar hero heroine takrate hain...tune toh bhai behan me takkar karwa diya...!!! matlab naina toh alekh ko bhai hi maanti hai na...!!! 😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😉

alekh ne sahi kaha ki 'raj me baat toh hai...JC me hi GS hai...😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😉!!! vaise tujhe yaad toh hai na...tu bhi toh GS hai... kahaan...??? yaad hai ya batayun...???😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😉

ek baat aur raj roz naina k sath hi baithta hai...aur naina ko is baat par aitraaz hai...??? yaar is ladki ki sach me khishak gayi hai...!!! kyoun ki mujhe nahi lagta ki koi bhi jo is fic ka reader hai...voh raj k paas baith kar aisa soch bhi sakta hai...!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆

ab raj ne kah toh diya hai ki alekh jyada tym tak naina k paas nahi baithega...lekin voh karega kya...??? 😕 😕 😕 😕 😕 😕

yaar maine ek kaam kiya tha...mere paas ek ladka school me hamesha baithta tha...jis ki wajah se main apne best frnd k sath nahi baith pati thi...!!! aur school me main baht hi masum bachhi thi...matlab aaj bhi baht se logon ko yeh galat-faihmi hai...!!! us ladke ko bhi thi...maine ek din us k baithne k 4 sec pahle vahan chewing gum laga diya tha...jis ki wajah se use teacher se use baht galiyaan sun ni padi aur baad me mere piche k ek ladke se us ka jhagda ho gaya...kyoun ki use laga tha ki yeh shararat us ne ki thi...aur us ka seat finally change ho gaya tha...!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆

le tere fic me maine apni raam-katha suna di...!!! koi baat nahi adjust kar lena...!!! ab itne chote se ud par long comment kaise karti...isiliye apni raam-kahani suna di...!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆

arre haan ek baat toh kahna hi bhul gayi...tune jis tarah se alekh k charachter ka intro kiya hai na...us se mujhe pura pata chal hi gaya ki tujhe LAXMAN aur KARAN pasand kyoun hain...!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆

ab dushre RN fic writer ki tarah late mat kar aur jaldi se ud kar...!!!😃

Edited by Lion_Priya - 15 years ago

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Vertika Srivastava

@Vartika07

Stunner

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Posted: 15 years ago

#67

Kya part 2 tha, i mean mujhe samajh me nahi aa raha tha ki Raj jaisa ladka itna harsh kaise ho sakta hai Naina jaise sweet n cute bacchi pe. I know us ko gals se problem hai but Naina is not that much ugly. Us ne Naina ko gira diya na that was not a good thing. Uper se rondu keh raha hai us ko. Naina ne bhi soch liya hai ki ab us ko maza chakha k hi rahegi.
Raj ki mom single rehti hain kya? I mean Raj k ghar me aur koi nahi hai. Us ne apni mom ko kuch bataya bhi nahi Shantanu n Huda k baare me.

Edited by Mahak Sinha - 15 years ago

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Vertika Srivastava

@Vartika07

Stunner

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Posted: 15 years ago

#68

Third part is really the cute test one yaar. Naina ko sab k sab bhabhi keh kar chida rahe hain. Ye Raj bhi na kitna tung karta hai Naina ko jaise sach me vo us ki biwi hai. Naveen aur Abhi se acchi dosti ho gayi hai sab ki i think. Ab vo dono bhi Rajveer k saath Naina ki leg pulling karte rehte hain.
Raj se galti se Naina ki nose hit ho gayi. Raj Naina ko Nain kehta hai how sweet. Naina gussa hoti hai itna Raj se, aur Raj jaanta hai ki vo us se hate nahi karti. Kitna confidence hai janab ko apne uper. Naveen aur Abhi kaise-2 gaane bhi gaate hain Raj k liye.
Jahan tak baat hai Alekh ki to Naina ko bada confidence hai ki vo Raj ko sabak sikha sakta hai tabhi us ne saari ram kahani kahi thi us k saamne. Let's see kya hota hai abhi tak to Raj k kuch bhi hone ka fark nahi pada hai Raj ko.
Mujhe lagta hai jaldi hi vo Alekh ko bhi apna dost bana lega.
continue soon.

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ChhalkiSyaahi

@ChhalkiSyaahi

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#69

Hi Mana,

Beautiful update dear. Aisa nahi hai ki Raj sau galti kare toh bhi usse maaf kar dun. But I didn't expect him to turn this nasty. Wo Naina ko torture kar raha hai aur Naina chup chap bardaash kar rahi hai. Kyun??? This is too much.

So they are in junior college now. And Navin and Abhi Raj ke saath milke Naina ko tang kar rahe hain. Raj ne usse jan bhujh kar ball maara tha. Ab toh mai wakai me soch rahi hun ki Aalekh Raj ko martial arts me hara de. I'm glad Naina has got a friend in Aalekh.

Waitig to see what form this war will take. Update soon.

Love
Guglu