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Swaminathan

@swamii92

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#541

nice one....cont soon....thnx 4 d pm

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rapi_c

@rapi_c

Rocker

Posted: 15 years ago

#542

ok read it now.. interesting to see some hindi for d first time.. (must have missed it if u used it earlier) 😛

and loved d mutters and moans on beach.. to tell d truth, i feel rather irritated when someone starts to moan before me abt their weight so i can easily relate to atul-rahul's reaction..

abt rahul..umm reserving my opinion until i see more of him..
"Kirti bhabhi are you going to watch?"
this was undoubtedly funny.. 🤣

will get back with more of my abstract thoughts later.. gtg now 😔

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sweetaddiction

@sweetaddiction

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#543

lol-- no worries- - take ur time =)

as long as the parts keep coming i tink where all happy =)

gr8 part! ! i wonder whats going to happen on the way home.

excited for the nxt part-- *grin*

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kd_luv

@kd_luv

Inactive

Posted: 15 years ago

#544

hey ok this was sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much cooler...it had all essentials the gang possess i lovedit a lot lot lot !!!!!!!!!!!! the jokes one liners leg pulling everything was really awsome ..i loved thebak home ride setting.....each of thm in one car ....night time...no street lights a hilly road awsome !!
i cant wait to read wats next !!
this part rocked ...nd u rock seriously!!!
nd dnt wory chap9 nd still on day 1 its k ....atlaest the story has moved fwd ...thts imp .....nd the characters have grown ....so its nice chill !!!!!!
waiting fr the next part ...i greww fonder !
😃 😃

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caprigurl

@caprigurl

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#545

this is such a kickass FF , icant believe i'd almost missed it!

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naureen

@Norz

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#546

nice part

like the title of this part

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MelodiousDreams

@MelodiousDreams

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#547

Shrinzie!!!

First of all, thanks for updating so quickly! I came here as fast as I could when I got your PM - that's how addicting this FF is!

The girls complaining about how much food they ate - LOL! So funny! The guys' reactions were even more hilarious, especially Atul's mock lament. Atul is SO awesome in this fic, I can't even reiterate that enough! (More on that later, though!)

I don't think I've ever come across a more intense description of choking before! That said, I loved the description! The entire Armaan-Riddhima-begun bhaaji thing was quite interesting...What an interesting way for Riddhima to get back at Armaan. The fact that he knows what she's up to made the scenario even more funny!

Ahhh, the car scene! My favorite part of this update! The entire thing was absolutely hilarious, Shrina!

Atul's "mechanical analysis" prank had me grinning from ear to ear; imagining Anjali's outrage at being one-upped by Atul yet again was just too much fun!

"ATUL!!"

"Yes, sweetheart?!"

ROFL!

By the time I got to the end of the zipper part, I was wide-eyed and entirely in splits...Atul is AMAZING! He knows just what to do to irritate the hell out of Anj, and I love it!!!

She gets riled up at every single remark of his; of course, with Atul's sarcastic remarks, I don't really blame her! The zipper thing was really a shocker, though!

I did manage to note that Atul and Anjali are pretty skilled at communicating through eye contact, which is always something that I loved about them in the show, as well. Even when she's sending death glares at him, it's quite cute. But that's just me.

Atul seems to be rather...flirtatious...I don't know if it's only because he's around Anjali and she makes him act that way, but that's the vibe I'm getting, and it's getting stronger with every passing part (he seems to love blowing kisses at her, haha!). The way he is able to push all the right buttons and infuriate her to no end is extremely entertaining, and it hints at how well he knows her, too.

"Don't breathe too much in here!! I don't want your breath polluting my air for the next few days."

"What was that Anj?"

😆 😆 😛 The nerve of this guy...He genuinely loves torturing her, doesn't he?

I LOVE you for this! I have never been more entertained in my life, I promise you that! It kind of makes me wish that Atul-Anjali had more banter-ish scenes in the actual show now! But at least I have this FF to fulfill that desire!

Here's hoping that chapter 10 comes soon!

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Reine

@Reine

Rocker

Posted: 15 years ago

#548

Shrina!!!!!!

I love this chapter!

Though you are right, they didnt really move to the second day, I love this!!!

OMG, Atul in this fic is awesome! I wish we had such AA scenes in DMG! His prank, then the air gasps, Lmao! His sweetheart was awesome! Reminded me about this stupid joke we had in our BBQ party yesterday!

OMG! I can so imagine Riddhima choking on spices! Thats what happened to me yesterday! Cant handle spices! ROFL. This is so like my life right now! Goa, BBQ party, the friends gang, I just love it! Its like a reminder of my current trip! lol But seriously, my friends were more stupid! they thought I was crying and finally lost it when I couldnt stop laughing at their reactions! Lmao

And though we didnt get many Armaan scenes, he was quite cool throughout! BTW., what exactly is begun? lol

I really love Rahul in this!!!!!! he is as cool as Armaan. In fact, all your guys are awesomely cool! Lmao what a word! I like the way you give every one importance!

AN are cute....the lovestruck couple!

AR are amazing

AA are a treat!

RM are lovely!

Still waiting for SK though. lol Wanna see how this shubhankar is

Please update ASAP!!!

Do pm me!!!! I know you will, but still. lol

PPS: I loveeeee this ff! Its amazing. More so because of the way you capture all of them, without being partial to one of them. And I seriously hope it will be the same, and you wont give more importance to relationships! I want that as well, but friendship has to be there all the way!!! I so missed that in DMG when they gave importance only to love and romance with little friendship!

Okay, I stop here! My cell is gonna die, what with all these chats and comments and what not! lol

Cheers,

Sakshi

P.S: I am not apologizing for this long comment :P

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Komal

@AshiYuvi4life

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#549

SHRINZIEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!

DAMN! I absolutely LOVED this update! I've said it once, i'm going to say it again. I LOVE the way you write AA! Absolutely LOVE IT! Especially the way you write Atul. he's a riot! too bloody good! lol.

The car scene... LOL! Seriously, guys need a life. Again, here I loved AA with the car stuff. Too hilarious!

Rahul is so very witty in this ff. I love it! lol. He asked Keerti if she was going to watch! ROFLMAO! This guy kills me! I'm totally looking forward to see what he's gonna be up to with Muskaan in the car. I can feel the liking they have for each other anyway. This should be interesting.

AA's ride... sigh. Well... surprise me! you seem to do plenty of it on a regular basis anyway. rofl.

AR... I'm afraid to see. Awkward moments?

Keep rocking it babe!

Love ya!

Komz