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Komal

@AshiYuvi4life

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Posted: 15 years ago

#421

Originally posted by: ...Aphrodite...

@ Komzie!! - Geez louise have I told you how much I LOVE your comments! Cos I really do! lol Yeh Atul just kind of got majorly insulted by the girls but I loved the fact that when he came to the devil girl he actually had the upper hand! GO ATUL! haha....
Yeh Anjali wouldn't dare admit she was comfy but I thought it was cute she was thinking it!
Oh I was pretty sure that I didin't want him all sulky for the rest of the night...that would've just permenantly killed the mood. Oh god the eye interactions were hella hard to right about because really....what more can you say than....'they were looking at each other' lol.....but I wanted them to connect with their eyes *Plays Hum Dil De Chuke Sanam's 'Aankhon ki gustakiyan'* (i LOVE that song!) lol...
Lol rightly said on the guys!
I'm glad you saw it coming!! Haha! I was trying to make it inconspicuous but I couldn't really....mehhh hopefully the fuchsia panties were a bit of a shock! 👍🏼 haha!
Poor Ridz is for sure scarred! Haha!
Thanks for the lovelyyyyyyy long comment!! Love ya right back Komzie!!! xxxxxxxxxx

Aankhon ki ghustakhiyan! I was think ing of that the whole time last night while reading! I was like omg that song and these 2! rofl! I almost even wrote I love rahul-muskaan's aankhon ki ghustakhiyan. rofl! I know I know my comments are LONG. if i like something, i think it deserves more than a "great part update soon." Trust me, I know ho it feels when that's all you get after writing so much. 😛

love ya more!

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DEVIKA / DEE

@DEE2803

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Posted: 15 years ago

#422

wow that was super ....from start till end.....every single truth n dare was awesome....epsecially nikki n atul's ones lved it....
armaan man keep ur pants on......gosh can you imagine you fancy sum1 badly n catchin them red handed with sum1 else bloody hell painful hah.....poor ridz
but i enjoyed reading it...thanks for update ...n thanks for pm

DEVIKA

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Imane

@accountband

Inactive

Posted: 15 years ago

#423

Hey, you updated!!!
YAYA....Once again this is simply BEAUTIFUL...the concept of bon fire brought back loads of memories for me...the game, the setting, the cute glances...everything was PERFECT...
This story has A LOT of potential and substance, i think whatever direction you decide to take it to, it will fall in perfectly...All the CHARACTERS have something to contribute...ATUL is HILARIOUS....ANJIE manages to be SOPHISTICATED as always...KIRTI reminds me of "Hum Aap Ke Hain Kaun" types "Bhabhi's" ABHI NIKKI are cute...ARMAAN is totally compatiable for a "Player" types role...RIDZI is the perfect innocent girl, thus the concept of "opposites attract" is always pleasing in between them..RAHUL...HMMM...I Really LIKE him...cute, sensitive, smart, guitarist, i mean what else do you want?.... MUSKI awwwwwww....she is too adorable for my words, TYPICAL GIRL types...Keeping it cool yet Falling head over heals... TRUST ME THIS STORY IS GOING PLACES...I absolutely adore it and i think it should update it AS SOON AS POSSIBLE... LOL...i am addicted to it...i wanna read more...So i'll wait till you do the next update...This comment is way too long but the praise is worth it so i'll stop here...thanks for the PM for such a WONDEFUL update...it is so much more EXCITING than hitology...LOL....
Love,
Imane...

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...Aphrodite...

@...Aphrodite...

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Posted: 15 years ago

#424

@ komzie - I love that song! I guess great minds think alike huh? lol...I'm gonna youtube that song in your memory Komzie! Oh yehhhh.....be afraid lovely....be very afraid *crazy internet stalker smile* lol....I totally agree with you on the short comments...I honestly appreciate anyone who puts 1/10th of the effort I put in my update in their comment to me....and you put in WAY more than that! Thanks sweetie!

@ Devika - Aww glad you liked the truths and dares because they sure did take long to think of! I know right?! Armaan really needs to keep it in there....I know seriously that would be so mortifying! To walk in to your crush's bedroom while he's ermm...occupied! lol Poor Riddhima indeed.....thanks for commenting and you're always welcome for the PMs lovely! xxxx

@ Imane - You commented! yayyy.....I absolutely love your comments...I know this is only your second but I really do look forward to them! lol Awww.....I've yet to experience a bonfire....it seems so lovely though! Perfect is such a strong word for me because I'm just starting out and...wow...i just never considered my work to be perfect lol....
Aww....it's so sweet of you to say that the story would fit perfectly anyway...but trust me when I say that i'll be busting my butt to make it as perfect as possible!
I tried incredibly hard to make all the personalities different. I didn't want all the guys to be like Armaan and all the girls be like Riddhima....but at the same time I did tone down their DMG personalities....Anjali's not so bitchy...Muskaan's not so annoying....Atul's not so immature.....I'm so glad you noticed!!
I LOVE Hum Aapke Hain Kaun lol!...It's no joke my favourite bollywood movie...purely for it's cheesiness!!
I sure hope that the story is going places....you're words are blowing me away! Trust me when i say that I'd love to keep updating....writing is so much more interesting than studying!!
I love the word 'addicted' when people talk about my FF because I've felt that way about books and ffs so it's crazy that someone feels the same way about Breathless!!
Thank YOU for taking the time out to comment and I hope I carry on impressing you! lol at the Histology comment!!

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MelodiousDreams

@MelodiousDreams

Rocker

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Posted: 15 years ago

#425

I read through all of Breathless just now, and I love it so far!!!

I can't believe I would have missed out on such a great fanfic!

I was laughing so hard at all of the interactions between Atul-Anjali in the story so far - their dares were so funny! Atul and his pick-up lines - my god, that was something...😆

I don't really know how to put this, but to me, Atul seems like a guy who is naive and cool and witty, all in one! He's awesome! His intro scene was really funny, too...Such an adorable guy.

Abhi's scary story had me all tensed until Anjali went "I don't get it!", at which I promptly started laughing again. Anjie is really something...Although she shouts her head off and gives Atul death glares all the time, I love her!

I don't know quite what to make of Armaan right now, due to that unexpected ending...All I can say is: "Poor Riddhima had the living daylights scared out of her...And then she saw something that I'm sure she could have lived without..." Awkward? 😕 I think so.

Can't wait to see what happens next!

~ Borna

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@Mrs.Hulk

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Posted: 15 years ago

#426

hey

shrina

awesome part sweetie.....

loved it sooooo much.........

keep continue..........

thanks for the pm...

lots of love

prinnia

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-Aicha-

@-Aicha-

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#427

Shrinz!! OMG OMG what can i say!?! You have left me speechless yet again! Wow!!! it was amazing!
You know the woman, was she supposed to be a vampire? lol i just watched New Moon and i think ive had an overdose of Vampires and Werewolves! :P haha. But yeah, wow, everything was great! oooh Rahul and Muskaan seem to have some telepathy connection! ;) and the end..i dont get it?! Armaan? in the house?! i thought that he was like stuck in traffic or something?! lol..ill stop now! haha. But yeah, amazing part and can't wait for the next! :D

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kd_luv

@kd_luv

Inactive

Posted: 15 years ago

#428

hi ....finally u updated was waiting sooo desperately fr it .....like alway it was a really fun part ...the truths n dares were gr88888888888888 .......i am soooo shocked wid wat riddhima saw .....poor grl ..wat an embarasssing ackward situation ....!!!!!!!!
like always abhi nikki r the cutest their moments r my favourite ....i am really waiting fr the time wen armaan n ridz will be caught in such a love bound equation like abhi niks !!!
shrina..this part really had it all .....
i loved it .....super job !

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prajna

@cupid-struck

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#429

hey update soon shrina

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sweet.melody

@sweet.melody

Inactive

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Posted: 15 years ago

#430

Originally posted by: ...Aphrodite...
@ Shilpuuu - Yayy! Yeh RM's little eye interactions were pretty hard to write but I'm glad you enjoyed them. I think eyes say so much and I kind of wanted to add that to the bonfire scene!
Oh my god you made me laugh with the scary story thing because I didn't get it either...just like Anj until my brother explained it to me...okay let me try my best....
You know he went to the door second time round and saw red....and he thought the people in the room must've just covered up the keyhole with something red? The girl that was murdered had a distinctive red eye....so when he was looking through the keyhole into the red....she was actually looking through the keyhole at the same time looking at him....with her red eye! Hope that was clearer! lol
Ooohhh glad you liked Atul's little routine and their little AA nok jhok moment!
Haha! I thought you would like that little Rm scene when he sits next to her...glad I wasn't disappointed lol!! Thanks for rereading it!!
YES!!! the first person that didn't see it coming!!! *Does the funky chicken dance*.....Thanks for you're lovely comment! You know I love you sweet stuff! xxxxxxxxxxx

Yes!! totally fell in love with the suttle but totally cute eye interactions!! yes! eyes speak a language of their own huh! :) hahahaha I get it now *tube light turns on* 😆 wow, Shrinz looks like u made a full plan for me to sleep with the light on lol. I can totally feel for Muskaan.. light on for three weeks.. scary stories get to me really quickly lol..
yes!! you personify AA in a different light than other ffs and Im loving that!!
haha.. no chance in me not loving that part when Rahul walks up to Muskaan, it is so cute how she is totally trying not to lose control of herself, but finding it very difficult, and him walking upto her makes that even more difficult I can imagine!
lol seriously.. that was out of the blue for me.. then again I am tube light brain 😆

Im glad we could talk you into writing a ff.. otherwise we would have missed out on such an awesome story!! which would be plain sad 😛

Love you too!! 🤗