FF: Last thing I expected - Mayur. Chapter28 Pg148 - Page 13

Hey! I am done with all the chapters and now get ready for a long rambling on them all. ;) :D

1: The story begins wonderfully - just the right mix of now and back in time, hinting a little at some disaster that has caused Nupur to lose her former optimistic self. Sonali sounds like a fun roomie to have and the bond the two share is evident. This school for children concept is cute ya! I can totally picture Nupur with kids and I bet she can be great with them. LOL.

2: I love the way this story continues from a point we can expect MJHT to end. The connections with the past - like the play or something he (Mayank) said - they add an amazing amount of reality to the tale. "Dont think about that voice!" Gosh, how can anyone ever get over Mayank? Its not humanly possible. 😳 I don't blame Nupur. I am looking forward to Neev and ahem ahem, his Dad.

3: Neev is super adorable! So like his Dad too. He only wants his Dad as a friend, adores his Dadi and is reluctant to go out in society, so to say. So Mayank got married to some other woman and she was manipulative? He isnt over Nupur anyway...I loved the way he mentally reasoned with himself about his would be reaction. This Mayank is exactly the Mayank I love and not the so-called one the show now has. He is so loving as a Dad too - I am glad you've kept it that way because intensity is one of Mayank's prime traits, be it professionally or emotionally.

4: Wow!! What an amazing confrontation! Both Nupur and Mayank's emotions were extremely well brought out - superb job there! I must say, Mayank is leaving no stone unturned to hurt her all over again. "Ogle at me all day?" 😆That was a killer dialogue dude - its majorly embarrassing to be caught staring. But he does still feel for her... he cant have got over all they shared and its evident in the way he still noticed the changes in her.. his coldness emerged more from his prepared "I will be proud" logic than from genuine feeling. Likewise for Nupur. How hurtful it must have been for her to find out he had not only moved on, but also had a child. I LOVED her first reactions - he is still akdu, wait, that is an endearing term, let me go with ruthless and cold. LOL. 😆 So did someone from college come between the two of them? Apparently, Nupur knows about the 'witch'. Anyway, I will soon find out. Amazing chapter!!

5: I am planning to enumerate all the names Nupur has called Mayank so far. 😆What did he actually do? I am getting really curious... Like I said before, Neev is SO like his Dad. His thoughts and actions are also calculated, precise and neat. Mayank gave her so much money all at once? Its party time for Sonali. LOL. He is being pretty brutal though in the way he's treating her... but I guess whatever broke their relationship must have been really severe. One of the cutest part was Mayank reminiscing over Nupur's softness, her lips, her eyes...I cant wait till more light is thrown on the truth and they get back together. :D

6: Okay, chapter 6 is what I read yesterday and now that I know the premise, a re-read was even more enjoyable. The Samrat angle is interesting too!

7: Oh God, this chapter got me really emotional. First, Nupur blabbering to Sonali about how evil Mayank was, his cold rebuke about that remark being uncalled for and even the following "Miss Nooppur" had me in a moderately detached mode. But the conversation that followed, or should I say confrontation, was heart wrenching. Seeing these two hurl such hurtful remarks at each other in the backdrop of the rain that had been so special to them years back - it was truly painful... But love has its own share of trials and tribulations and I am sure that Mayank and Nupur will find love again. That's assuming you act cupid. Wait, was this the last update for now? =( =(

This reads like a novel and I wanted it to go on.. Please continue asap. You have got me completely hooked. To say you are an amazing writer would be an understatement. You have made all the characters and their emotions come alive. I can feel the former love, now replaced with hatred and numbness. I can hear Mayank's voice and see his "perfectly shaped eyebrows". I can see Nupur's new wardrobe and enjoy Neev's intelligent little remarks. You've earned yourself another fan. And oh, excuse my rambles. 😊

Originally posted by: mjhtnupurmayank

very nice update....thnxx 4 the pm...

Thank you soo much!

Originally posted by: zoya_me

hey gr8 part.... i cant wait for the next part continue soon

thanks a ton!

Originally posted by: debby

Hey! I am done with all the chapters and now get ready for a long rambling on them all. ;) :D

1: The story begins wonderfully - just the right mix of now and back in time, hinting a little at some disaster that has caused Nupur to lose her former optimistic self. Sonali sounds like a fun roomie to have and the bond the two share is evident. This school for children concept is cute ya! I can totally picture Nupur with kids and I bet she can be great with them. LOL.

2: I love the way this story continues from a point we can expect MJHT to end. The connections with the past - like the play or something he (Mayank) said - they add an amazing amount of reality to the tale. "Dont think about that voice!" Gosh, how can anyone ever get over Mayank? Its not humanly possible. 😳 I don't blame Nupur. I am looking forward to Neev and ahem ahem, his Dad.

3: Neev is super adorable! So like his Dad too. He only wants his Dad as a friend, adores his Dadi and is reluctant to go out in society, so to say. So Mayank got married to some other woman and she was manipulative? He isnt over Nupur anyway...I loved the way he mentally reasoned with himself about his would be reaction. This Mayank is exactly the Mayank I love and not the so-called one the show now has. He is so loving as a Dad too - I am glad you've kept it that way because intensity is one of Mayank's prime traits, be it professionally or emotionally.

4: Wow!! What an amazing confrontation! Both Nupur and Mayank's emotions were extremely well brought out - superb job there! I must say, Mayank is leaving no stone unturned to hurt her all over again. "Ogle at me all day?" 😆That was a killer dialogue dude - its majorly embarrassing to be caught staring. But he does still feel for her... he cant have got over all they shared and its evident in the way he still noticed the changes in her.. his coldness emerged more from his prepared "I will be proud" logic than from genuine feeling. Likewise for Nupur. How hurtful it must have been for her to find out he had not only moved on, but also had a child. I LOVED her first reactions - he is still akdu, wait, that is an endearing term, let me go with ruthless and cold. LOL. 😆 So did someone from college come between the two of them? Apparently, Nupur knows about the 'witch'. Anyway, I will soon find out. Amazing chapter!!

5: I am planning to enumerate all the names Nupur has called Mayank so far. 😆What did he actually do? I am getting really curious... Like I said before, Neev is SO like his Dad. His thoughts and actions are also calculated, precise and neat. Mayank gave her so much money all at once? Its party time for Sonali. LOL. He is being pretty brutal though in the way he's treating her... but I guess whatever broke their relationship must have been really severe. One of the cutest part was Mayank reminiscing over Nupur's softness, her lips, her eyes...I cant wait till more light is thrown on the truth and they get back together. :D

6: Okay, chapter 6 is what I read yesterday and now that I know the premise, a re-read was even more enjoyable. The Samrat angle is interesting too!

7: Oh God, this chapter got me really emotional. First, Nupur blabbering to Sonali about how evil Mayank was, his cold rebuke about that remark being uncalled for and even the following "Miss Nooppur" had me in a moderately detached mode. But the conversation that followed, or should I say confrontation, was heart wrenching. Seeing these two hurl such hurtful remarks at each other in the backdrop of the rain that had been so special to them years back - it was truly painful... But love has its own share of trials and tribulations and I am sure that Mayank and Nupur will find love again. That's assuming you act cupid. Wait, was this the last update for now? =( =(

This reads like a novel and I wanted it to go on.. Please continue asap. You have got me completely hooked. To say you are an amazing writer would be an understatement. You have made all the characters and their emotions come alive. I can feel the former love, now replaced with hatred and numbness. I can hear Mayank's voice and see his "perfectly shaped eyebrows". I can see Nupur's new wardrobe and enjoy Neev's intelligent little remarks. You've earned yourself another fan. And oh, excuse my rambles. 😊

Oh My God. First off, I have nooo words at all on how to thank you....trust me, I LOVE it when the reader rambles....it makes the author feel soooo motivated....what can i say? lovely, lovely review, and u seriously put me on a pedestal....i tried to incorporate mayank's old characteristics into the story as I know MANY of his fans out there miss him terribly. That's probably why it seems more realistic. and Neev is actually a caricature of my cousin. Once I started watching MJHT I immediately thought that if anyone deserved to be Mayank's son it was him. lol...so a few days back when i got the idea for this story I had to include my cousin's persona into Neev.... :) and ur right, both of them havent really gotten over each other, no matter how much in denial they are...lol, but u'll find out abt the past in snippets....right now, i've got the idea for a twist in store for both of them....i'm trying to figure out how to fit it into the storyline....but pllllleeeeease continue to give such amazing reviews....it really really makes me want to make this FF one of the best out there :)

xx Kainath

Originally posted by: archieeps

Thanks for the review....yes i realise i have portrayed them as extremely bitter and cynical towards each other havent I? but in due course, the story will change....there'll be a twist coming soon....meanwhile, pls do continue to read and review!

Originally posted by: Bollywood_chic

u may have written it as such but do cont soon.

should i expect and updte tonight?? plzz

hey, tonight might be hard, coz i've got some work to do, moreover i'm trying to figure out how exactly to frame my nxt chapter.....but by tmr it should be updated :)

Wonderful part yaar... but aur kab tak ladte rahegay..
Cant see them like this.. :(

keep updating, i guess am really addicted to this ff... must say very well written.

Originally posted by: bronze12

Wonderful part yaar... but aur kab tak ladte rahegay..
Cant see them like this.. :(

Still keep updating, i guess am really addicted ti this ff... must say very well written.

Hey, thanks a lot for the review....awww, i'm really sorry lekin thodi der ke liye thoda aur tolerate karna padega....but something's going to happen...which draws them closer or further apart? u'll just have to read to find out!