the forces of dharam veer

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Posted: 16 years ago
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sorry about the long name šŸ˜† u can call it supernatural dharam veer😊

Okay no need to tell me that my Ffs are getting weirder by the minuet!

Intro:
"veer tumhe apne taaqaton ka galat istimaal nahi kar nahi chahiyeh " (dharam)
"dharam, maine akree baar galat istimaal kab kiya tha" (veer)
"ajj subah (folded his arms) šŸ˜†" (dharam )
"par dharam voh rajkumari sia buhut batameez voh bichari toh apna kaam karre thi aur voh sia ne" (veer)
(he remumbered what happend):
Veer was walking in the afternoon, hearing chirping birds the blooming flowers and the beautiful blue sea.. Then he heard a voice which blocked the beautiful melody of the birds ..it was coming from near the sea..
"TUM DEKH NAHI CHALTE, HUMARE RAASTE KE BEACH MAIN ANNEE KE KYA ZAROORAT?" (sia)
"ji rajkumari" (a shramik gal)
"CHUP HO JOA, TUM CHOTE LOGON HUMARE BADE LOGON KE SAAMNE ANE KE HIMMAT HE KAISE HOI? HUM VOH RAJKUMARI HAI… " (sia)
"jise zada batameez aur ghamndi ladki kisine nahi dekha hain " (gal)
"TUMHAARE ITNE HIMMAT…" (sia)
"ke tumhare jaise batameez aur ghamandi rajkumari ke saamne apni awaz uthai, isme himmat ke koi zaroorat nahi hai " (gal)
They went on and on..
"kitne batameez hai sia!?" (veer to himself)
But he lost his temper sia raised her hand.. He raised his hand as so the ocean raised, whatever he did with his hand the ocean copied.. He made a wave like as so the ocean which at end perfectly landed on sia..
Dharam came… he glanced at veer angrily.. Veer was giggling..
"rajkumari ji (ran to her) uthiye " he reached out hi hand.. (dharam)
The girl bowed her head..
"ji yuvraaj hum.. Hume shama kijiye.." (gal)
"tumhaare galte nahi hai jao kaam karo apna" (dharam)
As the girl was leaving veer… had an urge to know who she was, all he could see was her black silky hair..

šŸ˜› Okay guys LOL na .. anyway veer controls water you can see that… you'll se later what shera controls and what dharam..but still there are alot of twists and turns.. and i mean alot šŸ˜› and yes the parts are reallly loooooooooooooooooooooong... šŸ˜†


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Posted: 16 years ago
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wowie...awesm girlie..
Hmm lemme tell ya tht em a water person..Love the prt of V controlin the waters n tht description..
Lolllzzz Sia ko chanta pada..awww..N Dharam helped her...
hmm Shera...Does she control Fire..Nop Air..Earth..wht does she controll....
jaldiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii batao...
N yes thnx for the Pm btw why r u closin tht FF..Eternal Love...Plzzzz dn't usmein VS r chooo damn chweeetttt..LOve tht FF...
Hmmm n abt getting wierd..Well U n me r sure wierd so our FF's need to be like tht na...
Buh tis is awesum huh...
Do cont asap....
Love ya loads hala dear.....t.ccccccc
-Ur's Ever Madhu😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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mazedaar dear
so gr8888888888

do continue
yaar veer nahin sudeherga

bye sumi
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Posted: 16 years ago
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oh wow dear
plz cont
its gr8
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Posted: 16 years ago
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thanxx alot i;;ll surely continue
Edited by 090909as - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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heyyy
verrryyy interesting intro... pls continueee
love ya
ashah
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey i made siome trailers .. part 1 is coming tomorrow:
love trailer: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SS5n6QnSaFQ&feature=channel_page
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Posted: 16 years ago
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at last some net so i can post!!!



Part 1:
Back:
"par veer tumne ek shramik ke liye humare khaas mehmaan pe paani uchal deya" (dharam)
"dharam agar main uss shramik pe paani uchaalta toh kya tum mujhe daatehte ?" (veer)
"nahi bilkul nahi" (dharam)
"aur tum sochte ke har din aur bhagi shramik kyun badte hain" (veer)
"veer.." (dharam)
"mujhe kuch nahi sunna hain " (veer)
He said with aloud voice.. He stomped his way to his room..
He sat on his silky bed in the gorgeously furnished bedroom.. deep in his thoughts looking quite disappointed..
A woman in a white lehenga joined she too sat on the silky bed.. veer putted his head on her lap.. She started caressing his cute brown hair..
"maa kya sab aryavrat bure hain" (veer)
"beta jisne bhi aapse yeh kehaa voh bl]ilku galat hain, aap shramikon ke saath kitne achai se peash aate hain khaas kar ke" (nivi)
"pari maa aur bache" (veer)
Veer really loved the kids.. and pari maa of course who always helped him.. Veer felt too lucky to have two mums..(veer isn't a shramik but he is kind of a messiah to them)
"veer, agli baar hume hamari baath puri karne dejiega " (nivi)
" teakh hain maa" (veer)
"par aap jai bhaiya aur sia ka bartav deakhye har aryavrat ek jaisa nahi hota hain " (nivi)
Veer gets up and hugs her..
"maa aap kitni achi hain" (veer)
"haan, par app bilkul ek Badmaash hain.. Chaliye jaiye" (nivi)
"kahaa?" (veer)
"pari maa ke saath khane ke liye ajj ravivar hain" (nivi)
"maa apne toh yaad diladia varna pari maa mujhe maar dalte" (veer)
Nivriti smiled as her son left she never felt bad about sharing her only son with pari.. Veer an aryawrat but Veer really loved the shramiks…but the king and jai.. They never accepted that fact.. Jai never.. But arya did wanted veer to be happy.. But he knew rules are rules…but he didn't know that UNFAIR rules are meant to be BROKEN..
The main shramik baste:
Veer was walking watching the same old… men were complaining women were taking care of their children.. Veer passed a boy not so older then him.. The boy bowed his head.. Veer smailed from his chin he adjusted his head as it was:
"main insaan tumhaare tare miti se bana hoon aur miti main katam hoonga tumhare tare"
Then veer went he took his normal route but when he didn't saw pari maa at the place she used stand there with a plate of food.. He asked some men:
"pari maa kha hain?" (veer)
"ji unki tabiat buhut karaab thi toh unhe sakshi ne vaid ji ke paas legaye hain" (man)
Veer was depressed but he couldn't go to the vaid he promised the kids he'll bring them presents…
He continued..
"voh dekho veer bhaiya!" (a lil boy)
"veer bhaiya … veer bhaiya" (kids)
All the kids ran to him, he bend down on his knee he hugged all of them.. He turned his head for a moment..
He saw an elderly man shivering from the cold of that night… veer reached out for the warm wool shawl Nivriti gave him.. Without hesitation he stood up and putted the shawl on the man's shoulders.. He smiled.. And went to give the gifts to the children..
After some time he was tiered he didn't eat dinner… he went and sat .. with the sea facing him and in front of the sea there was a well and a girl who was bringing water, the girl was facing veer with her back.. But veer instantly knew that she was the same girl who stood up to sia.. Veer leaned to see her face (like that's gonna help) no matter what he tried.. He couldn't see her face , just then the girl turned.. In the same moment a warm breeze flew through veer's brown thick hair … he closed his brown eyes .. He opened them.. revealing her black ebony eyes .. Her straight black hair, her lush cherry blossom lips… her cute little nose, her baby smooth milky white skin.. Without a single blink he looked at her… waiting to hear her sugary words… her every word which sounds like a prayer to love..
"aree ananya beta jaldi karo.." (the man who he gave the shawl too)
"ji dada ji abhi arre hoon" (ananya)
She ran toward the man who veer gave the shawl to.. He saw ananya quickly readied some hot water and gave it to her grandpa..
"veer bhaiya" (a lil girl)
Said a girl bringing veer back..
"apko savri bulari hai" (girl)
"theakh hai radha .. Savri main abhi araa hoon' (veer)
Veer got up and ran toward the girl who was calling him
But radha stood in her place…
"kya hua radha?" (a boy..)
"mujhe toh kuch nahi hua hai Krishna par shayed veer bhaiya ko hogya hai" (radha)
"kya?" (krishna)
"vohi" (radha)
"nafrat?" (krishna)
"pyaar aur veer bhaiya ko nafrat karna nahi ataa hai" (radha)
"kisse?" (krishna)
"ananya didi se" (radha)
"mujhe poora yakeen hai ke pyaar namke cheeze hote he nahi.. Waise tumhe aisa kyun lakta hain? " (krishna)
"chuki voh dekho.." (radha)
She pointed to veer who wasn't exactly playing with the kids.. He was staring at ananya…
"arre voh nay hain isliye, unhi usse pehle nahi dekha tha toh ab dekhre hain" (krishna)
"lagi shart? " (radha)
"lagi shart" (krishna)
"tu dekhna Krishna bhaiya didi se pyaar karte hain" (radha)
"voh toh pataa chalgaiga" (krishna)

"arre savri sunu" (ananya)
"ji ananya didi" (savri)
"voh rajkumar veer kahan hain?" (ananya)
"voh"(savri)
Ananya saw the royal prince who was showing toothy smile which somehow was attractive to her..
Ananya went to her house grabbed a plate of food… and went to the prince.. Who was getting very hungry…
Veer was sitting on a long marble (like the one when they got stuck with the khazana) ananya sat besides him, veer looked at her… and she was dipping the roti in the sabzi.. She raised her hand.. And gave it to veer.. Who wasn't ready to eat..
"pari maa ne kahaa hai ke aap ka acha se acha khayal rakhna hai" (ananya)
Veer opened his mouth letting her feed the first bite of food..
Not so far from them.. Radha and Krishna were watching …
"dekha aaj veer bhaiya ne jo khaane ka ek nivala Nivriti maa ya pari maa se kaateh thee aur unke siva kisi se nahi ajj vahi veer ne pehla nivala apne pyaar se khaya " (radha)
"radha abhi toh kuch bhi nahi hua.. Hai dekhna bhaiya kise ladki se pyaar nahi karenge" (krishna)
"toh kya gaye bel se pyaar karenge " (radha)
Not amused the boy turned to the other side… watching what will happen next
When the food was done.. Ananya got up and brought veer a glass of milk… she remumbered when her grandpa told her how pari used to make veer drink milk…
"nahi maa mujhe dood nahi peena hai" (veer)
"tum dood pi kar rahoge" (pari)
"nahi" (veer)
Veer was running around from his mother.. He even was more childish then the rest of the kids…
"arre shaytan kahaa ja raha hain agar tu yahan nahi ayaa tu main tujhe buhut marongi" (pari)
"saari mao ko mere pitaay karne ke kyun sochte hain" (veer)
"arre veer.. Tu yahan ataa hain ke.. Main yeh dood harsh ko pilado " (not the harsh from the show) (pari)
"kya?!" the running prince stopped.. (veer)
"haan harsh toh mere har baat sunta hai" (pari)
"dekho maa agar apne harsh ke paas bhi gaye… toh main uss harsh ko mardaloonga" (veer)
"arre harsh beta yahan ana toh" (pari)
Harsh was a boy sitting with the group of other boys..
"ji maa" (harsh)
Veer ran toward his mother preventing harsh from getting any closer..
He took the milk and drank the whole glass in one go… after that he took out his tongue and pointed it to harsh.. And hugged his mother who secretly gave another glass of milk to harsh..
Back:
Ananya smiled .. Her grandpa always told her the happenings of the basti ..that was the best on yet..
Ananya went and sat on her knees to give him milk.. But he was still refusing.. Ananya opened his mouth by grabbing his ear..
""ahhhh" (veer)
Ananya quick preventing his mouth from closing and made him drink the whole milk…
Veer made an irritated face.. Ananya giggled..
Veer had to go now… he said bye to all the kids..
"veer bhaiya aap agle ravivaar ko zaroor aynge na?" (kids)
"haan haan" (veer)
Veer went waving to all the kids…

In the palace:
"rajkumar.. App kahaa gaye thee" (raj mantri)
Veer who has just entered the place says with full rudeness "shramiko ke baasti main" (veer)
"aapse kitni baar kaha ke un logon se door rahye" (raj mantri)
"mujhe unse door nahi rehna" (veer)
"yeh nirne aap ka nahi" (mantri)
"par yeh zindigi mere hai" (veer)
"aap humse istraa kaise baath karsekte hai" (mantri)
"moo se" (veer)
"RAJKUMAR!" (mantri)
"AWAZ MAIN BHI UTHA SKTA HOON!"(veer)
"dekhye Maharaj .." (mantri)
"apni maa kam padgai thi ke app Maharaj se mere shikayat karne lage!! " (veer)
"veer apni kamre main jao" (dharam)
"dharam! Main aaj kahin nahi jaunga aaj mujhe jaana hai ke kyun raj sabah mujhe kyun shramiko se milne nahi deete" (veer)
"veer, voh shramik tumhara istimaal karnge" (jai)
"jai mama, agar asai hota toh aap un shramikon ka istimaal tabse kare jabse aryangar bana hai, batai mujhe raj mantri kyun nahi main unn shramikon ke paas nahi ja sakta hoon" (veer)
When he raised that point everyone was silent..
Veer stomped his way to the sword practicing area..
Veer was practicing with great effort.. Remembering how the raj sabah always scolded him.. ..While he was doing so.. He hurt himself ..
After a while he went out of the palace with no intention to sleep.. Or be sorry for what he said earlier…
He walked with a badly bruised arm with ruby red blood flowing from his arm.. And some tears escaping his eyes… and his sword in his left bloody hand …
"agar kanoon ke itni parvaah hai toh kyun rab ke kanoon plan nahi karte" (veer) he mumred as he walked through the deadly cold night…
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Posted: 16 years ago
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woww...
verrrryy interesting!!!
good thing u didnt make veer a shramik.... i loved the way he took care of everyone and the way u described ananya and veera scenesss
plssssssssssssss update soooonn....
love ya
ashah
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow dear
its too good
plz cont soon

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