Tose Naina Laage(RN)..Part 6 @ Page 17 24/02/10 - Page 10

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Posted: 15 years ago
#91
loved this part....i m waiting ki jab raj ko pata chalega ki naina hi nazar jaan hai to kya hoga...i hope vo usse galat na samjhe....i loved the cast of this fic......plzzzzzzzzzzz update sooooooon and yes "mere jeevan saathi" ko bhi update karo...i dnt even remember kitne mahine ho gaye....plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
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Posted: 15 years ago
#92
Hello anu
hope ur doing good😊
Cool update anu👏
yup u keep on bringing twist pe twist (heheehehehh)😆
lots of confusion and misunderstandings but its good that suniti is over Raj now.😊
Raj is very considerate and a good friend😊😳
I hope suniti and devraj ek dusre ko samjh jain .although given the circumstances and devraj's nature pata nahin kiay hoga.😕
Finally ab raj ko pata chal jae ga k naina kaun hai .
hmmm suspence suspence aur twist pe twist (heheheh)😆
waiting eagerly for the next part 😊
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Posted: 15 years ago
#93
nice update...!!!!..liked the concept..
waiting for raj naina's meeting at 'mehfil'..but poor naina...she will hv to dance n raj use aise dekhega..raj ko abb uski asliyat pata chalegi.. 😒
waiting for the next update.. 😊
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Posted: 15 years ago
#94
hi dear
really nice part
raj was really nice and different from others..........just love him
waitng 4 the next part............where naina has to dance and raj will see it..but waiting to see his reactions to see naina like dat
great work
luv preet
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Posted: 15 years ago
#95
hey that was so cool
plz continue soon
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Posted: 15 years ago
#96

Too good!!!!Awesome!!!!!

Raj is happy to have finally found the girl and now he knows her name!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊

But the sad part was she did not say anything and so now he does now know whether she is angry or not!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔

Naina was avoiding Raj but when he comes in front of her her feelings are in a turmoil!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊

She realised that Raj is true to all the promises he had made to her and thinks how can anyone be so good??😛 😛 😛 😛 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Naina has fallen deeply in love with Rajveer!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

Jayanti regrets the fact that Roop had complained to her family members and gotten Roop married far away from there!!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡

However both Roop and Jayanti know the fact that Raj is different from his brother and father!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊

For Radheer's wild lifestyle Roop and Jayanti both blame each other for not keeping him in control!!!!!

Roop wanted to get back at Jayanti and thereby broke her dream of making Suniti the Chhoti Bahu of this family!!!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆

Poor Roop!!!! She is truly unhappy but atleast she protests against it and refuses to believe that this is right!!!!! 😔 😔 😔 😔

Roop wants Jayanti to tell Raj to get himself transferred as she had gotten reports of Raj and Suniti being close to each other!!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲

Devraj keeps scaring Suniti and she just wants to run away!!!!!

Onday Devraj brought Raj there and Suniti was shocked!!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲 😲

Raj is sad to see Suniti's condition and thinks even Suniti has the same sorrow as Roop!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔

Raj is really sweet and feels for his bhabhi and now for Suniti too!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Suniti told Raj all her problems and also about Nazar Jaan but Devraj no longer goes there!!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj is very considerate and a good friend!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏 👏

He gives his all time advice of never to leave the battelfield and go!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼

Suniti also told Raj about how she had always loved him from childhood and Raj told her to grow up and move on with time!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj told her to take the first step and try and things will be alright!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼

He hugged her comfortingly but was unfortunately seen by that servant sent by Roop who misinterpreted it!!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 😒

Suniti is over Raj and has now fallen for Devraj!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊Thats great!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊

I hope they soon confess thei love for each other but knowing Devraj God knows aisa kab hoga!!!!!😕 😕 😕 😕

Naina has to dance this time as well and Raj will see her!!!!!!! Poor Naina!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭

Raj pe bhi pata nahi kya beetegi!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 😔


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Posted: 15 years ago
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@ nisha1984

Thanks,as I am getting new readers day by day.

@ rituka7

Thanks for the comment.

@ sumaiya wahid

Raj will find Naina soon..don't worry.

@ vvdn

Intezar k lia shukria..

@ sania_58

Thanks..actually time pachhina..update lekhaar..deri hochhe..jaani..but I can't help it.

@ sea_nyx

Keep faith on love,everything will be fine.

@ kads_8302

Devraj ka ilaaj jaldi ho jaayega..I am fine..keep reading..

@ rajeev fann

Mere Jeevan Sathi ko toh lock kar dia hai adult content k ground par..I can't do anything..

@ digimon_pokemon

Twist ..aao twist kare..that is my agenda..

@ sweet_shona

Hoga..aisa hi hoga..kyaa kar sakte hain..kahani ki demand hai..

@ preet09

Wait for the update.

@ prerna1

Thanks for the comment,keep loving my fic.



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Posted: 15 years ago
#98

Originally posted by: Shaina_b

Too good!!!!Awesome!!!!! ==Thank you..

Raj is happy to have finally found the girl and now he knows her name!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊==Khush hona hi chahie..

But the sad part was she did not say anything and so now he does now know whether she is angry or not!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔==Pata chal jaayega..waqt aane par..

Naina was avoiding Raj but when he comes in front of her her feelings are in a turmoil!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊==Naturally..

She realised that Raj is true to all the promises he had made to her and thinks how can anyone be so good??😛 😛 😛 😛 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳==Shak toh hoga hi..OTI BHOKTI CHOR AR LOKKHON..

Naina has fallen deeply in love with Rajveer!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️==Pyar toh hona hi tha..

Jayanti regrets the fact that Roop had complained to her family members and gotten Roop married far away from there!!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡==Saas logon ka nature aisa hi hota hai..

However both Roop and Jayanti know the fact that Raj is different from his brother and father!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊==Fact hai yaar..

For Randheer's wild lifestyle Roop and Jayanti both blame each other for not keeping him in control!!!!! ==Saas Bahu ka typical jhagda..mera beta/mera pati teri wajah se bigda..

Roop wanted to get back at Jayanti and thereby broke her dream of making Suniti the Chhoti Bahu of this family!!!!!😆 😆 😆 😆 😆==Aurat..teri yehi kahani..

Poor Roop!!!! She is truly unhappy but at least she protests against it and refuses to believe that this is right!!!!! 😔 😔 😔 😔==Jaag Bhartiya Naari..

Roop wants Jayanti to tell Raj to get himself transferred as she had gotten reports of Raj and Suniti being close to each other!!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲==Roop Bond..

Devraj keeps scaring Suniti and she just wants to run away!!!!! ==Bhagam Bhaag..

Oneday Devraj brought Raj there and Suniti was shocked!!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲 😲==Devraj sankhi hai..

Raj is sad to see Suniti's condition and thinks even Suniti has the same sorrow as Roop!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔==Kahani ghar ghar ki..

Raj is really sweet and feels for his bhabhi and now for Suniti too!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊==Haan..uski apni shadi nahi hui..agar hoti toh samajhta k Patni dwara peedit Pati bhi hote hain..

Suniti told Raj all her problems and also about Nazar Jaan but Devraj no longer goes there!!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊==Good News.

Raj is very considerate and a good friend!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏 👏==Hero ho toh aisa..

He gives his all time advice of never to leave the battlefield and go!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼==Hee hee😆

Suniti also told Raj about how she had always loved him from childhood and Raj told her to grow up and move on with time!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊==Jeevan ka yehi niyam hai..

Raj told her to take the first step and try and things will be alright!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼==Raj khud bahut pahoocha hua hai first step lene me..

He hugged her comfortingly but was unfortunately seen by that servant sent by Roop who misinterpreted it!!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 😒==Naukranian isi lia hoti hai..

Suniti is over Raj and has now fallen for Devraj!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊Thats great!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊==Haan..Raj aur Naina ka rasta saaf..

I hope they soon confess their love for each other but knowing Devraj God knows aisa kab hoga!!!!!😕 😕 😕 😕==Bahut jald..

Naina has to dance this time as well and Raj will see her!!!!!!! Poor Naina!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭==Typical filmy..

Raj pe bhi pata nahi kya beetegi!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 😔==Raj bahut dumdaar admi hai..samhaal lega..





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Posted: 15 years ago
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PART 5


Mehfil saji hai..har taraf roshni hai..parde k peechhe haveli ki auratein hain..aur saamne baithe hain haveli k mard aur mehman log.Gaohar Jaan ki ladkian mujra pesh kar rahi hain..table ki awaz..sarengi k sur ,ghungroo ki jhankaar,mehfil kaafi garam hai.

Captain Khanna,Captain Chaudhury aur Lt.Sodhi ek saath baithe hain.Raj baitha hai Devraj k saath.

Aise me hua dhamaka..ek saji dhaji ladki ghunghat daale mehfil k beecho beech aai..ek naye geet par woh naachegi..sab log zara chaukanna hue..kaafi baatein hone lagi.Devraj ne apne Diwan ko ishara kia..

Diwan uth kar khada hua aur bola ,"Aaj is mubarak mauke par,aaj ki is mehfil ki raunak aur badhane..aaj ki khaas pesh kash hain woh jinki taarif toh aap sab ne suni hogi,jinke likhe hue geet ka charcha is shaher me hota rehta hai aksar..aaj wahi humare saamne unke hi likhe hue geet par nritya pesh karengi..toh ummeed hai sab ko pasand aayegi.. pesh hai Nazar Jaan.."

Mehfil me awaz uthi.."Waah waah.."

Raj bhi chaukanna ho gaya..Devraj ne kaha ,"Kyaa hua ?"

Raj ne hans kar kaha ,"Yeh intezam kya humare honour me kia hai aapne?Is Khatun k charche main jab se yehan aaya hoon,tab se sun raha hoon..Officers Mess me ek hi naam,Gaohar Jaan ki Jaan ,Nazar Jaan..waise khud hi gaayengi ya .."

Dev--Dekhte jaaiye..


More ghar aaye ho baalam..kuchh aise k raat me sooraj aa gayo..

Tohre najar utaar le sitaare..aur chand bhi puri tarha jaage..

Mohe lage k more najar ki najar tohe lag jaaye ,jab tose naina laage..

"Waah..kyaa baat hai..jeeo Nazar Jaan..".
.mehfil me aisi shor uthi..par Nazar Jaan ki ghoonghat nahi hati uske chehre se..

Saawan k jhoole me mann na bhaaye..haar shringar par mann na jaaye..

Kaa karoon..na samajh paaoon..kaa kahoon..tohri vaani aisi meethi ..tohri thitholi aisi khatti..

Tohe dekh kar laage..k jo mann hi mann likhi kabhi..tu hai wahi pardesi chitthi..


Mann maa aisan toofan uthe ,k mori saanse teri or bhaage..

Kaise nazre churaoon baalam,jab tose naina laage..


"Kyaa baat hai..",taalion se mehfil aur gunj utha..

Ab table ki taal aur tez hui,ghunghru ki awaz bhi..Raj dhyaan se gaana sun raha tha... chehra nahi dikh raha hai..

More jeevan ki sune bagian me aisan baahar ban kar tu aaya..

Preet k rang se mori kori chunaria tune yuh rangaya..

Ab jahan tu jaaye chaloon tohre peechhe,bas tu chal more aage..

Ankhion me mori ujala ho jaaye,jab tose naina laage..


Ab utha ghumta..Nazar Jaan k chehre se..jiska intezar sab ko tha..sab k saamne Nazar Jaan aayi..aur muskurai..mehfil ki roshni aur badh gayi..

Sodhi--Arre waah..aaj ka din toh safal ho gaya Sir..

Chaudhury--Yes.You can say that..

Khanna--Nazar Jaan k geet usiki zubani..aur uska naach..bhi dekh lia..kyaa bijli hai..yeh Devraj Rana bhi dildaar admi admi hai..humari shaam aisi rangeen bana di..Shekhawat ko dekhiye..bahut bade bol sune the..uske..ab dekho aankhe faadh k dekh raha hai Nazar Jaan ki taraf..


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Raj..aisi koi baat nahi hai..asal baat toh yeh hai k..main aur woh..aaj tak..

Koi doosrie aurat?

Doosrie aurat ki wajah se hum dono me doorie nahi hai..bal ki is doorie k hi wajah se hi ek ..par ab uske paas bhi nahi jaate..

Kahan ki hai woh aurat?

Nazar Jaan..

Gaohar Jaan k kothe ki?

Haan..



Suniti se hui inhi baaton ko Raj yaad kar raha tha..Nazar Jaan..Gaohar ki kothe ki ladki.. Devraj ki rakhail..Raj k dil par beejli geeri..aur sar par geera aasmaan..Naina..Nazar Jaan..tabhi..humesha Raj ko dekhte hi bhaag jaati thi..Devraj ki wajah se..par us raat ki baat bhi Raj ko yaad hai..jab do jism ek hue..tab toh yeh baat samajh me aai..k ladki kunwari hai..fir Devraj k saath iska rishta kyaa hai?

Dunia jahan jaaye jahannam me..Raj sharminda tha khud par pahle se hi..par ab gussa aaya khud par..zindagi bhar jisse bhaagta raha..wahi uske saath hua..ek kothewali..ek rakkasa..

Jisko dekh kar Raj ki yeh haalat thi..uski aankhon me koi jhijhag nahi thi..uski aankhe bahut kuchh keh rahi thi..yehi keh rahi thi k..

Meri taraf aate hue apne kadam rok lo..is raah k naseeb me manzeel nahi hai..jo tumne samjha main woh nahi..us raat main mar kar is zindagi se raahat chaah rahi thi,par tumne mujhe zinda rakha..shaayad is jahnnam me jeena hi meri taqdeer me likha hai..is keenchad me mat aao..sivaaye badnami aur musibat k aur kuchh haasil nahi hoga..


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Khana peena shuru ho gaya tha..Raj aur uske fellow Officers k lia intezam khaas hua tha.Suniti khud unki dekh rekh me thi..Officer logon ko pata chala k is khandan se Raj ka kitna kareebi rishta hai.

Devraj k saath Rajveer baahar garden me aaya..kuchh zaroori baat karni thi usko..

Dev--Kahiye..

Raj--Yeh jo..aaj jo..thi..yeh Mohtarma..Nazar Jaan..kaafi charche hain inke naam k..


Dev--Haan..

Raj--Yeh ,geet bhi unhone khud likha..aur naachi bhi woh..


Dev--Haan..

Raj--Aap kuchh mehsoos karte hain is Nazar Jaan k baare me?

Dev--Ek minute..yeh kaisa sawal hai?

Raj--Let's talk frankly,Kunwar Saab..Suniti aur mere beech me jo bhi kuchh tha ya hai..uski ek bahut hi ghalat tasveer aapke mann me bani hai..bachpan me bahut si baatein hoti hain..par puri zindagi un baaton ko lekar hum baith nahi sakte..bachpan me insaan ka dil bahut saare khayal aur kalpana se kuchh dhundhli tasveer banata hai..par haquiqat kuchh aur hi hoti hai..


Dev--Humari Patni k zindagi ka ek bahut ahem hissa hain aap..is baat se inkaar karenge aap?


Raj--Main inkaar nahi karta..Suniti dost hai meri..rahegi..haan ho sakta hai k agar main Army me nahi gaya hota..yaa boarding school me nahi gaya hota..toh shaayad Suniti meri hi Patni banti..par sach yehi hai k woh aapki Patni hain..bachpan me kahi aur sochi kuchh baaton par dhyaan de kar puri zindagi is tarha...aur woh bhi..Nazar Jaan k lia..

Dev--Nazar Jaan humare lia koi maaine nahi rakhti..humare aur uske beech koi rishta nahi hai..Gaohar Jaan k kothe ki hai..Gaohar Jaan mehmaan hain..isse zyada kuchh nahi..geet likhti hai..aur uske geeton ko sur me dhaal kar koi aur gaati hai aur naachti hai..aaj hi Nazar Jaan ko naachte hue dekha humne..ab tak sirf woh mehfil me baithi rehti thi..aur kuchh nahi..


Raj--Achha?Kabhi gaaya nahi Nazar Jaan ne?Aaj hi pehli baar gaaya?


Dev--Nahi toh..Nazar Jaan ne gaana nahi gaaya..woh toh sirf naach rahi thi..aapne dhyaan nahi dia..geet koi aur gaa rahi thi..Nazar Jaan gaa nahi sakti..

Raj--Kyun?Itni besuri awaz hai?


Dev--Bhagwan ne awaz nahi di usko..bol nahi sakti..dekh sakti hai..likh sakti hai.. mehsoos kar sakti hai..par zahir nahi kar sakti shabdon k zarie..

Raj--Kyaa?Toh fir Gaohar Jaan ne usko apne kothe par bhi kyun rakha?


Dev--Jitna humen pata hai..bachpan me laai gayi thi Gaohar Jaan k paas ..ghareeb ghar ki thi..upar se goongi..paise laalach me becha gaya tha usko...Gaohar Jaan samajh gayi thi k jawan ho kar khubsurat banegi...issilia rakh lia usko apne paas..khair..thand badh rahi hai..andar chalte hain..Rajveer..Rajveer..kyaa hua ..kahan kho gaye aap?


Raj sach me hairan ho gaya tha..ek hi din me itni baatein saamne aa rahi thi..Raj ka nasha utarne laga tha..

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Raat gehri ho chuki thi..har taraf kohre ki chaadar chadh chuki thi..Devraj tab se apna gussa dabaye baitha tha..mehmaano k jaane k intezar me tha..Suniti ko yeh haque nahi k Devraj aur uske beech ki baatein woh baahar k logon ko bataye..Devraj apne kamre me gaya..uske table par aajke aaye hue daak pade the,kuchh zaroori chitthian..kuchh zameen k kagzat,kuchh kitaben..Suniti k lia ek khat tha..Devraj se raha nahi gaya..kyaa hai us khat me?Roop ne likhi hai..kyaa likha hoga?Devraj ne khat khol kar padhna shuru kar dia..

Suniti,

Apne hosh me reh,aise khulle aam paraye mardon se gale mat lagte fir..tu wahan kyaa kar rahi hai..tere saath kyaa ho raha hai..pal pal ki khabar hoti hai..Dewarsaa se teri shadi nahi hui hai..waapas unko apni zindagi me paane ka khayaal chhod de..kyunki teri taraf woh dekhengi bhi nahi,yeh baat main keh sakti hoon,kyunki Rajveer ko main bahut achhi tarah se jaanti hoon..Devraj k kareeb jaa Suniti..Rajveer k dil me tere lia jo izzat hai..woh nahi rahegi..agar tune khud ko nahi roka.Rajveer ki bhalai k lia..Suniti,usko mat ghaseet in sab me.


Roop Kanwar


Khat padh kar Devraj ko bahut hansi aai..aisa laga bahut kuchh saaf ho gaya..par logon ko kyaa hua hai?Rajveer ko sab Bhagwan ka darja kyun de rahe hain?Are..woh bhi insaan hai..Bhagwan banne k chakkar me apni insaani zarooraton ko pura nahi kar paaya toh ho gaya kalyan..khair yeh khat Suniti ko dena chahie ya nahi..Devraj yehi sochne laga..aise me Daasi aai..boli ,"Suniti Kanwarsaa aapko bula rahi hain..keh rahi hain..raat kaafi ho chuki hai.."

Dev--Aate hain..

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Kal tumhara intezar karoonga,wahi jagah,jahan pehli baar mile the..agar mujh par yakeen ho toh aana..

Naina ne khat ko faadh k fek dia.Yeh khat kisne likha hai Naina samajh rahi hai..jab woh laut rahi thi toh haveli ki ek daasi ne usko dia yeh khat.Abhi bhi Rajveer usse milna chaahta hai?Yeh sab hone k baad bhi?

Udhar Officers Mess me...

Captain Rathore se baat ho rahi thi Raj ki..

Rathore--Kyaa hua?Aaj bade chup hain?

Raj--Balaa se nazar mila kar aaye hain..

Sodhi--Haan bhai..Balaa khud gaa rahi thi k tose naina laage..bhai waah..Nazar Jaan ne mehfil saja di..kyaa baat..khush kitta..


Major Banerjee aaye..woh nahi gaye the..unko zaroori patrol duty par jaana pada..

Banerjee--So..boys..had fun?

Chudhury--Haan Dada..it was great..aapni jaanen ..that Rana Family is the relative of Lt.Shekhawat..


Banerjee--Is that so?Shekhawat?

Shekhawat--Yes Sir..Suniti Kanwarsaa..I mean..Kunwar Devraj Rana ki Patni meri Bhabhi Roop Kanwarsaa ki Bahen hain..


Banerjee--Ohh..you were the guest of honour I guess..


Shekhawat--No..the occassion was different..lambe waqt se Suniti bimaar thi..ussike theek hone ki khushi me yeh jashan hua..


Banerjee--Good..okay,time to sleep boys..kal subha practise session hai..get ready for that..good night.

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"Ainda tameez se pesh aana.."..

Devraj ne yeh kaha..uske pahle hua yeh k..Devraj ne Suniti ko Roop ka khat dia..khat padh kar Suniti ko gussa aaya k Roop us par jasoosi karva rahi hai..aur usse badi baat aisi ghatia baat Devraj k saamne aai..sara gussa Devraj par gaya..usne Suniti ka khat padhne ki himmat kaise ki?Suniti Devraj ka geereban pakad k puchhne lagi ,"Itni himmat..mere khat padha aapne?Kyun kia aisa.."..Devraj ne Suniti ko aur kuchh kahne ka mauka nahi dia..


Suniti k honthon par kaala sa daag ho gaya tha..


Suniti ne fir se badtameezi ki..jaan boojh kar..Devraj ne is baar bhi saza dia usko..aur jaan boojh kar ki gayi badtameezi ki saza toh zyada hi hogi..


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Girival Mahel,Rajputana

"Aaj jaana zaroori hai?"..Randheer ne Roop ki taraf dekha..sawal Roop ne hi kiaa hai..

"Aaj koi khaas baat hai?",Randheer ne poochha...Roop ne kaha "Mere paas hone k lia aapko khaas wajah chahie?Kya itna kaafi nahi main aapki Patni hoon?"

"Listen Roop..I don't have the time..laut kar baat karta hoon.." ,Randheer jaane laga..

"Achhi baat hai ..aaj akhri baar roka tumko...aainda nahi rokoongi..ab jo mere dil me aayega,main bhi wahi karoongi..khandan k izzat aur sanskar ka bojh main dhhoungi..jaan lo.."
,yeh keh kar Roop chup ho gayi..

"Kyaa karengi aap Roop Kanwar?Itni himmat hai kisme k Randheer Singh Shekhawat ki Patni Roop Kanwar ki taraf nazar utha kar bhi dekhe?"..Randheer ne poochha..

"Bahuton k naam mujhe pata nahi Kunwar Randheer..par haan..ek toh hai pure Rajputane me.."..Roop ne kaha ..

"Jaan sakte hain kaun hai woh Bahadur insaan?"..Randheer ne poochha..

"Itni jaldi bhool gaye?Aapke param priya mitra,Kunwar Arjun Singh Kableshwar.."
..Roop ne jawab dia..

Randheer ka haath utha Roop ki taraf..Roop ne kaha ,"Chaliye..aapki mardangi issi taraha mehsoos kar loon..Kunwar Randheer.."


Baat us waqt ki hai jab Arjun aur Randheer gahre dost hua karte the,par Roop se Randheer ki shaadi ko le kar is dosti me darrar padi,nohbat yehan tak aai k kai baar Randheer par jaanleva humla bhi hua.Kisi tarha Roop ko pata chal gayi k in sab k peechhe Arjun ka haath hai.Arjun ne Roop k paas apne mahel se ek rakkasa ko bheja ,ek sandesa k saath..

Randheer ki jaan par se khatra jaa sakta hai..agar aap humari ho jaaye toh..mere mahel ko besabri se aapka intezar hai..


Roop jab yeh sun rahi thi tab doosre kamre me Randheer aram kar raha tha..zakhmi tha..Roop uske paas le gayi Arjun ki rakkasa ko..Roop ne kaha,"Randheer ki jaan par se khatra jaa sakta hai..agar aap humari ho jaaye toh..mere mahel ko besabri se aapka intezar hai...aisa Kunwar Arjun ne humare lia sandes bheja hai..."

Randheer tabhi uthne laga,"Itni himmat uski..aur is rakkasa ko..is naachnewali ko..isko goli maarni hai..koi hai..Roop ..aap andar jaaiye.."

Roop ne Randheer ko shaant kia.."Aapse kuchh kaha?Nahi..sandes humare lia hai..jawab bhi humen dena hoga..hum de rahe hain jawab.."..Roop ne kaha us rakkasa se ,"Kunwar Arjun Singh Kableshwar se kehna..agar humare Pati ki jaan bach sakti hai ..toh unke paas hum jahannam tak aayenge..par mushkil yeh hai..k Kunwar Randheer ki roz ki har tarha ki zarooraton ko kaun puri karegi?Inko kaun dekhega?Arjun Singh agar apni ghar ki Bahen ya Beti ya Bahu ko Randheer ki bistar tak pahoocha de..toh hum khushi khushi aa sakte hain unke paas.."



Randheer baahar nahi gaya..Ranisa Jayanti Devi ne dekha k unka Bada Kunwar baahar nahi gaya..kamre ka darwaza bandh kar lia usne..andar se..


Edited by yakkudimag - 15 years ago
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