Once Upon A Bards Verse! - Page 17

dear grumpy,

i thought yesterday was the HAVE to verse night?

i still see nothin'... *hmm*

for all the times you have woken up claiming you checked first thing for an update, i swear, i did exactly that...

you EVEN watched the movie, i reckon...

krodh vinashee, vivek ko maar ra :S

:( missed the verse which ought to have been,
exodus!

(lol - if someone can catch the obv super info, you're free to kill me... :P )

@Nidha ....sorry to hear about the girl, one of your students?

@Sookie ...thanks for the comment. I put the first n last lines in coordance precisely cause i thought poets do that (i don't read poetry otherwise but it was my assumption :P). I like the last word in that line btw :)

@nj...late it is....but i know the end would make you happy-er. :P

~Shaping Crystal Ball~

Scattered prints of water, identical snowflakes,

Blurring the view of the rider, glistened adroitly

Flowing noiseless in thick bushes, rustling coconuts,

Punching rocks in letters, released in the black sky

Snaking the ruins of icy sand, stinging sweet liquor

Spirals throwing mojos, in the veins of the maze.

~.~

Circling in the hoops, dangling heavy on each side

Searching silk threads on skin, dicing creatures

Dwarfing in the tall rusty boulders, gold diggers

Starred boots pocketing waist chains, yellow era

Bold redness ornaments, christening tough arms

Rapt on jingling Arabic beats, visions savored.

~.~

This is a random Poem 😉...that shall have more additions...till i am fed up of it :P

Cheers!

~nijaL 🤓

its still what i said before, for me... visions of a dream... cause of the pace it travels points and times, in vivid impressions...

although, after u mentioned the windshield, i can trace a real connective pattern in at least para 1 :)

and para 2... i need to stop reading ur edited versions... :P

but, yes, now i see the belly dancer of course, although i personally still see a person with headphones, rain outside, eyes closed, capturing the visions alone, on arabic beats! :)

hugZ :D
~jauZ

edit # *i can't recall*

anyways... so... the big snap shot... rain scene... para 1 obv... visions of the girl in rain line 1-2 para 2, then the objects line 3... the picture of her surrounding... and line 4 vision of a guy... him ...,and the boulders in line three, he hides behind, watching... and this WHOLE thing... is in the head... a running movie to beats of an instrumental arabic... headphones snapped... rain outside... yup yup yup!!! thats it! for me!

=) (breathing easier!)

Okay I am back again!
I read the first line in the first post of this thread. "I write for myself".
I just chanced upon this quote and thought you might like it.

"Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self." - Writer, Cyril Connolly

Nice, no?

Sookie

Originally posted by: missypatel

@Nidha ....sorry to hear about the girl, one of your students?

No she is not actually a old story near about 12 years she was my Junior

:D me lubs you very very much...*armaan style*

Luks like you are making up for all our lack of updates with your overdose of versing, and um not complaining at all :D dude, unlike EVERYONE else, i didnt get a WORD when i read it the first time...it was a stringent of words i have not read together before :D so pata hai tujhe, kitni unintellectual hun, so kuch samajh nee aya tha :D i think the name you gave it was very apt, cuz it did look like a world settled inside a crystal ball...you know how there are those tiny little cute crystal balls with snow flakes in them, and u jiggle them and its a world full of snow? Dude, i used to love those things...still do.,.had tons in childhood....aaah! anyways...

first para...does look like a girl's pov, dunno why...perhaps cuz you intended it to be? DUH ME!! tell me again, HOW do you come up with words again...cuz if its your crap 'look around the room and it comes to me' theory, dont think um gna believe :D dude, you are SO FRIKKING GOOD at this, you have no idea!! it's like, you create a whole scenario with a few words, a feat people fail to do with paras of them!! fav line in the first para was : Punching rocks in letters, released in the black sky...amazing tha!!

the second para makes me think of a guy, hiding behind...somewhere, brooding, tough...closely observant, looking at a girl, perhaps...dancing to Arabic tones!! the jingling bell, it reminded me of an Arabic belt i had...remind me to get it back from someone i gave it to! hmmm...anyways...:D it seemed like a vision of a crystal ball, true, as i said...but could be a dream too? okay, um crap at analyzing...SO...chuuummmmaaazz!! *zorr se* i loved it!!

KLM :D *just remembered it* muaaah!

Kid.

Hey Nij!