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Posted: 16 years ago

Jovial laughs, Windy walks, Lonely Heart, Bitter truth

I cried.

Silly jokes, Tickling breeze, Happy spirit, Sweet Lies

I laughed.

Its different; you say, I try to figure why

I've lost you somewhere, I want to know how

It's complicated and strange, what could I do

Wish for a miracle, maybe you just need me.

I always knew, but never told you , till now

Scared I was, unsure of your response

It wasn't intended, but can't deny it happened

I didn't chose this day, the moment chose itself

I admit and accept, always knew, never told you

You were very nice to me, not the same anymore

I did when I shouldn't have but I really did like you.

Watery eyes, tears that don't want to flow

Tight lips, smile that refuses to falter

Glowing body, blood fighting its way to the tips

Stranger! Open arms, warm touch, click of a bond

I believe you, "I love to make you smile."


This is not my usual style nor usual flow (spontaneity). Its a conscious effort of writing specifically what's in it..just to remember it..this way.

Whoever reads it.....please tell me what you think of it...cause i want to know (this once)...if i penned it the way i thought of it in my mind...

Thanks!

Edited by missypatel - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: missypatel


Jovial laughs, Windy walks, Lonely Heart, Bitter truth

I cried.

Silly jokes, Tickling breeze, Happy spirit, Sweet Lies

I laughed.

Its different you say, I try to figure why

I've lost you somewhere, I want to know how

It's complicated and strange, what could I do

Wish for a miracle, maybe you just need me.

I always knew, but never told you , till now

Scared I was, unsure of your response

It wasn't intended, but can't deny it happened

I didn't chose this day, the moment chose itself

I admit and accept, always knew, never told you

You were very nice to me, not the same anymore

I did when I shouldn't have but I really did like you.

Watery eyes, tears that don't want to flow

Tight lips, smile that refuses to falter

Glowing body, blood fighting its way to the tips

Stranger! Open arms, warm touch, click of a bond

I believe you, "I love to make you smile."


This is not my usual style nor usual flow (spontaneity). Its a conscious effort of writing specifically what's in it..just to remember it..this way.

Whoever reads it.....please tell me what you think of it...cause i want to know (this once)...if i penned it the way i thought of it in my mind...

Thanks!

Ok I think I am going to cry now...Niju this was so beautiful!!!! I can't write poetry but I sure love reading it. this was really moving Niju and somehow I can relate to the verse...Life is funny sometimes
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: spln

Equality of Understanding~

Glowing stars in blue water streaks
Sinking lust in glaring eyes
The firm hold waving in the crowd
Crawling spiders escaping the fire
Pick a finger or count some digits
Wink an eye or suck on a thumb
Deep holes on cheesy smiles
Painted nails slicing the ground..
A mistaken match or lost game
Luck strikes only for the emerged winners
Love showers only for ones who deserve...



u know, like an instrumental track and a slide show? no lyrics?? the words just... didn't last long enough for me to check, they became pictures too soon... and everytime i read one of ur phases nij, it makes me wonder if i underestimate u, or overestimate how much i know u... ur metaphors are just... another level... and i know i say this every time! ... but really... i can never think, u, and the poet behind these verses, to be the same SO many times... if i think of just the message, its always u... if i think of its words, its like ur a split personality! .... not like u would know lolzz!

not versing back, not now anyways... but the last line really makes me think... the same that somewhere u must to... why...

love ya wyfy!

~h/j/p/b/c :D

Ok that last line really really touches the heart, it makes you want to take a moment to breath and catch up. Niju I agree with NJ it's so hard to decipher that these heart rendering words have been penned by you. This just proves that people can surprise you in so many ways...
This is just so random but I these lines in my head...they are very amateur because I can't do poetry but here is a little something I just had to get out.

I walk and think it is you walking beside me

I laugh and think it is you laughing inside me

I fear to talk afraid it's your name that I may take

I fear to dream afraid that I may never wake

I think of life without you and it pricks me like a thorn

Though our time spent was beautiful, I wish it were never born.

I am afraid of walking alone, is that why your shadow walks beside me?

I am afraid to laugh alone, to accompany is that why you laugh inside me?

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Posted: 16 years ago
heyya nijaL... hmm..truly..this poem was different than ur usual ones...
and i just loved it soooo much...i guess this one has to be my favourite of all ur verses...
i just dont know..but it really touched me, somehow, deep down...
it was beautiful nijal...extremely beautiful...
each verse,each line, invokes a great deal of emotion...
fabulous hun :)
awesome...
*hugs*
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: hinanaziri

here u go shriya,this ones the latest

I trust you, to wait for me, till forever,
cause i promise, to make it to your side, one day.
I shall love you tomorrow; my lone star.



....nijaL



*sigh* I am already in a super depressing mode and now I am truthfully on the verge of crying...Niju I don't know whether I should hug you or smack you for this (that latter is a joke)
You are undeniably brilliant Niju and I don't think there is anything more that I can say.
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Posted: 16 years ago
Jovial laughs, Windy walks, Lonely Heart, Bitter truth I cried.
Silly jokes, Tickling breeze, Happy spirit, Sweet Lies I laughed.

Its different you say, I try to figure why
I've lost you somewhere, I want to know how
It's complicated and strange, what could I do
Wish for a miracle, maybe you just need me.
I always knew, but never told you , till now

Scared I was, unsure of your response
It wasn't intended, but can't deny it happened
I didn't chose this day, the moment chose itself
I admit and accept, always knew, never told you
You were very nice to me, not the same anymore
I did when I shouldn't have but I really did like you.

Watery eyes, tears that don't want to flow
Tight lips, smile that refuses to falter
Glowing body, blood fighting its way to the tips

Stranger!
Open arms, warm touch, click of a bond
I believe you, "I love to make you smile."



read it this morning, the first i logged in like 4 days or what? i'm guessing less and it feels much more :D
u know nij, there was stuff i was thinking 'bout this morning, remind me to tell u what... when we meet :) which was random as ever... i was thinkin' of how, and what, of fiction and reality ws created... IS created... alwayz...

and somehow when i read this creation it made me think of two diff spots, two different people, two different cities, and two different times... the two different people, neither was u, remind me to tell u this as much :D

i was tellin' him last niht about u and me, and details and things, with the pictures, and the dialogues and things... and sometimes, more times thannot, its like i'm narrating a part of my life to myself... like i need to not remind myself of the details nor recall them but to realize them :) its a good and bad feeling all at once to do that... to realize something that was a moment that passed us, for even as it continues to live forever, when we realize more about it everytime we think, its like, for me that is, like i wish i could live it now and feel this added detail in exactly that moment... its not like something i experienced and realized later, but like something...erm... u know like going to an amusement park u will go only once in a life and later realization of this one ride u missed? bad comparison here, lets call this ride the ferris, its like having sat on it and having become cognizant of what it holds only much later, when there's no going back to it... (ps: i think i know why all those times i missed it inevitably i did... the first had to be the way it was :) )

aite... seriously now, to the verse... i know u said u were conscious of it this once... n i cant say i dont see it, but, u will realize when u read it no after this comment there is still so much in it which has just come like it does to u... a thought u thought perhaps but the words only staring back like u only just read n knew them!! :) the first two lines... i have a thing for... they helped me discover my *new* stat btw, and yeh, much belated, i finally got it done!!! ps: its strange what came to my mind in working thse two lines was entirely, at least much different from what the stat is... its just the wind that had to be...

lovya hun, sometimes, most times, mostly all times, i know not how much!
~jauz
Edited by spln - 16 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: missypatel


This bit i had posted earlier...
{..added one more..easy to guess :D...dedicated to a nutter whose busy studyin for her final boards...goes to you Kratz..miss you tons..hope this one makes you smile..luvya gurl!🤗}

~Armaan~

Our hunk was such as

sharp features, handsome body

well-built and strong.

Opposed to,

our attractive lady with

flaxen curves, sleek body

delicate and soft.

Eye them collectively

one molded soul.

* * * * *

~Riddhima~

Fine, funny and flirt

clearly charismatic one was.

Smart, simple and sweet

deeply delightful the other.

Which ones who

are you inquisitive to know?

I'll let you choose

I think I will,

but while you do,

a word of direct.

Think once, think twice

think again if you may,

my choice blissfully shines,

through the lines.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

~AR~

A tale of two,

but the story of several,

they were one soul

with two bodies,

Or so everyone saw

and that was what,

they showed,

all assumptions

cast away as

uncalculated proofs.

* * * * *

Their first meet,
would never repeat.
Out went the ball,
from his slippery hands
it came to a stop
as it hit her with a bang.

The battle had begun
as they played some ball.
It was surely, an unforgettable
silent brawl.

One shot, two shots
and they hit some more.
The match was over
but neither a proud victor.
I am marvelous, your shinning knight
hey you lady in white
what are you doing tonight?
I am dazzling, always polite
stay away from me
I am a threat blight.

One would quarrel
the other would struggle,
both of them
ready to strangle.
Neither of them
cared much,
Ouch! Ahh!
was all they could mumble.

Something there was
about her,
startling feeling it was,
time and again, it refused to
prevent the hastening beats
of his heart.
What, when, why, and how
were now his constant thoughts.

One glimpse at her,
walking through the door,
"Basket" escaped his lips
forming twinkles on his tips.
He knew then,
that was HIS name for HER,
a name he'd formed
for the mysterious frame.

Bickering and squabbling
their typical routine,

entertain one and all
with their constant battling.
No word, no reason
was looked-for anymore
for they had created
a world of their own
on the make-believe shore.

Snakes and ladder,
cards and dice,
all times favorite
were left far behind.
The new ones
like the good numbered Asians
were the developing events of
fire and ice v/s sugar and spice.

He was the igniter
of the burning fire.
The fair lady,

quite the reverse
the cooling sapphire
of the freezing pyre.

Burning flames
the root of the fire
rising fame
the shinning desire.
Such as he was
Now wouldn't you admire?

Burning flames
the sparkly igniter
cooling breeze
the soothing bemaster.

~~~~~

i never get Enough of the two,
who looked their best in
red,

i miss AR and dmg after reading these lines. you brought back those early episodes, their fights, the sparks that flew on screen and you've probably noticed, i've left out the crowdning crew for this post, but they are just that for me when it comes to ar, crowd. i'm going to stalk your entire thread now, okie heres a q, you wrote on the first post here, "Lastly...it was Sam who came up with the idea and NJ who agreed grinning on the chance to get me to write anything..well so i'll be writing verses on fictions either written by fic writers or else just working up my own story....lets see how it goes...!!"
i should probly read more, but have you written verses on fictions by other writers? and i stumbled on this thread, as i was looking for something else...but i was looking for this sometime back, because i didnt i probly stumbled on something else back then😆



Edited by olive_green - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
Just read this one...the latest one...damn, you are really good at this :S and i dont know one thing abt poetry, so kuch ziada nee bol sakti, only that this one, i wanted to read till the end...that gripping :D

Glowing body, blood fighting its way to the tips
Stranger! Open arms, warm touch, click of a bond

These lines....they are playing in my mind for quite some time now :D guess they will throughout today, then....cant comment long, u knw why...:D....lovya niiijjjaa!!
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Posted: 15 years ago

🥱 ...

*edit*

Was going to get back to this tomorrow...but sleep left my lids now...so here i am!

@Prathi ...Thx..always look fwd to your comments ...i am still waiting for the time...you'll leave me a comment where you tell me ..." Heya Nij! "......." It was okay! ....hahah! 😉

@Sunaina...Appreciate your comments...its nice to have you drop a few lines despite my irregularity with versin! Thanks! 😊

@Sim.. Kaha ho? Missing yah! 😕
Tumhara comment...made me laugh soooo much...that i ended up with a headache (tears that followed the laugh 😆)...but i dunno how and why you liked them SO much...i'd never know!....but it was sucha surprise to hear those lovely comments from you (ish! my toungues rolling sweetness...run ppl)...appreciate it..
lovya mucho 🤗 (for all those tears that stopped mid-way)

@nj ...nothing to say hba! bas...kaha hai? mera dimaag dukhra...itni gaali dekar

@Aria ... yehhh!! AR had it all...and they took it all when they left (rather wer shown the door 😭)...it was some random day in the lib....few hours straight that was all i did...verse...just cause i was high on it ...😛 yet even my words for others couldn't beat AR...the couple they are...always will be!☺️

:D i should edit my first page yeh...i never got around to actually verse on an entire fiction...too much work...and not my capability nah! versing...mostly never comes to me forcefully..hence...i stick to riting at random times.....to will or when (like you know) i absolutely love fiction updates...

Thx for the commentO! 😃

@ Pebbz ....its been lying here for ages...and now you see it! and you liked! yayyy!! 😆 you know me too well to disagree...i don't know the next thing (to yours! 😛) about poetry....but heck..it refuses to leave my side...🐷


Thanks ppl...for the nicey comments...you all ROCK ⭐️

cheers! 🥱 (for real!)

~nijaL
Edited by missypatel - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago

Wanted to make something (hmm!) but it didnt execute 😭 and made something else.....look at my status (😎) ...re-read some comments...and scribbled this...abstract piece...on you-CAN-guess-who!


Am I alone or are You with me?

In the midst of the bulging mass

Each one daring their tolerance

One mistake, the leaves crushed below

Leave me alone, I cry in pain and fear

Who are you? How long is forever?

Is tomorrow a lingering US?

Nervous, dismayed, the future hazy ahead

Grant me this wish, I'm desperate to follow

Squashed below the toes, deep within your heart

Fluttering wings, give me a chance, I stand

Renounce my faults, believe your heart,

Touch my fingers, walk besides me, again

World. My lies;Your Truth. I; You.

Ultimately, settling on something definite

Hear, See, Feel, Capture her commanding wet smile.


The referral in the last line....is me! 😊 Its blind faith or stupid belief or passionate desire....whatever it is...i don't want to figure...but its there...to stay...like the bond that formed on 2nd dec 08....

I haven't read it all together...and still hope...those who agree with me (i know quite a few :))....would see & understand...what can't be put in words...! It's just another verse....after all! 😛

cheers!

~nijaL

Edited by missypatel - 15 years ago

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