I am promised u I will Read all the chapters and will comment on it '
Here r the comments per chapter which I wrote after reading each chapter '.
1st chapter: Loved the instant attraction b/w the pair .. Loved it that Nups has to deal with Jealousy from day one .. as u said "worst and best together" LoL ' great one 😆😆
2nd chapter : Yaar tussi great ho' loved everything about the chapter . u mixed the learning and growing to know each other beautifully '.From George W Bush's wrinkled forhead to John Abraham's dimples 😆😆 everything was perfect . loved the officially the Best Day of Nupur 's Life..... and surprise and surprise twins '. u have wonderful imagination .
3rd chapter : Nice to read about Mayank's feeling ' good to know somebody was shaking his foundation ' but one thing was in my mind through out the chapter what happened in his past ' what bad memories ??? as u said'.. were they thinking about each other in the same way ???
4th Chapter : ''Struggling to get a grip on himself, Mayank slammed the door behind him and ran directly into his room. He threw his body onto his bed and for the first time in many years, he cried........
Sunita I am struggling with myself yaar ''what secret !!! what happened in his past ????' thank God I am reading when I can quickly go to the next chapter ' how did other Mayurians survived the mystery I don't know !!!
5th Chapter :- don't left us hanging yaar ' do tell what happened ??
6th chapter : u said it all with one line " She'd once read, "the heaviest to carry around is a broken heart". Engaged to someone else that one was a shook' until I found out'''.. no ' r guy is still available 😆😆.....'. good one '.
Chapter 7,: U said all urself darling sometime only time can tell Loved the bro and sis scene also
Chapter 8 : wow ''''' It was so romantic . so beautifully written ' the best letter I have ever read.. so sweet ' do guys like the Mayu even exist 2day ( sigh..) simply loved it ' 😃
"Just because you get food-poisoned once doesn't mean you stop eating forever". 😆😆 funny line but sooooooooo true to heart '!!
Chapter 9 :_ U should be a mystery romance writer .. U left me on edge once again' It was not fair Sunita' yaar girl after every chapter u moves a step forward. Lovely ' the scene at the beginning that phone call was so sweet ' and romantic ' I like Susan Elizabeth Phillips romantic comedy novels a lot ' I think u write just like her ' Same touching , romantic as well as funny scenes . Wondeful '
chapter 10 : the struggle in both of them was beautifully potrayed and expressed . Loved it yaar
chapter 11 :- wonderful scene "They are just like you, pure and innocent" ' he had told her on one of their Friday night movie outings.
"Innocent?? You think I'm innocent?" ' she'd taken her dupatta off teasingly and put it across Mayank's neck pulling him closer to her. She'd breathed close to his face, her lips were close but hadn't touched his skin. She spoke his ears in a seductive voice "you still think I'm innocent ?". She'd kissed his cheeks , both of them , and moved towards his lips ' "I'm actually very bad" ' her soft lips met his own. He smiled and tenderly kissed her neck. "I still think you are innocent""
amazing scene this is one of the best scene I have ever read in any romantic novel , bk etc ... girl ur just brillinat ....
loved to read about the inner battle of Mayu while filling the form ... u potray the whole scene with dictionary beautifully ... He wanted to resisit the urges but was not able to ignore his heart .... wonderful .... Here is a Pat and hug from my side ....👏🤗
this is my fav. chapter ( as yet excluding the last chapter... can't decide whether the last chapter was equal or better than this one ......)
I liked how u descirbe that Nups always say goodbye " He went through the old messages on his phone. Most of them were from Nupur, in fact all of them were from Nupur. She texted him every day , wishing him "Good Night" ' " I can't sleep without wishing you goodnight , something feels very adhura adhura"- she always said. He wondered , if Nupur would still wish him goodnight , after he was gone. He tried to guest the cost for an oversea text to Australia.
His phone buzzed right then. It read "OK, Mayank"
Ok?? ' that wasn't the response he'd been expecting...
He knew he'd hurt her. He wished.... If only wishes came true .." Wonderful scene yaar ...
Chapter 12 : Loved "How u wanted to do best for urself but still can't decide whether the best is to be the best to urself or be the best to the one u love ... I guess as a human we forget that .......... being the best to urself will only happen if u b the best to ur loved one ........ "loved to read Nups and Mayank both in that situation ..."
chapter 13 : another great one .... 👏👏
chapter 14 : Sajan may not be my fav couple but the way u potrayed it touched something in my heart .Loved Gunjan and Nupur sharing their inner feelings . Loved the light feelings ginjan stored in her heart for samrat
Chapter 15 :😆😆😆
Like Dexter without his Lab
Like SpongeBob without His pants
Like A guitar without its string
Like A Bird without his wings
Like John Abraham with his perfect body
Mayank without his Nupur would just be a Nobody..
U desrve a standing ovation👏
chapter 16 : this cahpter as I already said in my previous post is the chapter which I read first and it got me hocked to ur FF... this along with chapter 11 are my fav chapters
here is a hug and a kiss from me for giving us Mayurians a wonderful gift 🤗
Edited by SanaSarwar - 16 years ago
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